Work— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Votre réponse manque de fluidité et contient des phrases incomplètes. Essayez de structurer votre réponse avec une phrase principale claire, suivie de détails pertinents, en évitant les répétitions et les hésitations. Utilisez des phrases complètes et naturelles.

Example: I am currently a full-time homemaker after recently completing my bachelor's degree in economics. I take care of my young child and manage household responsibilities. Additionally, I am preparing for further studies to advance my career.

Suggestion: Votre réponse est un peu confuse et manque de clarté. Répondez directement à la question avec une phrase simple, puis ajoutez des détails en utilisant des mots de liaison pour rendre votre discours plus cohérent.

Example: I am not currently working because I am focusing on preparing for higher education abroad. Meanwhile, I am busy taking care of my children at home.

Suggestion: Votre réponse est répétitive et contient des erreurs grammaticales. Essayez de répondre directement, en évitant les répétitions, et utilisez des phrases complètes avec une bonne structure grammaticale.

Example: Although I am not currently working, I believe having a job would be beneficial because it would provide income to support my family and give me a sense of independence.

Suggestion: Votre réponse manque de clarté et contient des erreurs de temps et de structure. Formulez une réponse claire avec une phrase principale et des détails, en utilisant un vocabulaire approprié et des temps corrects.

Example: I would like to work as a teacher because it is my lifelong ambition. Teaching brings me joy and I find it very fulfilling.

Suggestion: Votre réponse est incomplète et manque de précision. Essayez de structurer votre réponse avec des phrases complètes, en expliquant clairement vos plans futurs avec des détails spécifiques.

Example: My future plan is to pursue higher education abroad. After completing my studies, I intend to return to my native village to serve the community and help those in need, especially the poor.

× Recently I have finished my bachelor degree in economics.

✓ Recently I finished my bachelor's degree in economics.

The present perfect tense 'have finished' is less appropriate here because the action is completed and specific in the recent past. Also, 'bachelor degree' should be 'bachelor's degree' to show possession.

× I have a little kid.

✓ I have a little child.

While 'kid' is informal, 'child' is more appropriate in formal speech. 'Little' is acceptable but 'a little kid' is informal; however, this is more style than grammar. No plural issue here, so this is acceptable.

× I look.

✓ I look after her.

The sentence 'I look.' is incomplete and unclear. It should be 'I look after her' to express caring for the child.

× Actually, I do not join in any job because I am not preparing myself to do a particular occupation.

✓ Actually, I do not have any job because I am not preparing myself for a particular occupation.

The phrase 'join in any job' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'have a job' or 'work'. Also, 'preparing myself to do' should be 'preparing myself for'.

× I am so busy to look after my kids.

✓ I am so busy looking after my kids.

The phrase 'busy to look after' is incorrect. The correct form is 'busy looking after' using the gerund form after 'busy'.

× I would be very glad because that time I have an income to support my family members and I I feel I will feel an freedom to my life.

✓ I would be very glad because at that time I would have an income to support my family members and I feel I will have freedom in my life.

The sentence has tense inconsistency and article misuse. 'That time I have' should be 'at that time I would have' to match the conditional mood. 'An freedom' is incorrect; 'freedom' is uncountable and does not take 'an'. Also, 'I I feel I will feel' is redundant; simplified to 'I feel I will have'.

× I would like if I will be a teacher because teaching profession is my aim of my life and when I get something to do more enjoyable that time I could choose teaching because teaching gives me a pleasure.

✓ I would like to be a teacher because the teaching profession is the aim of my life, and when I get something more enjoyable to do, I could choose teaching because it gives me pleasure.

'I would like if I will be' is incorrect; it should be 'I would like to be'. 'Teaching profession' needs the definite article 'the'. 'Aim of my life' is acceptable but 'the aim of my life' is better. 'I get something to do more enjoyable' is awkward; corrected to 'get something more enjoyable to do'. 'Gives me a pleasure' should be 'gives me pleasure' as 'pleasure' is uncountable.

× My future work plans are preparing myself for higher study.

✓ My future work plans are to prepare myself for higher studies.

The phrase 'are preparing' is awkward here; better to use the infinitive 'are to prepare'. Also, 'higher study' should be plural 'higher studies'.

× After that I will come back to my native village and serving people who will need to me.

✓ After that, I will come back to my native village and serve people who will need me.

'Serving' should be 'serve' to match the future tense 'will come back'. 'Who will need to me' is incorrect; it should be 'who will need me'.

× And I will also help the poor people after I get so.

✓ I will also help poor people after I achieve that.

The phrase 'after I get so' is unclear and incomplete. It should be replaced with a clearer phrase like 'after I achieve that' or 'after I complete my studies'.