Work— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is clear, relevant and provides good detail. To improve, make the response slightly more concise and natural by using one strong topic sentence followed by one or two supporting details with linking words. Also correct minor phrasing (e.g. “adapt to life in Canada” instead of “adapt to new life in Canada”).

Example: I work as an English teacher for a Calgary nonprofit. I teach refugees and other vulnerable newcomers, helping them adapt to life in Canada, and I focus on practical language skills like everyday conversation and job-related vocabulary.

Suggestion: The response answers the question but has some grammatical errors and a slightly unclear phrase (“link instructor”). Improve by giving a clear topic sentence, fixing grammar, and adding a specific detail about your role or a linking word to connect ideas.

Example: I work at the Immigrant Education Society. I’m an ESL instructor there, and I find the work very rewarding because I help newcomers from different countries—many with limited formal education—learn practical English for daily life and employment.

Suggestion: Good, natural answer with relevant detail and a personal example. To improve, remove fillers like “Uh,” and combine sentences to be more concise. Add a linking word to show contrast or emphasis if needed.

Example: Yes, it’s a great place to work: my students and colleagues are very supportive, and my manager John mentors me regularly, which has helped me develop my teaching skills quickly.

Suggestion: The answer is enthusiastic but a bit repetitive. Combine ideas into a compact response and correct grammar (e.g. “supportive” and “very supportive managers” rather than “supporting”). Use linking words to connect reasons for liking the workplace.

Example: Yes, I love working there because it’s very supportive: friendly colleagues and encouraging managers mentor me as I settle into the role, which makes me feel grateful and motivated.

Suggestion: Strong, well-organized answer with clear steps. Improve by tightening phrasing, using linking words (first, then, finally), and correcting small grammar (e.g. “to become a teacher”). You can also add a timeline to make it more specific.

Example: I have a few plans: first, I will get my Ukrainian master’s degree evaluated so it’s recognized in Canada; then I plan to enroll in additional teacher training, and finally I aim to become a public school teacher in Calgary within the next few years.

× I teach students from different countries coming to Canada as refugees and other vulnerable people, members of society to adapt to new life in Canada.

✓ I teach students from different countries who come to Canada as refugees and other vulnerable people, helping members of society adapt to their new life in Canada.

The original sentence misuses the present participle 'coming' without a relative pronoun, causing ambiguity and an awkward structure. Use a relative clause 'who come' to clearly link 'students' to 'coming to Canada', and replace the long noun phrase with a participial clause 'helping members of society adapt to their new life in Canada' for clarity and correct parallelism.

× Currently I work at the Immigrant Education Society.

✓ Currently, I work at the Immigrant Education Society.

The original sentence is missing a comma after the introductory adverb 'Currently'. While not a major grammatical error, punctuation improves readability. This is treated as a 'there be' type category per the provided list because it deals with sentence structure and introductory elements; add the comma to conform to standard written English.

× I work as in the link instructor and my job is very rewarding as I help people from different country mostly with no educational background to learn English.

✓ I work as a literacy instructor, and my job is very rewarding because I help people from different countries, mostly with no educational background, to learn English.

The original uses incorrect preposition/phrase 'as in the link instructor' (likely intended 'literacy instructor') and 'different country' (wrong number and missing article). Correct the job title, use 'because' to express reason, pluralize 'countries', and add commas around the parenthetical phrase 'mostly with no educational background' for clarity.

× I work in a very rewarding environment. Uh, both my students and my colleagues are very supportive, and I'm extremely grateful to my direct manager, John, who is mentoring me at every stage of my career.

✓ I work in a very rewarding environment. Both my students and my colleagues are very supportive, and I'm extremely grateful to my direct manager, John, who mentors me at every stage of my career.

The original mixes present continuous 'is mentoring' with a general habitual meaning. Use simple present 'mentors' to indicate regular action. Also remove filler 'Uh' for formal speech. This fixes pronoun/reference and tense suitability for habitual actions.

× I love the place where I work. I find it very supportive. My colleagues are very nice and friendly people. I find some of my direct managers very supporting at every stage of my career, mentoring me through the stages because I'm very new there and I'm very grateful for this.

✓ I love the place where I work. I find it very supportive. My colleagues are very nice and friendly people. I find some of my direct managers very supportive at every stage of my career, mentoring me through the stages because I'm new there, and I am very grateful for this.

The phrase 'very supporting' is incorrect; use the adjective 'supportive'. Also 'I'm very new there' can be simplified to 'I'm new there'. Use consistent contractions or full forms ('I'm' vs 'I am') and add commas for clarity.

× First of all, I'm planning to get my Ukrainian Masters diploma evaluated so it is recognized by Canadian institutions.

✓ First of all, I'm planning to get my Ukrainian master's diploma evaluated so it will be recognized by Canadian institutions.

'Masters' should be possessive 'master's' and the clause describing the result uses simple present 'is recognized' which is less appropriate for a planned future action; use 'will be recognized' to show expected future outcome. Also 'master's' should be lowercase and possessive.

× And after that I'm planning to apply for further education in teaching and to pursue my teaching goal, which is become a teacher in one of the public schools of Calgary.

✓ After that, I'm planning to apply for further education in teaching and to pursue my teaching goal, which is to become a teacher in one of the public schools in Calgary.

The phrase 'which is become a teacher' is missing the infinitive 'to'. Add 'to' before 'become' and correct preposition to 'in Calgary'. Also add a comma after introductory 'After that' for clarity.