Work— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to form a clear topic sentence and avoid repetition. Use correct verb tenses and structure your answer to be concise and natural.

Example: I'm currently working as a nurse and also teach nursing students in the classroom while supervising their clinical practice.

Suggestion: Your answer has grammatical mistakes and is incomplete. Use proper verb forms and complete your sentences. Add linking words to connect ideas and provide specific details about your work.

Example: I currently work at Bromrachine College of Nursing Authority, where I have been teaching pediatric nursing for over two years. My main responsibilities include classroom teaching and supervising clinical practice.

Suggestion: Your answer is unclear and contains many errors. Use correct grammar and vocabulary. Provide a clear reason and an example using linking words to make your answer coherent.

Example: Yes, it's a good place to work because my coworkers are friendly and always willing to help each other. For example, when I first started, a colleague taught me effective teaching methods.

Suggestion: Your answer is somewhat confusing and grammatically incorrect. Use clear sentences and correct prepositions. Provide specific reasons and link your ideas logically.

Example: Of course, I like working here because the college is near my hometown, so I can live with my family and work comfortably. It is convenient for me to commute and teach motivated students.

Suggestion: Your answer is incomplete and unclear. Avoid filler words and provide a complete, coherent response. Use linking words to explain your plans and reasons clearly.

Example: I plan to study pediatric nursing in Scotland to improve my knowledge and gain valuable experience, which will benefit my career development.

× I'm currently working I working hours in nursing regular and also I teach student in the classroom and supervising in the clinical practice.

✓ I'm currently working regular hours in nursing and also teaching students in the classroom and supervising clinical practice.

The original sentence incorrectly repeats 'working' and misuses verb forms. 'I working hours' is incorrect; it should be 'working regular hours'. Also, 'I teach student' should be 'teaching students' to maintain parallel structure and correct plural form. The phrase 'supervising in the clinical practice' is better as 'supervising clinical practice' for clarity and correctness.

× I currently working at Bromrachine College of Nursing Authority where I have been teaching for two years and four months.

✓ I am currently working at Bromrachine College of Nursing Authority where I have been teaching for two years and four months.

The sentence is missing the auxiliary verb 'am' before 'currently working'. The correct present continuous form requires 'am' + verb-ing. Without 'am', the sentence is grammatically incorrect.

× I specialize in pediatric work nursing and also my main responsibilities are teaching students in the classroom and also.

✓ I specialize in pediatric nursing and my main responsibilities are teaching students in the classroom.

The phrase 'pediatric work nursing' is awkward and likely incorrect; 'pediatric nursing' is the correct term. Also, the sentence ends abruptly with 'and also' which is unnecessary and should be removed for clarity.

× Yes, it's a good place to work because my coworker there are fairly and generate they are willing to help each other to summers.

✓ Yes, it's a good place to work because my coworkers there are fair and generous; they are willing to help each other during summers.

The word 'coworker' should be plural 'coworkers' to agree with 'are'. 'Fairly and generate' are incorrect adjectives here; likely intended 'fair and generous'. Also, 'help each other to summers' is incorrect; it should be 'help each other during summers' or 'in the summer'.

× Uh, for example. This is the first time in I come to this end, she teach me how to teach.

✓ For example, this is the first time I have come to this place; she taught me how to teach.

The sentence has tense errors: 'I come' should be present perfect 'I have come' to indicate experience up to now. 'She teach' should be past tense 'she taught' because the teaching happened in the past. Also, 'this end' is unclear; 'this place' is more appropriate.

× Of course, because our existence is in my hometown so it's nears my house, I can live with my family and do my work together in this place.

✓ Of course, because our existence is in my hometown, so it's near my house. I can live with my family and do my work here.

The phrase 'it's nears my house' is incorrect; 'near' is an adjective and does not take 's'. Also, the sentence is a run-on and should be split for clarity. 'Do my work together in this place' is awkward; 'do my work here' is clearer.

× So it's comfortable for me to go to my college and teach smart student in the classroom and.

✓ So it's comfortable for me to go to my college and teach smart students in the classroom.

'Student' should be plural 'students' to agree with the context. The sentence ends abruptly with 'and' which should be removed.

× I would like to study a Peter St. nursing in Scotland because it's helped me to uh, improve and have a knowledge gain from this experience and uh, I can get the profits from umm, uh.

✓ I would like to study pediatric nursing in Scotland because it will help me improve and gain knowledge from this experience, and I can benefit from it.

'It's helped me' is incorrect in this future intention context; 'it will help me' is appropriate. 'A Peter St. nursing' is likely a mishearing or typo for 'pediatric nursing'. 'Have a knowledge gain' is awkward; 'gain knowledge' is correct. 'Get the profits from' is better expressed as 'benefit from'.