Work— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise, accurate and use complete sentences. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and filler words.

Example: I work as a nurse at Nikon Hospital. I specialise in the angiography unit, where I care for many cardiac patients and assist with diagnostic procedures.

Suggestion: Answer directly and correct grammar mistakes (prepositions, articles, verb forms). Reduce fillers and unclear phrases. Provide one clear detail about daily duties, using a linking word to make it coherent.

Example: I work at Nikon Hospital as a nurse in the cardiology department. Every day I monitor patients' vital signs and assist doctors during angiography procedures.

Suggestion: Give a complete reasoned answer: state your opinion, then support it with specific examples and a linking word. Fix grammar (plural/singular, verb forms) and avoid trailing off.

Example: Yes, it is. I enjoy working there because I can help many heart patients, and the staff are very supportive, so the unit has a positive and professional atmosphere.

Suggestion: Respond directly with a clear topic sentence, then give specific reasons using linking words. Use correct vocabulary (patients, medications, equipment) and avoid repetition.

Example: Yes, I like my workplace because the staff are friendly and our patients receive professional care with up-to-date medications and equipment.

Suggestion: Provide a clear plan statement followed by specific steps and use correct tense and vocabulary. Remove hesitation words and be concise (max 5 sentences).

Example: In the future I plan to specialise in surgical nursing and work alongside experienced surgeons. I hope to undertake practical training to operate advanced surgical equipment and improve my clinical skills.

× I take care a lot of patients, especially heart patients, and I work in a angiography unit.

✓ I take care of a lot of patients, especially heart patients, and I work in an angiography unit.

Missing preposition 'of' with 'take care' and article 'an' needed before vowel-starting noun phrase 'angiography unit' (article issue overlaps but primary is plural/preposition). Suggestion: Use 'take care of' and 'an angiography unit'. ','grammar_problem_type_id':1},{

× I work as a nurse and major hospital called Nikon.

✓ I work as a nurse in a major hospital called Nikon.

Missing preposition 'in' to connect 'work as a nurse' with location; sentence structure requires 'in a major hospital'. Suggestion: Add 'in'. ','grammar_problem_type_id':26},{

× my main role is uh, look after a lot of heart patients

✓ My main role is to look after many heart patients.

After 'role is' use the infinitive 'to look' rather than base verb; 'a lot of' can be more formal as 'many'. Suggestion: Use 'My main role is to look after many heart patients.' ','grammar_problem_type_id':8},{

× all of the days I uh umm umm choose the umm uh alarm and situation.

✓ Every day I respond to alarms and assess situations.

Original is ungrammatical and vague. 'All of the days' should be 'Every day'; 'choose the alarm and situation' is incorrect — likely meant 'respond to alarms and assess situations'. Suggestion: Use clear verbs like 'respond to' and 'assess'. ','grammar_problem_type_id':26},{

× I am passionate about uh, taking care of heart patient and uh help a lot of people and I uh, cooperation, uh, with a lot of uh, hard work colleagues and uh, I think the atmosphere of the unit is uh.

✓ I am passionate about taking care of heart patients and helping many people, and I cooperate with hard-working colleagues; I think the atmosphere of the unit is good.

Several errors: 'heart patient' should be plural 'heart patients'; parallel structure requires gerunds 'taking' and 'helping'; 'cooperation with' should be 'I cooperate with' or 'I work in cooperation with'; 'hard work colleagues' should be 'hard-working colleagues'; sentence was incomplete so add 'is good'. Suggestion: Use parallel forms and correct adjective formation. ','grammar_problem_type_id':13},{

× I like the place where I work include uh, the friendly atmosphere and uh, uh, all of the patient, uh, receive, uh, uh, receive, uh, a professional drugs and professional machines, uh, and uh, all of the person.

✓ I like the place where I work because of the friendly atmosphere, and all of the patients receive professional medications and have access to professional equipment, and all of the staff are supportive.

Numerous plural/article errors: 'all of the patient' should be 'all of the patients'; 'a professional drugs' incorrect article and plural — use 'professional medications'; 'professional machines' more naturally 'equipment'; 'all of the person' unclear—likely 'all of the staff' or 'all of the people'. Suggestion: Use correct plurals and appropriate nouns. ','grammar_problem_type_id':1},{

× In the future, I'll, uh, decided, uh, go to the, uh, surgery and I work with a professional doctors and I, uh, work practical.

✓ In the future, I'll decide to go into surgery and work with professional doctors, and I will work as a practical nurse.

Mixed tenses and forms: 'I'll decided' mixes future and past — use 'I'll decide' or 'I've decided'; 'go to the surgery' should be 'go into surgery' (field) or 'do surgery' if performing; 'a professional doctors' wrong article and number — use 'professional doctors'; 'I work practical' incorrect phrase — 'work as a practical nurse'. Suggestion: Keep consistent future tense 'will' and correct noun phrases. ','grammar_problem_type_id':7},{

× I, uh, learn about, uh, professional machine and, uh, state-of-the-art.

✓ I will learn about professional machines and state-of-the-art equipment.

Use plural 'machines' and complete noun phrase 'state-of-the-art equipment'; tense should match future plan 'will learn'. Suggestion: Use full noun phrases and consistent future tense. ','grammar_problem_type_id':13}]}