Work— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer should be more grammatically correct and concise. Avoid redundancy and clarify your status clearly. For example, say "I am currently a university student at Osaka Number, and I also work part-time as a cashier at a convenience store."

Example: I am currently a university student at Osaka Number, and I also work part-time as a cashier at a convenience store.

Suggestion: Try to organize your answer with clear structure and correct grammar. Use linking words to connect ideas and be specific about your working hours and roles. For example, "I work at two places. First, I am a cashier at Lawson convenience store from 6:00 AM to 10:00 AM. Second, I work as kitchen staff at a restaurant."

Example: I work at two places. First, I am a cashier at Lawson convenience store from 6:00 AM to 10:00 AM. Second, I work as kitchen staff at a restaurant.

Suggestion: Your answer is unclear and incomplete. Focus on giving specific reasons why the place is good to work, and use linking words to connect ideas. For example, "Yes, working at the convenience store is good because I interact with customers daily, which helps improve my Japanese speaking skills. Also, working in the kitchen gives me valuable experience in food preparation."

Example: Yes, working at the convenience store is good because I interact with customers daily, which helps improve my Japanese speaking skills. Also, working in the kitchen gives me valuable experience in food preparation.

Suggestion: Your answer needs clearer structure and vocabulary. Correct the place names and explain why you like it. Use linking words to connect ideas. For example, "Yes, I like working at Lawson because it is located near Higashi-Omiya station, which attracts many customers, including tourists from China. This variety makes my job interesting."

Example: Yes, I like working at Lawson because it is located near Higashi-Omiya station, which attracts many customers, including tourists from China. This variety makes my job interesting.

Suggestion: Your answer is unclear and grammatically incorrect. Be specific and concise about your future plans. For example, "In the future, I want to become an electrical engineer specializing in lighting design. Eventually, I hope to own an electronics retail store."

Example: In the future, I want to become an electrical engineer specializing in lighting design. Eventually, I hope to own an electronics retail store.

× So now I am a students but I have a part time job as a cashier in the convenience stores.

✓ So now I am a student but I have a part-time job as a cashier in a convenience store.

The word 'students' is plural but the subject 'I' is singular, so it should be 'student'. Also, 'part time' should be hyphenated as 'part-time' when used as an adjective. 'The convenience stores' is incorrect here because the student refers to one store, so it should be 'a convenience store'.

× I'm currently working in two place.

✓ I'm currently working in two places.

The word 'place' should be plural 'places' because the student mentions working in two locations.

× The first one is a convenience store, it's called Lawson.

✓ The first one is a convenience store called Lawson.

The phrase 'it's called Lawson' is redundant after 'a convenience store'. Removing 'it's' makes the sentence clearer and more natural.

× I work as a cashier, it starts from 6:00 AM to 10:00 AM as a cashier's and the other one is the restaurant and work as a staff in the kitchen.

✓ I work as a cashier from 6:00 AM to 10:00 AM, and the other one is a restaurant where I work as kitchen staff.

The phrase 'as a cashier's' is incorrect; 'cashier's' is possessive and unnecessary here. Also, 'the restaurant' should be 'a restaurant' because it is mentioned for the first time. 'Work as a staff' is incorrect; 'staff' is uncountable, so 'work as kitchen staff' is correct.

× Yes, there are schools places to walk because in the convenience store I have to speak in customers every day, so it can improve my Japanese speaking skills and improve my Japanese language and the other in the case as a kitchen staff, uh, I get many experience about the.

✓ Yes, there are good places to work because in the convenience store I have to speak to customers every day, so it can improve my Japanese speaking skills and my Japanese language. Also, as kitchen staff, I gain a lot of experience.

'Schools places to walk' is incorrect; likely meant 'good places to work'. 'Speak in customers' should be 'speak to customers'. 'Improve my Japanese language' is better as 'improve my Japanese language skills'. 'Get many experience' is incorrect; 'experience' is uncountable, so 'gain a lot of experience' is correct.

× Yes, I like to place Lawson because it is in the Higashi Ometer in the Higashi Omega station.

✓ Yes, I like the place Lawson because it is in Higashi Ometer near Higashi Omega station.

'Like to place Lawson' is incorrect; it should be 'like the place Lawson'. Also, 'in the Higashi Ometer in the Higashi Omega station' is awkward; better to say 'in Higashi Ometer near Higashi Omega station'.

× So there's a lot of custom malls comes and I, I serve many cars, various cars or customer like Chinese.

✓ So there are a lot of customers who come, and I serve many different customers, such as Chinese.

'Custom malls comes' is incorrect; likely meant 'customers come'. 'Serve many cars, various cars or customer' is incorrect; 'cars' should be 'customers'. The sentence is corrected to reflect serving many different customers, including Chinese customers.

× I want to be an electrician engineering in electrical engineering especially for lightnings and design engineers so I want to own a electronic device shopping centers so.

✓ I want to be an electrical engineer, especially in electrical engineering for lighting and design. I also want to own an electronic device shopping center.

'An electrician engineering' is incorrect; it should be 'an electrical engineer'. 'Lightnings' is incorrect; the correct term is 'lighting'. 'Design engineers' is unclear here; likely meant 'design'. 'A electronic device shopping centers' has article and plural errors; it should be 'an electronic device shopping center'.