Hometown— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be concise, use correct grammar, and organize into a clear topic sentence plus one or two supporting details. Avoid repetition and unnecessary filler. Also correct verb forms (e.g., “I was born”) and use comparative structure properly (e.g., “smaller than Istanbul”).

Example: I was born in Bursa, which is my hometown, but I now live in Istanbul because I attend university. I love Bursa because it feels calmer and smaller than Istanbul, and it has a friendly community.

Suggestion: Start with a direct topic sentence stating what you like, then give two clear, specific supporting details using linking words (first, also, for example). Reduce hesitations and repetition, and choose precise vocabulary (e.g., “fresh air”, “local cuisine”).

Example: I especially like the fresh air in Bursa. For example, I can go for walks in the parks any time, and the city is famous for its delicious local cuisine, such as traditional Turkish breakfast and kebabs.

Suggestion: Use the present perfect for duration (I have lived) or simple past with clear time reference. Keep the answer short and correct grammar: give the exact length and a brief reason for moving. Avoid unclear phrases and extra details that confuse the timeline.

Example: I lived in Bursa for 18 years. I moved to Istanbul to start university when I was 19, so I have been living in Istanbul since then.

Suggestion: Answer directly with a balanced opinion, then give specific reasons and contrast using linking words (but, however). Correct vocabulary (e.g., “nightlife”, “bars”, “clubs”) and avoid awkward phrasing. Be precise about what is available for young people.

Example: Bursa is a pleasant place for young people but it doesn't have a lively nightlife. For example, there are nice cafes and restaurants where friends can meet, and some bars, but you won't find big clubs or late-night parties like in Istanbul.

× I born here but now I am living in Istanbul because of my college, University College so and now I'm a student.

✓ I was born here, but now I am living in Istanbul because of my college, University College, and now I'm a student.

The sentence omits the past participle auxiliairy 'was' for the passive construction 'was born'. Use the past passive 'was born' to indicate place of birth. Also add commas and a coordinating conjunction to improve sentence flow. Suggestion: Use 'I was born here' for birth statements and combine clauses with 'but' or 'and' and commas.

× I live in Istanbul but actually my hometown is in Bursa and I love Bursa.

✓ I live in Istanbul, but actually my hometown is Bursa, and I love Bursa.

Use simple present 'is' with 'hometown' and omit extra preposition 'in' after 'hometown is'. Add commas to separate clauses. This clarifies the contrast between current residence and hometown. Suggestion: Say 'my hometown is Bursa' rather than 'is in Bursa' when immediately naming the place.

× It's more small town than Istanbul and.

✓ It's smaller than Istanbul.

The comparative form should use the adjective in comparative form ('smaller') not 'more small'. The sentence also had a trailing conjunction 'and' with no continuation. Keep it concise: 'It's smaller than Istanbul.' Suggestion: Use 'smaller' for comparison and remove dangling conjunctions.

× Actually, I don't need anything special for love my hometown, but there is something also, uh, which is, uh, first of all, the fresh air.

✓ Actually, I don't need anything special to love my hometown, but there is something else: first of all, the fresh air.

Incorrect verb pattern 'need ... for love' should be 'need ... to love' (infinitive). 'Something also' is awkward; use 'something else'. Use a colon or comma for listing and remove filler 'uh'. Suggestion: Use 'to' before verbs that express purpose or intention and reorganize 'something else' for clarity.

× The air is really fresh and you can go, uh, whenever you want.

✓ The air is really fresh, and you can go whenever you want.

This sentence mainly needed punctuation and removal of filler. 'You' is acceptable here as a general pronoun referring to people in general. Remove extraneous 'uh' and add a comma before the conjunction. Suggestion: Remove fillers and use commas to separate clauses.

× You can walk and uh, there are lots of delicious, delicious food.

✓ You can walk, and there is lots of delicious food.

Use 'there is' (or 'there are' with plural noun) correctly: 'lots of food' is treated as a mass noun so 'there is lots of delicious food' is idiomatic. Remove filler and duplicate adjective. Suggestion: Say 'lots of delicious food' without repeating the adjective.

× I lived in Bursa like 18 years, which is the college is a minor neck which I finished and then I start to university at my 19.

✓ I lived in Bursa for about 18 years. I finished middle school there, and then I started university when I was 19.

Duration expression requires 'for' and 'about' for approximation. 'Which is the college is a minor neck' is ungrammatical; likely meant 'I finished middle school there'. Use past simple 'started' for a completed action and 'when I was 19' to indicate age. Suggestion: Use 'for about 18 years', 'finished middle school', and 'started university when I was 19'.

× So now I'm in Istanbul.

✓ So now I'm in Istanbul.

This sentence is grammatically correct; it uses the present continuous contraction appropriately to describe current location. No change needed. Suggestion: None.

× Actually, it's not a craziest place to be there for your 18th or 20th, but also you can go and have a cocktails, you can go your friends and enjoy your meals cocktails, but you can't go like a very good party.

✓ Actually, it's not the craziest place to be at 18 or 20, but you can go out and have cocktails with your friends and enjoy meals; you just can't find very good parties.

Superlative 'craziest' requires the definite article 'the'. 'Be there for your 18th or 20th' is awkward; say 'be at 18 or 20'. 'Have a cocktails' mixes singular and plural; use 'have cocktails' or 'have a cocktail'. 'Go your friends' needs 'go with your friends' or 'be with your friends'. 'Enjoy your meals cocktails' is confused; separate 'meals' and 'cocktails'. Use 'find' to express availability of parties. Suggestion: Use 'the craziest', correct article+noun number agreement, and prepositions like 'with' for companions.

× You couldn't find anything like that.

✓ You won't find anything like that.

Context is general truth about the town now; use modal 'won't' (future/expectation) or 'can't' (general inability). 'Couldn't' is past conditional and mismatches context. Using 'won't' or 'can't' clarifies meaning. Suggestion: Use 'won't find' or 'you can't find' to express lack of such parties in general.

× But it's a really good place to have fun.

✓ But it's a really good place to have fun.

This final sentence is correct and fits context; no grammatical change required. Suggestion: None.