Work— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Votre réponse est un peu longue et contient des erreurs grammaticales. Essayez de répondre directement à la question avec une phrase claire, puis ajoutez des détails spécifiques en utilisant des mots de liaison pour rendre votre réponse plus fluide et naturelle.

Example: I recently completed my bachelor's degree in economics, but currently, I am a full-time homemaker taking care of my young child and family. However, I am preparing to look for a job soon.

Suggestion: Votre réponse manque de clarté et contient des erreurs de vocabulaire. Répondez directement, puis expliquez avec des détails précis en utilisant un vocabulaire approprié et des mots de liaison pour améliorer la cohérence.

Example: I am currently not working, but if I get a good job opportunity, I would be very happy because earning an income would help support my family and give me peace of mind.

Suggestion: Votre réponse est confuse et manque de structure claire. Répondez directement à la question, puis ajoutez des détails spécifiques avec des mots de liaison pour rendre votre réponse plus naturelle et cohérente.

Example: I am not currently working, so I cannot say if the workplace is good. However, I am preparing for competitive exams like primary school teaching or BCS exams, and I also plan to study abroad for higher education.

Suggestion: Votre réponse est compréhensible mais contient des erreurs grammaticales et de vocabulaire. Essayez d'utiliser des phrases plus naturelles et un vocabulaire précis pour exprimer vos idées clairement.

Example: I would like to work in a place where I feel happy and appreciated for my hard work. For example, I want to be a primary school teacher.

Suggestion: Votre réponse est intéressante mais un peu confuse. Organisez vos idées avec une phrase principale claire suivie de détails spécifiques, en utilisant des mots de liaison pour améliorer la fluidité.

Example: I have several future plans. First, I want to complete my higher education abroad. Then, I plan to return to my native village to help people in need, especially the poor and vulnerable.

× Uh, as I have a little kids I am not only look after him but also the all family members.

✓ Uh, as I have little kids I not only look after them but also all the family members.

The phrase 'a little kids' is incorrect because 'kids' is plural and should not be preceded by 'a'. Also, 'him' should be 'them' to agree with the plural 'kids'. The article 'the' before 'all family members' should be placed before 'family members' only, and 'all' should not be preceded by 'the'.

× I am not only look after him but also the all family members.

✓ I not only look after them but also all the family members.

The verb phrase 'am not only look after' is incorrect. After 'I', the verb should be in base form 'look' without 'am' because 'look after' is a verb phrase and 'not only' is used to emphasize the verb. The correct form is 'I not only look after'. Also, 'him' should be 'them' to match plural 'kids'.

× Actually, I am not engaged with a job but if I uh get an opportunity to do more affluent, I I will be very glad as I have an income to support my family and it makes substance of freedom of mind.

✓ Actually, I am not engaged in a job but if I get an opportunity to be more affluent, I will be very glad as I will have an income to support my family and it will give me a sense of freedom of mind.

The correct preposition with 'engaged' is 'in' not 'with'. The phrase 'do more affluent' is incorrect; 'be more affluent' is appropriate. 'I I' is a repetition and should be corrected to 'I'. 'It makes substance of freedom of mind' is awkward; 'it will give me a sense of freedom of mind' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× Though I am not joined in an workplace but uh now I am trying to, but now I try to preparing myself for any competitive job exam such as primary school exams or BCS exams or going to abroad for higher education.

✓ Though I have not joined a workplace yet, I am trying now. I am preparing myself for competitive job exams such as primary school exams or BCS exams, or planning to go abroad for higher education.

The article 'an' before 'workplace' is incorrect because 'workplace' starts with a consonant sound; it should be 'a workplace'. The phrase 'joined in an workplace' is incorrect; 'joined a workplace' or 'joined the workplace' is correct. The sentence structure is awkward and needs to be split for clarity. 'Try to preparing' should be 'trying to prepare'. 'Going to abroad' should be 'going abroad' without 'to'.

× I would like a place to work where I find myself to be happy and that place could emphasize me for being an hard worker.

✓ I would like a place to work where I can find happiness and where the place encourages me to be a hard worker.

The phrase 'emphasize me' is incorrect; 'encourage me' or 'motivate me' is appropriate. 'An hard worker' is incorrect because 'hard' starts with a consonant sound; it should be 'a hard worker'. 'Find myself to be happy' is awkward; 'find happiness' or 'be happy' is better.

× Various types of future work plans are arising to me, such as I want to complete my higher education from abroad and will come back to my native village for supporting that people who are who will feel in danger, especially the poor people.

✓ Various types of future work plans are arising to me, such as I want to complete my higher education abroad and will come back to my native village to support those people who are in danger, especially the poor people.

The phrase 'supporting that people' is incorrect; 'support those people' is correct because 'people' is plural and requires 'those' as a demonstrative pronoun. 'Who are who will feel in danger' is redundant and incorrect; 'who are in danger' is correct. 'From abroad' is better expressed as 'abroad' in this context.