Work— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 発音や語彙の誤用を直し、文法を簡潔に整えることが必要です。特に「walking」は誤りで「working」や「I work as a ...」を使うべきです。自己紹介は冒頭で明確なトピック文（I work as an English teacher at a senior high school.）を述べ、その後に補足で勤務年数や勤務形態を短く続けると自然です。例文は5文以内に収め、冗長な語や詰まりを減らしましょう。

Example: I work as an English teacher at a senior high school. I have taught at public high schools for the past 20 years. Most of my experience has been in curriculum development and exam preparation.

Suggestion: 場所の説明で語彙と語順の誤り（"walk"→"work"）を直し、情報を論理的に繋げるために接続詞を使いましょう。所在地（city, prefecture）→配属時期→在職期間の順で話すと分かりやすいです。数字や期間は簡潔に述べてください。

Example: I work at a senior high school in Takasaki City, Osaka Prefecture. I was transferred to this school last year, so I have been here for less than one year.

Suggestion: 主張は明確ですが文法（主語と動詞の一致）や冗長さを減らす必要があります。理由を2点までに絞り、それぞれを簡潔な文で説明しましょう。接続詞（because, and, so）を適切に使い、具体例を一つ加えると説得力が増します。

Example: Yes, it is a great place to work because my students are kind and very motivated during lessons. In addition, my colleagues are friendly and supportive, which makes the working environment pleasant.

Suggestion: 回答が繰り返しになっているので、理由を順序立てて短く述べると効果的です。言いよどみ（uh, umm）を減らし、通勤時間と仕事の満足度という2つの理由を明確に述べると良いです。最後に結論の一文で締めましょう。

Example: Yes, I like my workplace because it is close to my home and my commute is under an hour, so I am not very tired. Also, I get a lot of satisfaction from teaching, which makes the job rewarding.

Suggestion: 年齢や将来計画の説明では文の流れを整え具体的にすることが大事です。まず現在の計画（stay until retirement）を明確にし、その後の希望職（translator）を簡潔に述べ、どのように英語力を活かしたいか具体例（freelance translation, part-time interpreting）を加えると良いです。語彙ミス（"use my English varieties"は不自然）を訂正しましょう。

Example: I plan to remain at my current school until I retire. After retirement, I would like to work using my English skills, for example as a freelance translator or part-time interpreter.

× I'm already walking.

✓ I'm already working.

The speaker likely intended to say they are employed. 'Walking' is incorrect in this context. Use 'working' to indicate employment. Japanese explanation: ここでは 'walking' は不適切で、仕事をしていることを表すには 'working' を使います。

× My job is to teach English as a Senior High School.

✓ My job is to teach English at a senior high school.

Use the preposition 'at' with institutions like 'senior high school' and use lowercase for the common noun. Japanese explanation: 'as' はここでは不適切で、場所を表すときは 'at' を使います。また 'Senior High School' は普通名詞として小文字にします。

× I have taught English as publicly high school for the past 20 years.

✓ I have taught English at a public high school for the past 20 years.

Use 'at' for institutions and 'public high school' is the correct noun phrase. 'Publicly' is an adverb and incorrect here. Japanese explanation: 'publicly' は副詞なので名詞を修飾できません。'public high school' とし、'at' を使います。

× I walk at, uh, Senior High School in Takasaki City in Osaka Prefecture, and, uh, last year I was transferred to that current school.

✓ I work at a senior high school in Takasaki City in Osaka Prefecture, and last year I was transferred to this school.

Use 'work' not 'walk' to describe employment. Use 'a' for 'a senior high school' and 'this school' is more natural for the current workplace. Japanese explanation: 'walk' は誤用で、仕事を表すには 'work' を使います。'this school' が現在の勤務校を表す自然な表現です。

× So I have not worked here, uh, less than one year.

✓ So I have not worked here for less than one year.

When referring to a period up to now, use 'for less than one year' with present perfect. The original word order omitted 'for'. Japanese explanation: 期間を表すときは 'for less than one year' の形にします。

× Yes, I really think so because a student at my school are very kind and study us and so when having a when conducting lessons I can get a lot of much passion from them and also other teachers are very kind and friendly so I do not have any major complaint for my workplace.

✓ Yes, I really think so because the students at my school are very kind and hardworking, and when I conduct lessons I receive a lot of enthusiasm from them. Also, the other teachers are very kind and friendly, so I do not have any major complaints about my workplace.

Correct subject-verb agreement: 'students' with 'are'. 'Study us' is incorrect; use 'hardworking' or 'study hard'. Remove filler and rearrange for clarity. 'a lot of much passion' is redundant; use 'a lot of enthusiasm'. 'Complaint for' should be 'complaints about'. Japanese explanation: 主語と動詞の一致（students are）、'study us' は誤りで 'study hard' または 'hardworking'、冗長表現を整理し 'complaints about' を使います。

× Yes, I think so because, uh, my workplace is located near my house, uh, my commuting time is less than one hour, 1 hour, so I do not get uh, tired so easily and also, umm, I can, OK, I can get a lot of satisfaction from working there. So that's why my, uh, my workplace.

✓ Yes, I think so because my workplace is located near my house and my commuting time is less than one hour, so I do not get tired easily. I also get a lot of satisfaction from working there, which is why I like my workplace.

Combine clauses for clarity, remove fillers, correct adverb placement 'tired easily', and produce a complete final clause. Japanese explanation: フィラーを除き、文を簡潔にまとめます。'get tired easily' の語順に注意し、最後の文を完結させます。

× Since I'm already 51 years old, I will stay at my current work for an until uh, retirement age and uh, after that I want to use umm, another job which use my English varieties like a translator.

✓ Since I'm already 51 years old, I will stay at my current job until retirement, and after that I would like to do another job that uses my English skills, such as working as a translator.

Use 'job' not 'work' for position, 'until retirement' is the correct phrase. Use 'would like to do' for polite future intention. 'Use my English varieties' is incorrect; use 'use my English skills'. Japanese explanation: 'current job' とし 'until retirement' を使います。'would like to do' は希望を表し、'English skills' が正しい表現です。