Work— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 質問に直接答えた点は良いですが、文法ミス、語彙選択の誤り（"measuring"など）と冗長な説明があります。改善のためには正しい学科名（majors）、簡潔な主語文を使い、その後に目的（why）を1文で付け加える練習をしてください。具体的には動詞の形や前置詞（in／major in）、接続詞の使い方を確認し、5文以内で要点をまとめることを意識しましょう。

Example: I'm a second-year university student majoring in English and Accounting. I chose these subjects because I plan to work in international finance after I graduate.

Suggestion: 場所の言い方が不自然で冠詞や固有名詞の使い方に誤りがあります。短い直接的な文で場所を述べ、必要ならお店の種類や役割を続けて具体性を出しましょう。場所名が固有名詞でない場合は前置詞と一般名詞（"at a shopping mall"）を使います。

Example: I work at a shopping mall called Near the House. I usually help customers at a clothing store there.

Suggestion: 肯定はしていますが、文法（'so that because'、'my work colleague many friendly people'）と語順の誤りが目立ち、意味が伝わりにくいです。まず簡潔な主語文で理由を述べ、その後で具体例（同僚の態度、働きやすさ）を一つ追加してください。接続詞（because, so）を正しく使い、複雑にし過ぎないことが重要です。

Example: Yes, it's a good place to work because my colleagues are very friendly. For example, they always help me when I have questions, which makes the job enjoyable.

Suggestion: 質問の意味（Would you like the place where you work?＝その職場が気に入っているか）には答えていますが、表現が不自然で語彙ミス（'career'と'career'の混同、'gospel'の誤用）や文法エラーが多いです。まず"Yes, I do"か"No, I don't"で明確に答え、理由を一つか二つの簡潔な文で述べてください。適切な語彙（friendly colleagues, pleasant environment, good opportunitiesなど）を使いましょう。

Example: Yes, I really like it because the working environment is friendly and relaxed. I also have good opportunities to learn new skills, which I appreciate.

Suggestion: 意図は伝わりますが語彙の誤り（'prone'）、文法と語順が不自然で動機の表現が単純すぎます。将来計画は明確に、職種や業界、理由や計画（study, internships）を織り交ぜて述べると高評価です。野心を示す場合でも理由を具体的に（career development, gain experience）することを勧めます。

Example: I plan to work for an international finance company after graduation. To prepare, I hope to do internships in finance and improve my language skills so I can work effectively in a global team.

× I'm a university student, I'm measuring in English and accounting and I'm currently in my second year because I want to work in international finance after graduation.

✓ I'm a university student. I'm majoring in English and accounting, and I'm currently in my second year because I want to work in international finance after graduation.

The original sentence has run-on structure and a wrong verb choice ('measuring' should be 'majoring'). Split into two clauses and use the correct verb for studying a subject. Use a comma before 'and' joining independent clauses. ・'measuring'→'majoring' because 'major in' is the correct collocation for a field of study. ・Separate independent clauses with a period or use a coordinating conjunction with a comma to avoid a run-on sentence.

× I'm working at Near the House shopping mall.

✓ I'm working at the Near the House shopping mall.

The name of the location includes a specific place, so the definite article 'the' is required before the shopping mall. Without the article the sentence sounds unnatural. Use 'the' when referring to a specific mall by name or description.

× Yes, I think so that because my work colleague many friendly people, so I'm how fun to work.

✓ Yes, I think so because my work colleagues are very friendly, so it's fun to work there.

Multiple issues: unnecessary words ('so that because'), wrong noun form ('colleague'→'colleagues'), missing verb ('are'), incorrect adverb/adjective usage ('many friendly people'→'very friendly'), and incorrect phrasing ('I'm how fun'→'it's fun'). Reorder into a clear sentence: cause ('because...') then result ('so it's fun to work there').

× Would you like the place where you work?

✓ Do you like the place where you work?

The examiner's question uses 'Would you like' which asks about preference in a hypothetical or polite offer; in this context the student should respond to 'Do you like...' However this is the examiner's line; treating as student prompt, the correct structure for asking about current satisfaction is 'Do you like...'. No pronoun error in the original, but to match expected tense/use, use 'Do you like'.

× I think it's great for to work because my career is good, so kind and cool. I love my work gospel.

✓ I think it's a great place to work because my coworkers are kind and cool. I love my job.

Several errors: 'great for to work' is ungrammatical—use 'a great place to work'. 'My career is good' is vague; use 'my coworkers are kind and cool' if referring to colleagues. 'I love my work gospel' uses 'gospel' incorrectly; correct is 'I love my job'. Replace awkward phrases and use correct noun forms.

× My future prone is working at international finance company. I want to be rich so I want to work international work.

✓ My future plan is to work at an international finance company. I want to be rich, so I want to work in international finance.

Multiple problems: 'prone'→'plan', missing infinitive 'to work', missing articles ('an international finance company'), and awkward phrase 'work international work'. Use 'work in international finance' to describe the field. Add commas for clarity and correct noun phrases.