Work— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be concise and avoid repetitions/filler words. Start with a clear topic sentence (I am a student) and add one brief precise detail (what you studied and recent achievement). Remove hesitations and redundant phrases.

Example: I am a student. I recently graduated in the non-medical stream and passed with flying colours.

Suggestion: Answer directly and clearly. If you are not working, say so and then explain your plans in one or two short sentences using linking words (so, therefore, or and). Avoid hesitations and unclear phrases.

Example: I don’t work at the moment because I am a student. I plan to either pursue a master's degree or look for a job after gaining some experience.

Suggestion: Focus your answer on ‘place’—interpret as your country or city—and give one clear opinion with 1–2 specific examples. Use linking words like for example or such as and avoid repeating words.

Example: Yes, I think it is a good place to work because there are many industries and professional opportunities, for example in mechanical engineering, medicine and education.

Suggestion: Correct vocabulary and be specific. If you mean ‘workplace’ describe its atmosphere and colleagues briefly. Remove errors (alcoholic) and finish the sentence. Use 2–3 short sentences maximum.

Example: Yes, I would. My workplace has a very energetic atmosphere and supportive colleagues, which makes it pleasant to work there.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence stating your plan, then add two concise, specific reasons using linking words (because, so). Use correct collocations (run a business, make investments, cooperate with others) and avoid vague phrases.

Example: In the future I want to run my own business because it will give me independence and help me learn practical skills. For example, I can learn how to manage finances, cooperate with partners and make smart investments.

× Actually I am a student, I have recently completed my graduation in non medical stream with flying F uh flying colour colours.

✓ Actually, I am a student. I have recently completed my graduation in the non-medical stream with flying colours.

The original combines two independent clauses with a comma splice and contains awkward filler and article issues. Use a period to separate sentences, include the definite article 'the' before 'non-medical stream', remove filler 'uh flying F', and use the plural idiom 'flying colours'. Use punctuation and articles correctly to improve clarity.

× To be honest, I am a student now. I pursue to UH, go in, go in the field of master or either uh to choose the work.

✓ To be honest, I am a student now. I plan to pursue a master's degree or choose to start working.

Original is ungrammatical and contains false starts and unclear verb forms. 'Pursue' should take an object ('a master's degree'), and 'field of master' is incorrect. Replace fragmented phrases with a clear intention: 'plan to pursue a master's degree or choose to start working.' This fixes sentence structure and verb use.

× Definitely in my country, the country, there are many places where we can do work, for example in mechanical engineering, in the field of a doctor, teacher and many others.

✓ Definitely, in my country there are many places where we can work, for example in mechanical engineering, medicine, teaching, and many other professions.

Redundant phrase 'the country, the country' should be removed. Use 'work' without 'do', and list professions in parallel form: 'mechanical engineering, medicine, teaching'. Use plural or collective nouns consistently ('many other professions'). Correct articles and parallelism improve readability.

× Definitely, I like the place where I work because the environment of my alcoholic place is very energetic and the people also very.

✓ Definitely, I like the place where I work because the environment of my workplace is very energetic and the people are too.

Original contains the incorrect and inappropriate word 'alcoholic' likely a misselection for 'workplace'. Use 'workplace' as a single word; include verb 'are' after 'people' for a complete clause. Replace 'also very' with 'are too' for grammatical completeness.

× To be honest, in future I want to run my own business because I think it is very energetic and due to this I can learn many other qualities like how to corporate, how to run the business, how to investment to a right place and many others.

✓ To be honest, in the future I want to run my own business because I think it will be exciting and I can learn many other skills, such as how to cooperate, how to run a business, and how to invest in the right place.

Tense and word choice errors: use 'in the future' and 'want to run' (present intention) and 'will be' to describe expected quality. 'Energetic' is not natural for a business; use 'exciting'. 'Qualities' should be 'skills'; 'how to corporate' should be 'how to cooperate'; 'how to investment to a right place' should be 'how to invest in the right place'. Also make the list parallel and idiomatic.