Work— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be slightly more concise and correct minor grammar issues; start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy (e.g. "at the same time" and "both of them" together).

Example: I’m both a student and a part-time tutor. Currently, I’m studying for a bachelor’s degree in two foreign languages, and I also teach at a local school. Although it can be challenging, I enjoy the balance between studying and working.

Suggestion: Give a clearer, better-structured response: state the workplace, then list two specific responsibilities with linking words. Correct unclear phrasing and the final sentence — explain why it’s rewarding with concrete reasons.

Example: I work at a school in Powder City, Kadakan. My main duties are preparing lessons and checking students’ assignments, and I also organise activities that involve both pupils and their parents. I find it rewarding because I can see students improve and the parents appreciate my support.

Suggestion: Open with a clear opinion, then use linking words to list specific facilities; correct grammar and keep to 2–3 supporting details. Avoid awkward phrases like "good support areas."

Example: Yes, I think it’s a very good place to work. For example, the staff room is well equipped and there are pleasant facilities such as a tennis court, and the classrooms are comfortable, which makes teaching much easier.

Suggestion: Begin with a direct answer, then give two concise reasons using linking words. Correct awkward phrasing ("feel us better") and avoid filler words. Be specific about facilities and commute.

Example: Yes, I like working there. Firstly, it’s only a 10–15 minute commute from my home, and secondly the school offers good facilities for both students and teachers, which makes the environment pleasant.

Suggestion: Start with a clear statement of your plan, then explain reasons concisely and specifically. Use linking words and avoid vague phrases like "open the bright future." Mention concrete benefits for students and for your career.

Example: I plan to prepare my students for academic Olympiads. This will help them gain competition experience and improve their prospects for university, and it’s also a way for me to contribute to the country’s future by developing talented young people.

× I am juggling both of them at the moment.

✓ I am juggling both at the moment.

The pronoun 'them' is unnecessary when referring to two roles; using 'both' is more natural. Keep present continuous 'am juggling' because the action is happening now.

× I'm doing my bachelor's degree in the faculty of two foreign languages and at the same time I'm working as a tutor in school.

✓ I'm doing my bachelor's degree in the Faculty of Two Foreign Languages and at the same time I'm working as a tutor at a school.

Use capitalisation for formal faculty names and the preposition 'at' with 'school' when referring to working there. Use the indefinite article 'a' before 'school' to indicate one school in general.

× It's quite challenging, but I enjoy the balance between work and study.

✓ It's quite challenging, but I enjoy the balance between work and study.

Sentence is grammatical; the present simple 'enjoy' correctly expresses a general truth. No change needed.

× I work in a single school in the city, Powder City of the Kadakan, and my responsibilities include preparing lessons, checking assignments, doing some activities with students and also with their parents.

✓ I work at a single school in the city, Powder City of the Kadakan, and my responsibilities include preparing lessons, checking assignments and doing activities with students and their parents.

Use 'at' for working at an institution. Use parallel structure in list items and remove the redundant 'also with' before 'their parents' to improve clarity.

× And it's for it's a rewarding job because I can't see.

✓ It is a rewarding job because I can see the impact of my work.

Original sentence is ungrammatical and contains contradictions ('can't see'). Replace with a clear clause expressing reason, keeping present simple for general truth.

× Yet I think it's very good place to work the campus office, pleasant facilities for example, well equipped staff room, a good support areas like a tennis court, and the classrooms are really comfortable and well suited for teaching which makes daily lessons much easier.

✓ I think it's a very good place to work: the campus office has pleasant facilities, for example a well-equipped staff room, good support areas like a tennis court, and the classrooms are really comfortable and well suited to teaching, which makes daily lessons much easier.

Include the article 'a' before 'very good place'. Use a colon to introduce examples and commas for lists. Hyphenate 'well-equipped' and use 'suited to' rather than 'suited for' in this context. Correct plural agreement 'areas' without extra article.

× Yes, I like it because firstly it is not far away from my home.

✓ Yes, I like it because, firstly, it is not far from my home.

'Far from' is the idiomatic form; 'far away from' is acceptable but wordy. Add commas around 'firstly' as a discourse marker.

× It takes about 10-15 minutes to get my work place uh and also as I said before it off it offers a lot of facilities to feel us better as students and teachers also.

✓ It takes about 10–15 minutes to get to my workplace, and as I said before, it offers many facilities to make students and teachers feel more comfortable.

Use 'to get to my workplace' with no space in 'workplace'. Replace filler 'uh' and awkward phrase 'feel us better' with 'make students and teachers feel more comfortable'. Use 'many' rather than 'a lot of' for formality and insert commas for clarity.

× I'm going to prepare my students for the Olympiads because it's a very good contribution to the future of our country, and also in that way you can open the bright future for the students.

✓ I'm going to prepare my students for the Olympiads because it's a valuable contribution to our country's future, and in that way you can open up a brighter future for the students.

Use 'valuable contribution to our country's future' for natural phrasing. 'Open up a brighter future' is the idiomatic collocation. Keep 'I'm going to' for future intention.