Work— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Try to avoid repetition and stammering to make your answer sound more natural and fluent. Also, provide a clear topic sentence followed by a brief explanation to improve structure and coherence.

Example: I have been working as a registered nurse for about five years in the emergency department of a hospital in Singapore.

Suggestion: Avoid filler words and repetition to improve fluency. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide more specific details about your role to enhance content and coherence.

Example: I work in the emergency department at Woodland Health Campus UMM in Singapore. My role involves resuscitating patients, monitoring their condition, and providing care during observation periods.

Suggestion: Focus on clear pronunciation and avoid unnecessary filler words. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically and provide specific reasons why it is a good place to work.

Example: Yes, it is a great place to work because of the strong teamwork culture and systematic management. Moreover, my colleagues are very supportive and helpful.

Suggestion: Avoid repetition and unclear phrases. Structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words. Be specific about what you like about your workplace.

Example: Yes, I love working in the emergency department because it was my first choice. I enjoy the fast-paced environment and the adrenaline rush that comes with handling urgent cases.

Suggestion: Reduce filler words and stammering to improve fluency. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide more specific details about your future plans.

Example: In the future, I plan to advance my career by moving into a management role, which will allow me to take on more responsibility and accountability.

× I'm I'm I'm working as a registered nurse for about 5 years in an emergency department in one of the hospitals in Singapore.

✓ I have been working as a registered nurse for about 5 years in an emergency department in one of the hospitals in Singapore.

The original sentence incorrectly uses the present continuous tense 'I'm working' to describe an action that started in the past and continues to the present. The correct tense is the present perfect continuous 'have been working' to express this ongoing duration.

× Well, I I am working in an emergency department in in an hospital in Singapore.

✓ Well, I am working in an emergency department in a hospital in Singapore.

The article 'an' is incorrectly used before the word 'hospital' which starts with a consonant sound. The correct article is 'a' before words starting with a consonant sound.

× It's called is a Woodland Health campus UMM.

✓ It's called Woodland Health Campus UMM.

The phrase 'is a' is redundant and incorrect here. The proper noun 'Woodland Health Campus UMM' should be stated directly without 'is a'.

× My role is is to take care of of a patient in an emergency situation such as resuscitation, tracking the patient and taking care of the patient in observation.

✓ My role is to take care of patients in emergency situations such as resuscitation, tracking the patients, and taking care of the patients under observation.

The original sentence inconsistently uses singular 'a patient' and plural actions. Since the role involves multiple patients, plural forms 'patients' and 'emergency situations' are appropriate for clarity and correctness.

× Well, I would say it's a very nice place to walk, especially because of The Walking culture and the people at there.

✓ Well, I would say it's a very nice place to work, especially because of the working culture and the people there.

The word 'walk' is incorrect; it should be 'work' to match the context. Also, 'The Walking culture' should be 'the working culture', and 'people at there' should be 'people there' as 'at' is unnecessary.

× Umm, I have, uh, we have a very system systematic, uh, management in there and the people I'm and working with, they are very supported and helpful.

✓ Umm, we have a very systematic management there, and the people I am working with are very supportive and helpful.

The phrase 'very system systematic' is incorrect; 'very systematic' is correct. 'People I'm and working with' is ungrammatical; it should be 'people I am working with'. Also, 'supported' should be 'supportive' to describe people who provide support.

× Yes, I love the place that where I work especially is is my first choice to be walking in an emergency department as a registered nurse because I love to walk in the 1st place first pace improvements and I love the adrenaline rush in an emergency department.

✓ Yes, I love the place where I work, especially since it is my first choice to be working in an emergency department as a registered nurse because I love to work on first place improvements and I love the adrenaline rush in an emergency department.

The phrase 'that where' is redundant; 'where' alone suffices. 'Is is' is a repetition error. 'Walking' should be 'working' to fit the context. 'Walk in the 1st place first pace improvements' is unclear and likely meant 'work on first place improvements'. The sentence needed restructuring for clarity and correct pronoun use.

× Uh, well, I plan to umm, advance my career in the future, especially by stepping into management role, uh, for more responsibility and accountability.

✓ Uh, well, I plan to advance my career in the future, especially by stepping into a management role for more responsibility and accountability.

The phrase 'stepping into management role' lacks the article 'a' before 'management role'. Adding 'a' is necessary to make the noun phrase grammatically correct.