Work— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct organization names and acronyms. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific supporting details (job title, main responsibility), and avoid repetition. Use linking words like “for example” or “since” to connect ideas. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Example: I work at the Department of Inspection for Factories and Establishments (DIFE) as an Assistant Inspector General. I joined in 2014, and my main responsibility is protecting workers’ rights and safety. For example, I inspect factories to ensure compliance with labour laws and safety standards.

Suggestion: Answer directly and avoid repeating the same information. Give one clear topic sentence naming the workplace, then add one specific detail about its function or the sectors it covers. Use a linking word such as “also” or “for example” to make the sentence flow.

Example: I work at the Department of Inspection for Factories and Establishments (DIFE). It protects the well-being of workers across both formal and informal factories, for example by inspecting workplaces and enforcing safety rules.

Suggestion: Give a clear opinion sentence and support it with specific reasons and an example. Avoid fillers (uh, um) and incomplete sentences. Mention one or two concrete aspects that make it a good workplace (e.g., meaningful work, challenges, strong legal framework) and link them coherently.

Example: Yes, it is a very good and rewarding place to work because the job is challenging and meaningful. For example, we follow the Bangladesh Labour Act 2006 and the 2015 Labour Rules to protect workers, which gives our work clear purpose and legal backing.

Suggestion: Answer directly and expand with two specific supportive details (working hours, team environment). Remove hesitations and finish sentences. Use linking words like “also” or “because” to show reasons why you like it.

Example: Yes, I like working there very much because the hours are reasonable (9:00 AM to 5:00 PM) and the team is professional and supportive. For example, my manager is highly knowledgeable and encourages staff development.

Suggestion: Provide a clear plan in chronological order with specific steps and reasons. Correct grammar (e.g., “appear in exams” → “take the entrance exam” or “apply”) and avoid repeating. Use linking words like “first,” “then,” and “after that.”

Example: I plan to pursue a master’s degree in Australia. First, I will take the required entrance/exam and apply for the master’s program; after completing my master’s, I intend to continue to a PhD program to advance my research and career.

× I am not a student, I am a working lady and currently I am working at DIFE.

✓ I am not a student; I am a working woman and currently I work at DIFE.

Use 'woman' instead of 'lady' for neutral professional context. Use simple present 'I work' for habitual employment rather than 'I am working'. Also use a semicolon or conjunction to connect clauses. 'At DIFE' is acceptable for organization location.

× The elaboration of DIAP is Department of Inspection for Factories and Establishment.

✓ The full form of DIFE is Department of Inspection for Factories and Establishments.

Use 'full form' or 'full name' instead of 'elaboration'. Use the correct acronym DIFE (not DIAP). Use plural 'Establishments' to match official name. Include 'is' and capitalize as a proper noun.

× I have joined in this department in 2014 as an Assistant Inspector General.

✓ I joined this department in 2014 as an Assistant Inspector General.

Use simple past 'I joined' for a completed action in 2014 and omit the preposition 'in' after 'joined'. Use 'in 2014' for time expression.

× We work for the well-being of the workers.

✓ We work for the well-being of workers.

Article 'the' is unnecessary before 'workers' when speaking generally. Omit 'the' to indicate workers in general.

× Those workers are working.

✓ Those workers are employed in factories.

Original sentence is vague and repetitive. Provide a clearer structure: 'are working' with no object is incomplete; 'are employed in factories' gives purpose and clarity.

× I am working in DIFE that means department of inspection for factories and establishment.

✓ I work at DIFE, which means the Department of Inspection for Factories and Establishments.

Use 'work at' or 'work for' an organization, not 'working in DIFE'. Use a nonrestrictive clause 'which means' and include the definite article before the department name; use plural 'Establishments'.

× Actually this department is work for the well-being of the workers.

✓ Actually, this department works for the well-being of workers.

Use active verb 'works' (third person singular) and remove 'the' before 'workers' for general meaning. Add comma after 'Actually'. 'Is work' is ungrammatical.

× Those workers are working at different factories and establishment both formal and informal sectors.

✓ Those workers work at different factories and establishments in both the formal and informal sectors.

Use plural 'establishments', 'in' the sectors, and 'work' for habitual action. Include 'the' before 'formal and informal sectors' and correct word order.

× Workers are our in jurisdiction and we are.

✓ Those workers are under our jurisdiction.

Correct phrase is 'under our jurisdiction'. Remove extraneous 'and we are' which is incomplete.

× Yeah, it's a very, very good place to work and it's also a challenging profession.

✓ Yes, it's a very good place to work and it is also a challenging profession.

Replace informal 'Yeah' with 'Yes' in formal answers. Reduce redundant 'very, very'. No article error otherwise.

× We always try to do best for our, uh, for, uh, for the well-being of the workers, actually for doing this job.

✓ We always try to do our best for the well-being of workers in this job.

Include the possessive 'our' before 'best'. Remove filler 'uh'. Use 'in this job' or 'in performing this job' for clarity; omit extra 'for doing this job'.

× Our Bible is Bangladesh Labour Act 2006 in Bangladesh Labour Rules 2015 and we always try to follow the.

✓ Our guide is the Bangladesh Labour Act 2006 and the Bangladesh Labour Rules 2015, and we always try to follow them.

Avoid calling laws 'Bible'; use 'guide' or 'reference'. Include definite article 'the' before the act and rules. Use plural 'them' to refer back and complete the sentence.

× Yeah, I like the place very much.

✓ Yes, I like the place very much.

Replace informal 'Yeah' with 'Yes' for formality; sentence otherwise correct.

× It's a very, uh, uh, good place to do work.

✓ It's a very good place to work.

Use 'to work' or 'for working' rather than 'to do work'. Remove fillers and redundancy.

× Actually, my working hour is 9:00 AM to 5:00 PM and our boss and our subordinates officials are very good and very active, very smart.

✓ My working hours are 9:00 AM to 5:00 PM, and our boss and subordinate officers are very kind, active, and professional.

Use plural 'hours'. 'Subordinate officers' is clearer than 'subordinates officials'. Avoid repeated 'very'; choose appropriate adjectives and parallel structure.

× Our boss is very educative and very professional in her job.

✓ Our boss is very knowledgeable and very professional in her job.

'Educative' is not used to describe a person; use 'knowledgeable' or 'well-educated'. Maintain parallel adjectives.

× We always try to.

✓ We always try to do our best.

Original is an incomplete clause. Add 'do our best' to complete the thought.

× My future work plan is very different from my job.

✓ My future plans are different from my current job.

'Future work plan' is awkward; use 'future plans'. Make clear contrast with 'current job' and use plural 'plans' if multiple.

× Actually I want to do a master's degree from an Australian university and I am trying to appeared in health exam for UH.

✓ Actually, I want to pursue a master's degree at an Australian university, and I am trying to appear in the health exam for UoH.

Use 'pursue' or 'do' a degree; 'appear in' should be 'appear for' or 'sit for' an exam. Use present progressive 'am trying to appear'. Use correct preposition 'at' for universities. Abbreviate university properly (UoH) if intended.

× This purpose I want to appeared in masters session and after complete to masters then I will join in PhD program.

✓ For this purpose, I want to enroll in a master's program, and after completing my master's I will join a PhD program.

Use 'enroll in' or 'attend' a program; 'want to appeared' is incorrect. Use gerund 'completing' and possessive 'my master's'. Use 'join a PhD program' without 'in' after 'join'.