Work— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and avoid hesitations. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words to connect ideas and correct small grammar errors (e.g., 'I completed my exams last year' and 'I'm taking an IELTS course at Luminous Coaching Center in Dhanmondi').

Example: I am a student. I completed my exams last year, and now I am taking an IELTS course at Luminous Coaching Center in Dhanmondi. Also, I attend classes three times a week, which helps me improve my English.

Suggestion: Answer directly first: say you do not work. Reduce repetition and hesitations. Then give one clear reason with a specific detail. Use a linking phrase like 'however' or 'but' to introduce the hypothetical job preference.

Example: I don't work at the moment because I am financially supported by my parents. However, if I had the chance, I would work as a waiter in a restaurant because it would allow me to improve my communication skills and earn some money while studying.

Suggestion: Begin with a clear statement and give two specific reasons, connected by linking words like 'because' and 'so'. Correct grammar (e.g., 'being a waiter' or 'the job has flexible hours'). Avoid fillers and finish with a brief concluding sentence.

Example: Yes, I think being a waiter is a good job because it usually has flexible hours, so I could arrange shifts around my studies. Also, it would help me practice speaking with customers, which is useful for improving my communication skills.

Suggestion: Start by clearly saying you do not currently work, then answer the hypothetical preference with one or two specific reasons. Remove repetitions and use linking words like 'because' to explain why you would enjoy the workplace.

Example: I don't currently work because I am a student and my parents support me. But if I worked, I would prefer a restaurant because I enjoy talking to people and the lively environment would help me improve my English and confidence.

Suggestion: Give a clear, specific plan: state the goal and provide two concrete reasons or steps you will take. Use cohesive devices like 'because', 'so', or 'therefore' and avoid hesitations. Mention practical details (e.g., flexible hours, part-time shifts) to strengthen your response.

Example: In the future, I plan to work as a waiter in a restaurant because the job offers flexible hours, which will allow me to continue my studies. Also, by serving customers I can improve my communication skills and gain part-time income to support myself.

× I have just completed my exercise examination last year and now I'm doing my IELTS course in the coaching that is the Luminous Coaching Center.

✓ I completed my exercise examination last year and now I'm doing my IELTS course at the Luminous Coaching Center.

The original mixes present perfect 'I have just completed' with a specific time marker 'last year', which is incorrect. Use simple past 'I completed' for actions completed at a definite past time. Also 'in the coaching that is' is awkward; use 'at the Luminous Coaching Center' for location. Suggestion: Use simple past with specific time expressions and use 'at' for institutions or centers.

× It is located at Dhanmondi and, uh, you, uh, you and.

✓ It is located in Dhanmondi.

The original sentence trails off and repeats 'you', producing an incomplete structure. Use a complete simple sentence stating the location. Also use 'in Dhanmondi' rather than 'at' for a district. Suggestion: Remove filler words and complete the clause.

× Well, I'm a student and I'm, uh, currently financially supported by my parents and umm, uh, so I don't, I don't work, uh, if I had a chance, umm, chance, uh, I will definitely join as a waiter in a restaurant because I really like this umm, uh, like, like this job because.

✓ Well, I'm a student and I'm currently financially supported by my parents, so I don't work. If I had the chance, I would definitely work as a waiter in a restaurant because I really like this job.

Multiple issues: unnecessary fillers and repetition make sentence unclear. The conditional 'If I had a chance' requires second conditional form with 'would' for the result: 'If I had the chance, I would...'. Also use 'work as a waiter' not 'join as a waiter'. Remove duplicated phrases and filler words for clarity. Suggestion: Use second conditional for hypothetical situations and concise phrasing.

× Yes, of course for me, umm, I think uh, work is a waiter is a very good umm, because waiter, the job has a flexible hours for us.

✓ Yes, of course. I think working as a waiter is very good because the job has flexible hours for us.

The phrase 'work is a waiter' is ungrammatical; use 'working as a waiter'. Also 'has a flexible hours' mixes singular article 'a' with plural 'hours'; correct is 'has flexible hours' or 'has a flexible schedule'. Remove filler words. Suggestion: Use gerund for job roles ('working as a...') and match articles with count nouns.

× Even I can also concentrate in my study beside the job.

✓ I can also concentrate on my studies alongside the job.

Use 'concentrate on' not 'concentrate in'. 'Study' as an activity is better pluralized to 'studies'. 'Beside' in this context should be 'alongside' or 'besides'. Suggestion: Use correct preposition 'on' with 'concentrate' and plural 'studies'.

× So it is very, uh, very good job for me and that's it.

✓ So it is a very good job for me.

Missing article before 'very good job'—should be 'a very good job'. Remove filler 'and that's it' for a more natural response. Suggestion: Include the indefinite article for singular countable nouns.

× Actually, I don't work any places because I'm a student.

✓ Actually, I don't work anywhere because I'm a student.

'Any places' is unnatural; use 'anywhere' when responding about location of work. Also 'work anywhere' or 'work at any place' are better. Suggestion: Use 'anywhere' for negative statements about locations.

× but if I had a chance to get in a job, umm, I would definitely join, uh, as a waitress in a restaurant.

✓ But if I had a chance to get a job, I would definitely work as a waitress in a restaurant.

'Get in a job' is incorrect; use 'get a job'. 'Join as a waitress' is unnatural; use 'work as a waitress'. Remove filler words. Suggestion: Use natural collocations: 'get a job' and 'work as'.

× And uh, uh, I, I really love restaurant because I can easily communicate with people and umm, even the.

✓ I really love restaurants because I can easily communicate with people.

The original is fragmented and ends abruptly. Use plural 'restaurants' to refer to the environment generally and finish the thought simply. Remove filler words. Suggestion: Complete the sentence and avoid repetition and trailing off.

× Well, my future work plan, uh, plans are, uh, plans is I want to be a waiter in a restaurant.

✓ Well, my future work plan is that I want to be a waiter in a restaurant.

The phrase repeats 'plan' and mixes singular and plural. Use a single clear structure: 'my future work plan is that...' or 'my future plan is to...'. Suggestion: Use concise phrasing: 'My future plan is to be a waiter.'

× And, umm, I really like this job because if I, uh, if I pick up a waiter, I can easily talk with people, I can help people and I can also, umm, I can also concentrate my study because the job has, uh.

✓ I really like this job because if I become a waiter, I can easily talk with people, help them, and also concentrate on my studies because the job has flexible hours.

'Pick up a waiter' is incorrect; use 'become a waiter'. 'Concentrate my study' should be 'concentrate on my studies'. The sentence was incomplete; add 'flexible hours' to finish the reason and make it coherent. Remove filler words and repetitions. Suggestion: Use correct verbs for career changes ('become'), correct prepositions ('concentrate on'), and complete the sentence with the intended idea.