Work— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Câu trả lời cần ngắn gọn, trực tiếp và tránh lặp từ. Nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng (I’m a student) và thêm một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể ngắn gọn về năm học và kế hoạch sắp tới. Tránh sử dụng từ thừa như “right now” hai lần và sửa ngữ pháp (e.g., “I’m in Grade 11” chứ không phải “I’m already grade 11”).

Example: I’m a student at Victor High School. I’m in Grade 11, and next year I’ll be preparing for the national university entrance exam.

Suggestion: Cần trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi bằng một câu ngắn (I study at...) và cung cấp một chi tiết cụ thể để minh họa. Tránh lặp lại trạng từ “right now” nếu đã dùng trước đó. Chú ý sự nhất quán tên trường (Victor vs Victoria).

Example: I study at Victor High School, which is one of the most prestigious schools in Hanoi. The school is well-known for its strong academic programs.

Suggestion: Câu trả lời hơi lặp và nhiều tiếng ngập ngừng. Nên mở đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó dùng một hoặc hai lý do cụ thể, nối bằng từ liên kết (because, for example). Tránh lặp từ như “many” và sửa cụm từ “external curricular” -> “extracurricular”.

Example: Yes, it’s a great place to study because the teachers are very supportive and there are many extracurricular clubs that help students develop skills outside class.

Suggestion: Câu trả lời thiếu rõ ràng và có ngập ngừng. Nên bắt đầu bằng Yes/No + because, và diễn đạt lý do ngắn gọn, cụ thể. Câu cuối không rõ ý (“I still choose”) — cần nói rõ bạn chọn ở lại vì lý do gì. Tránh kết cấu rời rạc.

Example: Yes, I really like my school because it offers many extracurricular activities that make student life enjoyable. Although the exams are tough, I choose to stay because the support and opportunities are worth it.

Suggestion: Câu trả lời không mạch lạc và có nhiều lặp ngữ âm. Nên trả lời trực tiếp về kế hoạch ngắn hạn và nếu bạn chưa rõ kế hoạch dài hạn, hãy nói rõ bạn đang xem xét một vài lựa chọn. Dùng cấu trúc rõ ràng: short-term plan + possible long-term options. Sửa ngữ pháp (singular/plural).

Example: In the short term, I plan to enter a national economics university in Hanoi to pursue higher education. For the long term, I’m considering careers in finance or public policy, but I’m still exploring my options.

× I'm currently a student at Victor High School right now and I'm already grade 11, so the next year will be the years that I'm about to prepare for the UH university entrance exam.

✓ I'm currently a student at Victor High School and I'm in grade 11, so next year I will be preparing for the UH university entrance exam.

The sentence contains redundant words ('currently' and 'right now') and awkward phrasing ('already grade 11', 'will be the years that I'm about to prepare'). Use the present simple for current states ('I am in grade 11') and future continuous or 'will be preparing' for planned future activities. Improve concision by removing repetition. Suggestion: simplify time expressions and use 'in grade 11' and 'will be preparing' for clarity.

× I'm studying at Victoria High School right now, which is one of the most prestigious high school in Hanoi.

✓ I'm studying at Victoria High School right now, which is one of the most prestigious high schools in Hanoi.

The noun 'high school' is countable and should be plural here ('high schools') because it is one of many. Also 'the most prestigious high school' would require singular reference; using 'one of the most prestigious high schools' is correct. Use plural form to match 'one of the'.

× I think it is quite a good place to study since umm, there are many supportive teachers and there are many clubs and external curricular activities in my school.

✓ I think it is a good place to study since there are many supportive teachers and many clubs and extracurricular activities at my school.

Remove filler 'umm' and repetitive 'there are many'. Use 'extracurricular' as the correct single-word form, and prefer 'at my school' for natural preposition use. Simplify for clarity and fluency.

× I think it is quite a good place to study since umm, there are many supportive teachers and there are many clubs and external curricular activities in my school.

✓ I think it is a good place to study since there are many supportive teachers and many clubs and extracurricular activities at my school.

Use 'at my school' rather than 'in my school' for activities offered by the school. Also 'extracurricular' is the correct collocation. This improves naturalness.

× I quite love the place that I'm studying right now since there are many umm extracurricular activities which makes my youth feel more enjoyable and also the exam is really hard but I still choose.

✓ I quite like the place where I study because there are many extracurricular activities that make my school life more enjoyable, and although the exams are really hard, I still choose this school.

Use 'like' instead of 'love' for moderate preference; 'where I study' is more natural than 'that I'm studying'. 'Extracurricular activities that make my school life more enjoyable' corrects subject-verb agreement ('activities make' not 'makes'). 'Exam' should be plural if referring to general exams. Use 'although' to connect contrasting ideas. Clarify 'I still choose this school' to indicate decision.

× Umm, in the short term future, I'm planning to get into a national economics universities in Hanoi so that I can, uh, pursue a higher education and, uh, and then I'll, I don't know what I can do next.

✓ In the short-term future, I'm planning to get into a national economics university in Hanoi so that I can pursue higher education, and after that I'm not sure what I'll do next.

Use singular 'university' if referring to a single institution: 'get into a national economics university'. Hyphenate 'short-term' as a compound adjective. Remove fillers ('umm', 'uh'), use 'pursue higher education' (no article), and correct future uncertainty phrasing to 'I'm not sure what I'll do next' for natural English.