Work— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 답변이 자연스럽지 않고 문법 오류가 있습니다. 'I have worked for 7 years' 대신 'I have been working for 7 years'가 더 자연스럽고, 'not working uh for about two or three months' 대신 'I have not been working for about two or three months'로 수정하는 것이 좋습니다. 또한, 불필요한 'uh'를 줄이고 문장을 간결하게 만드는 연습이 필요합니다.

Example: I have been working for seven years, but I have not been working for the past two or three months.

Suggestion: 답변이 문법적으로 부정확하고 문장이 길어 이해하기 어렵습니다. 'a Seoul'은 잘못된 표현이며, 'I worked in Anyang, a suburb of Seoul'과 같이 명확하게 표현해야 합니다. 또한, 시제 일관성을 유지하고, 문장을 간결하게 구성하는 연습이 필요합니다.

Example: I used to work in Anyang, which is a suburb of Seoul. My last job was at an animal hospital in Seoul, where I worked for about one year.

Suggestion: 답변이 불완전하고 문장이 끊겨서 의미 전달이 어렵습니다. 'In my opinion, it was not bad because there were people of various ages and genders'와 같이 명확하고 완전한 문장을 사용해야 합니다. 또한, 'So it has'와 같은 미완성 문장은 피하고, 이유를 구체적으로 설명하는 연습이 필요합니다.

Example: In my opinion, it was a good place to work because people of different ages and genders worked together, which created a friendly atmosphere.

Suggestion: 답변이 불완전하고 반복적인 'uh'가 많아 자연스럽지 않습니다. 문장을 완성하고, 구체적인 이유를 덧붙여 답변을 풍부하게 만드는 연습이 필요합니다. 예를 들어, 'I enjoyed the collaborative atmosphere between young and older colleagues'와 같이 표현할 수 있습니다.

Example: I would like the place because I really enjoyed the atmosphere where young and older people worked together harmoniously.

Suggestion: 답변이 문법적으로 부정확하고 문장이 미완성되어 의미 전달이 어렵습니다. 'I plan to become a veterinarian in the United States, which is why I quit my job'와 같이 명확하고 완전한 문장으로 표현해야 합니다. 또한, 불필요한 반복과 'uh'를 줄이고 문장을 완성하는 연습이 필요합니다.

Example: I plan to become a veterinarian in the United States, so I quit my previous job to prepare for this goal.

× I have worked for a 7 years and currently I am uh, not working uh for about two or three months.

✓ I have worked for 7 years and currently I am, uh, not working for about two or three months.

'a 7 years' is incorrect because 'years' is plural and does not need the article 'a'. The correct form is '7 years'. This is a common error with quantifiers and articles.

× Uh, I used to work at Anyang that is a suburb of a Seoul and my last job was at Seoul for about 1 years and I work at an Animal Hospital.

✓ Uh, I used to work in Anyang, which is a suburb of Seoul, and my last job was in Seoul for about 1 year, and I work at an Animal Hospital.

'a Seoul' is incorrect because 'Seoul' is a proper noun and does not need an article. Also, '1 years' should be '1 year' because 'year' is singular when the quantity is one. Prepositions 'at' should be 'in' for cities and suburbs.

× Uh, I used to work at Anyang that is a suburb of a Seoul and my last job was at Seoul for about 1 years and I work at an Animal Hospital.

✓ Uh, I used to work in Anyang, which is a suburb of Seoul, and my last job was in Seoul for about 1 year, and I work at an Animal Hospital.

The preposition 'at' is incorrectly used with cities and suburbs. The correct preposition is 'in' when referring to locations like cities or suburbs.

× my last job was at Seoul for about 1 years

✓ my last job was in Seoul for about 1 year

'1 years' is incorrect because 'year' should be singular when the quantity is one.

× I in my opinion, uh, it was not bad because there were a lot of people mixed together in ages and gender wise. So it has.

✓ In my opinion, uh, it was not bad because there were a lot of people mixed together in terms of age and gender. So it was.

'I in my opinion' is incorrect; 'In my opinion' is the correct phrase. Also, 'ages and gender wise' is awkward; 'in terms of age and gender' is clearer. 'So it has' is incomplete and should be 'So it was' to match past tense.

× So it has.

✓ So it was.

'So it has' is an incomplete sentence and does not clearly convey the intended meaning. Changing it to 'So it was' completes the thought and matches the past tense context.

× Would you like the place where you work?

✓ Would you like the place where you work?

No correction needed here; sentence is grammatically correct.

× I think I would like it because I really enjoyed the atmosphere with, uh, young people and older people working together and the, uh.

✓ I think I would like it because I really enjoyed the atmosphere with, uh, young people and older people working together.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'and the, uh.' which is incomplete. Removing the incomplete fragment improves clarity.

× I have a, a future work plan at a US being a united, uh, American veterinarian and that's why I quit the job and currently I am.

✓ I have a future work plan to work in the US as a United States veterinarian, and that's why I quit the job. Currently, I am...

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'at a US' is incorrect; it should be 'in the US'. 'being a united, uh, American veterinarian' is awkward; 'as a United States veterinarian' is clearer. The sentence ends abruptly and should be completed or ended properly.