Work— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Câu trả lời của bạn có một số lỗi ngữ pháp và phát âm như 'an senior' nên là 'a senior', và câu hơi dài dòng, bạn nên trả lời ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và tự nhiên hơn.

Example: I'm a senior in high school, and I'm preparing for my college entrance exam next month.

Suggestion: Bạn trả lời không đúng trọng tâm câu hỏi vì câu hỏi hỏi về nơi làm việc nhưng bạn lại nói về trường học. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời có lỗi ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu không rõ ràng.

Example: I don't work yet because I'm still a student. I study at a top high school in my city.

Suggestion: Bạn trả lời đúng chủ đề nhưng câu trả lời có thể ngắn gọn và mạch lạc hơn. Ngoài ra, nên dùng từ vựng chính xác hơn như 'peers' thay vì 'peer'.

Example: Although I'm a student, I think my school is a great place to study because of its excellent environment, teachers, and friendly peers.

Suggestion: Câu trả lời có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác, câu không rõ nghĩa. Bạn nên trả lời rõ ràng, mạch lạc và dùng từ phù hợp.

Example: I don't know exactly where I will work yet since I'm still a student, but I plan to become an accountant. I hope the workplace will be flexible and friendly.

Suggestion: Câu trả lời khá tốt nhưng bạn nên tránh dùng từ thừa như 'she' sau 'my mother' và có thể mở rộng thêm một chút để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn.

Example: My mother is an accountant, and I want to follow in her footsteps by becoming an accountant myself in the future.

× I'm an senior in my high school and next month I have a an entrance exam that I can attend my college.

✓ I'm a senior in my high school and next month I have an entrance exam so that I can attend my college.

The article 'an' is incorrectly used before the word 'senior' which starts with a consonant sound, so it should be 'a senior'. Also, 'a an entrance exam' has a double article; it should be 'an entrance exam' because 'entrance' starts with a vowel sound. Additionally, the sentence structure is improved by changing 'that I can attend my college' to 'so that I can attend my college' for clarity.

× No now I'm still a student so I still I'm studying fencing high school which is a top one in my cities of high school.

✓ No, now I'm still a student, so I'm still studying at a fencing high school which is the top one among high schools in my city.

The sentence has awkward structure and missing prepositions. 'Studying fencing high school' is unclear; it should be 'studying at a fencing high school'. Also, 'which is a top one in my cities of high school' is incorrect; it should be 'which is the top one among high schools in my city'. Commas are added for clarity.

× It is one of the best high school in my city.

✓ It is one of the best high schools in my city.

The noun 'high school' should be plural 'high schools' because it refers to one among many. Also, 'in my city' is correct preposition usage.

× It's good from the environment, the teacher and even my peer.

✓ It's good in terms of the environment, the teachers, and even my peers.

The phrase 'good from the environment' is incorrect; it should be 'good in terms of the environment'. Also, 'the teacher' should be plural 'the teachers' and 'my peer' should be plural 'my peers' to match the context.

× Honestly I have no idea about the play I will work because I'm still a student, but now I have planned to become an accountant and I have that the environment there is plants can will be flexible and friendly.

✓ Honestly, I have no idea about the place where I will work because I'm still a student, but now I have planned to become an accountant and I hope that the environment there will be flexible and friendly with plants.

The sentence has multiple errors: 'play' should be 'place'; 'I will work' needs 'where' to connect; 'I have that the environment there is plants can will be flexible and friendly' is ungrammatical and unclear. It is corrected to 'I hope that the environment there will be flexible and friendly with plants' for clarity and correctness.

× Yeah, my mother, she is an accountant and I want to follow in her footsteps so that I can be an accountant too.

✓ Yeah, my mother is an accountant and I want to follow in her footsteps so that I can be an accountant too.

The phrase 'my mother, she is' is redundant; it should be 'my mother is'. This correction improves sentence structure and clarity.