Work— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers, then add 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Correct vocabulary (e.g., 'specialities' → 'specializes', 'radiatory' unclear) and verb forms (use present continuous or simple present consistently). Avoid repetition and limit to 3–4 short sentences.

Example: I am currently working at my father's shop, which specializes in clothing and accessories. I finished my studies at PVA faculty eight months ago, and instead of taking a corporate job I decided to help with the family business. This lets me gain practical experience while earning some money.

Suggestion: Answer directly with correct vocabulary and clearer sentences. Use a topic sentence naming the place, then one or two specific duties linked logically. Correct mistakes ('walk'→'work', 'soap'→'shop', avoid repeating 'billing'). Keep it concise and natural.

Example: I work in my father's retail shop in a local mall. I mainly handle sales and do the billing, and I also help customers with questions or product recommendations.

Suggestion: Use clear, natural phrases and correct verbs ('walking'→'working'). Begin with a direct opinion, then add specific reason(s) using linking words like 'because' or 'especially'. Avoid repetition and long, unclear clauses.

Example: Yes, I really enjoy working at my father's shop because it is busy during festivals and I get to interact with many customers. It is rewarding both personally, since I help my family, and financially, because I earn some money.

Suggestion: Give a direct answer then provide one or two specific points about location and comfort. Fix grammar (remove repeated words, use 'doesn't' instead of 'don't', 'inside a mall' once). Be concise and logical: mention pros and cons with linking words like 'but' or 'however'.

Example: Yes, I like working there. The shop is inside a mall and it doesn't have air conditioning, but the building is designed to stay relatively cool even in hot and humid weather, so it is usually comfortable.

Suggestion: Answer with a clear topic sentence about your plan, then give specific details and timelines if possible. Correct grammar ('plans are', 'two shops', 'outskirts') and avoid repetition. Use linking words like 'currently', 'in the future', 'therefore' to structure the response.

Example: My future plan is to expand the family business. Currently we have two shops—one in the central area and another on the outskirts—so I plan to open a new branch in a different neighborhood within the next two years to reach more customers.

× Right now I'm working at my father's shop with specialities in radiatory and clothing.

✓ Right now I'm working in my father's shop, which specializes in radiators and clothing.

Use 'in' for working inside a shop; 'with specialities in' is awkward — use 'which specializes in'. 'Radiatory' is incorrect; correct noun is 'radiators'. Also use comma and relative clause for clarity.

× I completed my study eight months ago from PVA faculty.

✓ I completed my studies eight months ago at PVA Faculty.

Use plural 'studies' for education in general. Use 'at' for institutions rather than 'from'. Capitalize proper noun 'Faculty'. Past time 'eight months ago' is fine.

× So right now I'm not joining any kind of corporate job and following my father's.

✓ So right now I'm not taking any corporate job and I'm working with my father.

'Joining a job' is nonstandard; use 'taking' or 'doing a corporate job'. 'Following my father's' is incomplete — specify 'working with my father'. Maintain present continuous for current ongoing action.

× As I stated before, I walk at my father's soap, I usually take care of sales and sometimes even billing and billing etcetera.

✓ As I stated before, I work at my father's shop; I usually take care of sales and sometimes billing and stock.

'Walk' and 'soap' are incorrect word choices; should be 'work' and 'shop'. Replaced redundant 'billing and billing etcetera' with 'billing and stock' for clarity. Use semicolon or period to separate clauses.

× So it is very tedious job to help people assisting with queries.

✓ So it is a very tedious job to help people and assist with queries.

Missing article 'a' before 'very tedious job'. 'To help people assisting with queries' is ungrammatical; separate actions: 'help people' and 'assist with queries'.

× Yes, I absolutely love walking at my father's shop.

✓ Yes, I absolutely love working at my father's shop.

Use 'working' not 'walking' to describe employment. 'Walking' changes meaning.

× Sometimes the walk can be quite active, considering sometimes in the festival season, but it is quite rewarding as as I help my father and I get some money out of it, so I'm very financially pleased.

✓ Sometimes the work can be quite busy, especially during festival seasons, but it is quite rewarding because I help my father and earn some money, so I'm satisfied financially.

Replace 'walk' with 'work'. 'Active' -> 'busy'. Remove duplicate 'as as'. Use 'especially during festival seasons' for clarity. 'Get some money out of it' is colloquial; use 'earn some money'. 'Financially pleased' -> 'satisfied financially'.

× Yes, I like the place where I work so my shop is located in a mall inside a mall so we don't have any kind of AC.

✓ Yes, I like the place where I work; my shop is located inside a mall, so we don't have air conditioning.

Sentence run-on — separate clauses. 'Inside a mall' sufficient; 'located in a mall inside a mall' was repetitive. 'Any kind of AC' is colloquial — use 'air conditioning'.

× But even in hot and humid weather the the building is designed so that it don't get hotter than outer temperature out.

✓ But even in hot and humid weather, the building is designed so that it doesn't get hotter than the outside temperature.

Duplicate 'the the'. Subject-verb agreement: 'it don't' -> 'it doesn't'. Use 'outside temperature' and remove extra 'out'. Add comma after introductory phrase.

× So my future work plans is to add is to extend the business.

✓ So my future work plan is to expand the business.

Subject-verb agreement and plurality: 'plans is' incorrect — use 'plan is' or 'plans are'. 'Add is to extend' is redundant; use 'expand' for collocation.

× Right now we have to Sobs one in the main central location and another in the another in the outskirts.

✓ Right now we have two shops: one in the main central location and another on the outskirts.

Numeral and noun errors: 'to Sobs' -> 'two shops'. Remove duplicate 'another in the'. Use 'on the outskirts' preposition and colon for clarity.

× So I'm planning to build my own shop.

✓ So I'm planning to open my own shop.

'Build' is possible but 'open' is more natural for someone expanding retail business. Present continuous 'I'm planning' is appropriate for future intention.