Work— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more grammatically accurate and concise: start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., “I recently finished my studies, and now I work.”). Reduce fillers (“umm”) and give one or two specific details (job title, basic duties). Use correct verb forms and word order.

Example: I recently finished my studies, and I now work at Walmart as an online order picker. I collect items from the shelves and prepare them for customer delivery, usually working five days a week.

Suggestion: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence, then add a specific detail. Avoid vague endings. Use linking words (for example, because/so) for coherence. Correct small inaccuracies (e.g., say “omnichannel” or “online department” if you mean that).

Example: I work in the online (omnichannel) department at Walmart. It’s a large store that sells groceries, household goods and clothing, and my team focuses on fulfilling internet orders for customers.

Suggestion: Give a clear opinion and support it with concise reasons using linking words. Avoid repetition and hesitations. Use past tense correctly when comparing to previous jobs.

Example: Yes, it’s a good place to work because the atmosphere is friendly and management is supportive. I enjoyed it more than my previous job at Tim Hortons, which felt very stressful and depressing.

Suggestion: Be concise: give a direct statement then one or two specific reasons, using linking words (for example, because/so). Remove fillers and correct phrasing (e.g., “they provide flexible shifts”).

Example: Yes, I really like it because the working environment is friendly and management offers flexible shifts, which helps me reduce stress and balance my life.

Suggestion: Start with a clear plan statement, then list specific steps using linking words (first, then, finally). Be precise about which role or sector and the actions you will take (documents, exams, training). Avoid trailing off mid-sentence.

Example: In the future I plan to work in the healthcare sector. First, I will gather my certificates and apply for the required training; then I will take the language and licensing tests; finally I will apply for entry-level healthcare positions or further education.

× Well recently I done my study so now I am on a work so I work at umm Walmart as a online picking so I work on these places for around.

✓ Well, I recently finished my studies, so now I am working. I work at Walmart as an online picker, and I have worked there for around [time period].

The student used 'done' incorrectly for completed action; correct past tense is 'finished' or 'completed' (irregular verb 'do' past participle 'done' cannot follow 'I' without auxiliary). The sentence also needs present continuous 'I am working' for current activity and present perfect 'I have worked' to indicate duration up to now. Clarify 'an online picker' (article and noun) and add a time expression. Suggestions: use 'I recently finished my studies', 'I am working at Walmart as an online picker', and 'I have worked there for about three months' or similar.

× I work at Walmart in Omni department.

✓ I work at Walmart in the Omni department.

The noun 'department' requires the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific department. Use 'in the Omni department' not 'in Omni department'.

× It is like a big store where we can get all kind of grocery and household items as well as it sells umm clothes as well.

✓ It is a big store where we can get all kinds of groceries and household items, and it also sells clothes.

The original has awkward connectors and missing plural forms: 'all kind' should be 'all kinds' and 'grocery' should be plural 'groceries'. 'As well as it sells' is redundant; use 'and it also sells'. Reorder for clarity: 'a big store where we can get all kinds of groceries and household items, and it also sells clothes.'

× So I have been.

✓ So I have been working there for a while.

The fragment 'So I have been' lacks a main verb and is incomplete. 'Have been' requires a present participle to form present perfect continuous: 'I have been working.' Add duration if known: 'I have been working there for a while.'

× Yes, definitely it is a good place is as I previously worked at Tim Horton like it is very, very depressing place for me.

✓ Yes, definitely it is a good place. Previously I worked at Tim Hortons, which was a very depressing place for me.

The sentence combines clauses incorrectly and repeats verbs ('is a good place is'). Use separate sentences or correct relative clause: 'Previously I worked at Tim Hortons, which was very depressing.' Also use the correct name 'Tim Hortons' and past tense 'was' to describe past experience.

× So, uh, so while working over here, I am fully happy like I have a no more stress about any.

✓ So, while working here, I am very happy and I no longer have any stress.

Use 'while working here' rather than 'over here'. 'I am fully happy' is awkward; use 'I am very happy'. 'I have a no more stress' is incorrect—use 'I no longer have any stress' or 'I don't have any more stress.' Maintain present tense for current state.

× Yes, I I really like the place where I work recently, like the environment, friendly environment and uh, providing uh, management shifts will help me to reduce my stress.

✓ Yes, I really like the place where I work. Recently, the environment has been friendly, and the management providing flexible shifts helps reduce my stress.

Tense and word order issues: 'work recently' is awkward; separate ideas into sentences. Use present perfect 'has been friendly' for recent ongoing state. 'Providing management shifts' is ungrammatical—rephrase to 'the management providing flexible shifts' and use singular verb 'helps' to agree with the gerund phrase as subject.

× For my future job, uh, I definitely follow some rules like firstly, I will prepare myself to get the job in health department.

✓ For my future job, I will definitely follow some steps. First, I will prepare myself to get a job in the health department.

Mix of present and future; 'I definitely follow' should be future 'I will definitely follow'. 'Rules' is better as 'steps' or 'procedures' in this context. Use article 'the' before 'health department' and 'a job' rather than 'the job' unless specific.

× For that, firstly I collect all my documents, give my test, uh, language test and.

✓ For that, first I will collect all my documents and take my language test.

Tense and verb choice: 'I collect' should be future 'I will collect' to match planned actions. Use 'take my language test' rather than 'give my test'. Remove trailing 'and' and complete the sentence. Use 'first' instead of 'firstly' for smoother speech.