Work— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid redundancy and correct verb forms and possessive punctuation (Tim Hortons). Use linking words like "and" or "so" only when needed.

Example: I finished my studies last year and now work as an assistant manager at Tim Hortons in Ottawa. I supervise cashiers and train new staff, and during busy shifts I step in to help the team maintain service speed.

Suggestion: Answer directly and avoid repeating information. Use one clear sentence about location and role, then one supporting sentence with specific examples. Complete sentences and avoid trailing off. Correct plural and possessive forms and verb agreement.

Example: I work at Tim Hortons in Ottawa as an assistant manager. I handle staff training and resolve customer complaints, which I enjoy because it lets me improve service and solve daily problems.

Suggestion: Start with a direct opinion and follow with specific reasons. Avoid repeating prior facts. Use linking words like "because" or "since" and give concrete examples of what makes it good.

Example: Yes, it is a good place to work because I get job satisfaction and practical experience. For example, dealing with customer complaints and busy shifts has improved my problem-solving and leadership skills.

Suggestion: Give a direct answer and one or two specific reasons without repeating prior details. Keep sentences complete and avoid trailing phrases. Use a linking phrase like "because" and include an example of a situation you enjoy.

Example: Yes, I enjoy working there because the job gives me satisfaction and helps me develop problem-solving skills. For instance, I like handling difficult customer cases and coaching staff during rush hours.

Suggestion: Answer clearly with correct wording and sentence structure. State the short-term and/or long-term plan, and give a specific step you are taking. Correct article use and word order: "a human resources manager" or "in human resources."

Example: I plan to move into a role related to my studies in human resources and business management. Specifically, I am looking for a position as a human resources manager and am applying to HR roles while building experience in staff training and conflict resolution.

× I have finished my studies last year and now I am working at Tim horton's as an assistant manager.

✓ I finished my studies last year and now I am working at Tim Hortons as an assistant manager.

Use simple past for a completed action with a past time expression 'last year'. 'Have finished' (present perfect) is not used with specific past time. Also brand name capitalization and apostrophe removed for plural 'Tim Hortons'.

× Moreover, my job responsibilities includes handling cashiers, training staff and helping team members during busy shifts.

✓ Moreover, my job responsibilities include handling cashiers, training staff and helping team members during busy shifts.

The subject 'responsibilities' is plural, so the verb must be plural 'include' rather than 'includes'.

× I'm currently working at Tim horton's in Ottawa as an assistant manager and my job responsibilities includes training staff, helping them out as well as handling customer complaints.

✓ I'm currently working at Tim Hortons in Ottawa as an assistant manager and my job responsibilities include training staff, helping them and handling customer complaints.

Use plural brand form 'Tim Hortons'. Correct subject-verb agreement 'responsibilities include'. 'Helping them out as well as handling' is wordy; 'helping them and handling' is clearer.

× I really like my job because it gives me satisfaction and it gives me a chance to solve problems and sometimes I.

✓ I really like my job because it gives me job satisfaction and a chance to solve problems.

The original sentence is incomplete and repetitive ('it gives me' twice and ends abruptly). Combine ideas, use 'job satisfaction' for clarity, and remove the unfinished fragment 'and sometimes I'.

× As I told you, I am working at Tim horton's in Ottawa as an assistant manager.

✓ As I told you, I work at Tim Hortons in Ottawa as an assistant manager.

Present simple 'I work' is more natural for a current job when stating purpose; also standardize brand name to 'Tim Hortons'.

× I would say it is a good place to work because it provides me satisfaction as well as it helps me in solving the problems and handling the customer complaints.

✓ I would say it is a good place to work because it gives me satisfaction and helps me solve problems and handle customer complaints.

Avoid repeated 'it' and use natural verbs: 'gives me satisfaction' and 'helps me solve' (base verb after 'helps'). Remove unnecessary definite article before 'customer complaints'.

× As I mentioned earlier, I am working at Tim horton's in Ottawa as an Assistant Manager.

✓ As I mentioned earlier, I work at Tim Hortons in Ottawa as an assistant manager.

Use consistent capitalization for job title (lowercase unless formal). Prefer present simple 'I work' for occupation statements. Use 'Tim Hortons'.

× I love this place because it provides me job satisfaction and it helps me in my problem solving skills as well as.

✓ I love this place because it provides me with job satisfaction and helps me develop my problem-solving skills.

Use 'provide someone with something' and 'develop my problem-solving skills' is idiomatic. Remove trailing 'as well as' which is incomplete. Hyphenate 'problem-solving' as a compound adjective.

× My future plans are to find a job related to my studies as I have done human resources and business management.

✓ My future plans are to find a job related to my studies, since I studied human resources and business management.

Use 'studied' (simple past) for completed education. 'As I have done' is awkward; 'since I studied' or 'because I studied' is clearer. Added comma for clarity.

× So I am looking for a job as an A human resource manager.

✓ So I am looking for a job as a human resources manager.

Remove the extra 'A' and use 'a' not capitalized; the common job title is 'human resources manager' (plural 'resources'). 'A human resource manager' is less common and 'human resources' is standard.