Work— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 직접적으로 질문에 답한 뒤 간결하게 추가 정보를 제공하세요. 현재 답변은 지명과 학교명이 혼동스럽고 불필요한 반복(‘so’, ‘basically’)이 있습니다. 문장 구조가 흐트러져 이해가 어렵습니다. 개선 포인트: 1) 먼저 ‘I am a senior student.’로 명확히 시작하세요. 2) 학교와 전공은 한두 문장으로 정리하세요(위치 설명은 간단히). 3) 불필요한 반복과 외국어 언급은 제거하거나 이유를 간단히 설명하세요. 4) 연결어(for example, and)만 사용해 문장들을 자연스럽게 연결하세요.

Example: I am a senior student at the University of Yongnam. I major in French language and literature, and my university is located near Daegu in Gyeongsang. I’ve been studying French for several years, so I focus mainly on literature and culture.

Suggestion: 질문은 ‘work’였으므로 먼저 ‘I don’t work, I study’처럼 지위를 명확히 밝혀야 합니다. 현재 답변은 장소 정보만 제공하고 질문 의도(직업 유무)를 완전히 반영하지 않았습니다. 개선 포인트: 1) 질문 의도에 맞게 ‘I’m a student, not working’으로 시작하세요. 2) 장소 정보는 짧게 덧붙이세요. 3) 연결어로 자연스럽게 이어가세요.

Example: I don’t work at the moment; I’m a student at the University of Yongnam, which is near Daegu in Gyeongsang.

Suggestion: 먼저 질문의 ‘work’/‘place’ 의미를 명확히 해 답변하세요. 문법(‘so good’, ‘great professor’)과 의미 전달이 어색합니다. 또한 이유 설명은 구체적이고 자연스럽게 해야 합니다. 개선 포인트: 1) ‘Yes, it’s a good place to study/work’로 시작하세요. 2) 이유는 구체적으로 하나 또는 두 개 제시(예: resources, supportive faculty). 3) 문법적 수정을 통해 자연스러운 표현 사용(‘many great professors’, ‘I’m encouraged by them’)

Example: Yes, it’s a great place to study. There are many excellent professors and motivated students, so I feel encouraged to work harder and use the university’s strong resources.

Suggestion: 질문은 ‘Would you like the place where you work?’ 즉 호감 여부를 묻습니다. 답변은 건물 설명에 치우쳐 질문에 직접적으로 답하지 못했습니다. 또한 문법과 어휘(‘so numerous facility’, ‘to study more improve’)가 부정확합니다. 개선 포인트: 1) 먼저 ‘Yes/No’로 명확히 답하세요. 2) 그 이유와 구체적 예시(예: 도서관, 연구실)를 한두 문장으로 제시하세요. 3) 문법적으로 ‘many facilities’ 또는 ‘a lot of facilities’ 같은 표현 사용.

Example: Yes, I like my university, especially the central building. It’s the largest building on campus and has many facilities like a large library and study rooms that help me improve my studies.

Suggestion: 계획을 명확히 표현하고 구체적인 이유와 방법을 제시하세요. 현재 답변은 중복(‘I I’d’, ‘I I’)과 모호한 표현(‘use these ranges’)이 있어 이해하기 어렵습니다. 개선 포인트: 1) 구체적 직업(예: work in advertising in France)을 명확히 말하세요. 2) 이유(전공 활용, 언어능력)를 덧붙이고 어떻게 준비할 것인지 한 문장으로 설명하세요. 3) 문장 수는 2~3문장으로 유지하고 반복을 피하세요.

Example: I plan to work in France in the advertising industry because I studied French language and culture. I hope to use my language skills and cultural knowledge in marketing, and I’m preparing by studying advertising and doing internships related to media.

× Oh, I'm a senior student in University of Yangon which is located in Gyeongsang near Roydegu.

✓ Oh, I'm a senior student at the University of Yangon, which is located in Gyeongsang near Daegu.

Use 'the' with specific named institutions (the University of Yangon) and preposition 'at' for being a student there. Also correct place name spelling "Daegu". Suggestion: say 'at the University of Yangon' and add commas for the relative clause.

× So my major is French language and culture.

✓ My major is French language and culture.

Beginning with 'So' is unnecessary and can be omitted in formal answers. Keep subject-verb structure 'My major is ...'.

× So I said it in French basically and French literature.

✓ I study French language and French literature.

The original is unclear and has redundant 'so' and 'basically'. Use simple present 'I study' to describe academic subjects and list fields clearly.

× I'm studying in University of Yongnam which is located in Gyeongsang, nearby Daegu.

✓ I'm studying at Yongnam University, which is located in Gyeongsang, near Daegu.

Use 'at' with universities and 'near' without 'nearby' in this structure. Use the common name order 'Yongnam University'.

× Yes, I think there is so good place to study because there are so many great professor and students.

✓ Yes, I think it is a very good place to study because there are many great professors and students.

Use 'it is' or 'there is' correctly; here 'it is a very good place' is natural. Use 'a' before singular 'place', 'very' instead of 'so' in formal speech. Use plural 'professors'.

× I always encourage to study for looking them.

✓ I am always encouraged to study when I see them.

Meaning is unclear; likely intended 'I am always encouraged to study when I see them'. Use passive 'am encouraged' or 'they always encourage me'. Use 'when I see them' rather than 'for looking them'.

× I'd like to study in university and the central university.

✓ I'd like to study at the central university.

Avoid repetition; use 'at' with 'university'. If referring to a specific central university, say 'the central university'.

× This is the largest building in our university and there are so numerous facility to study more improve.

✓ This is the largest building on our campus, and there are numerous facilities to support studying and improvement.

Use 'on our campus' or 'in our university' idiomatically. 'Numerous' modifies a plural noun: 'facilities'. 'to study more improve' is ungrammatical; rephrase to 'to support studying and improvement' or 'to help students improve'.

× I want to work in France because my major is French obviously, so I I'd like to use these ranges and particularly I I will work in advertising.

✓ I want to work in France because my major is French. I would like to use this knowledge, and particularly I will work in advertising.

Split into clear sentences. Use 'this knowledge' rather than 'these ranges'. Remove repeated 'I'. 'I will work in advertising' is acceptable for future plans. Use 'would like' for polite intent and 'will' for definite future.