Puzzles— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and organize your answer with a clear topic sentence, one or two supporting details, and avoid fillers (uh, like). Use linking words to make it smooth (for example, "because" or "so"). Also correct minor grammar: use past simple consistently ("I did them" or "I used to solve them").

Example: I used to do puzzles from the weekend newspaper when I was a child. I solved crossword and picture puzzles every Saturday because my family always bought a paper with a puzzle section, so it became a regular hobby.

Suggestion: Start with a direct topic sentence answering the question, then give one or two specific details. Remove repetition and filler phrases ("I do say", "when I start feeling some bored"). Use linking words such as "usually" and "because" to make it coherent. Mention concrete examples (app names or types) if possible.

Example: I usually do puzzles when I feel bored or have spare time. For example, I play word quizzes and logic games on a mobile app called "QuizTime" because they are quick and help me relax during short breaks.

Suggestion: Answer directly ("I prefer word puzzles") then explain why with specific reasons. Avoid unclear phrases and repetitions. Use linking words like "because" and give a clear comparison ("number puzzles are more/less difficult because..."). Also correct vocabulary mistakes ("word puzzles help me learn new words").

Example: I prefer word puzzles because they help me learn new vocabulary and meanings. Number puzzles are more difficult for me, since they require fast calculations, whereas word puzzles let me think and learn at the same time.

Suggestion: Begin with a clear opinion (yes/no/it depends), then explain with two concise reasons using linking words ("however", "because"). Avoid vague phrases ("you know", "some their own business") and correct grammar ("an activity", "keep their minds sharp").

Example: I think it depends: after retirement, doing puzzles is a good idea because they keep the mind sharp and provide a pleasant daily activity. However, if older adults are already busy with work or responsibilities, puzzles might not be necessary.

× And it's very much, when I was a child, I used to, uh, do puzzles in newspaper because every weekend we had a like newspaper with the puzzles.

✓ When I was a child, I used to do puzzles printed in the newspaper because every weekend we had a newspaper with puzzles.

The original sentence mixes present and past ('And it's very much' with 'when I was a child' and 'used to'). Remove unnecessary present phrase and correct noun phrase 'in newspaper' to 'in the newspaper'. Use 'used to' followed by base verb without filler words. Suggestion: start with the time expression, use definite article with 'newspaper', and avoid filler words.

× So I did solve so many puzzles in my childhood days.

✓ So I solved so many puzzles in my childhood.

Redundant auxiliary 'did' is unnecessary with simple past 'solved'. 'Childhood days' is redundant; 'childhood' is uncountable. Use simple past 'solved' and 'in my childhood'.

× I do say when I feel bored that time I do puzzles, I have some application on my mobile phone like quizzes and other kind of puzzles and I do solve it when I get some free time and when I start feeling some bored.

✓ I would say when I feel bored I do puzzles. I have some apps on my phone with quizzes and other kinds of puzzles, and I solve them when I have free time or start feeling bored.

The original repeats 'do' excessively and uses awkward phrases. Use 'I would say' for hedging, 'apps' (plural) and 'other kinds of puzzles' for correct pluralization. Use 'solve them' to agree with plural 'apps/puzzles'. Replace 'that time' with 'when' and 'some free time' with 'free time'.

× I do say I like more the word puzzles and in in bird puzzles you can learn like new birds and I have a one application when I solve a puzzle then I can get a meaning of that word as well.

✓ I would say I prefer word puzzles. In word puzzles you can learn new words, and I have an app that shows the meaning of a word when I solve a puzzle.

'Like more' is ungrammatical; use 'prefer' or 'like... more'. 'Bird puzzles' seems incorrect contextually; likely 'word puzzles'. 'I have a one application' should be 'an app' and relative clause 'that shows the meaning' is clearer. Avoid filler 'like'.

× If they are with you know kind of some other works like some their own business, then I don't think it is a good idea.

✓ If they are busy with other work, such as their own business, then I don't think it is a good idea.

Replace filler 'you know' and incorrect 'some other works' with 'other work' (uncountable). Use 'busy with' to express occupied state. 'Some their own business' is incorrect ordering; use 'such as their own business'.

× But after retirement I think is good thing to keep their mind straight and they'll get a activity to do.

✓ But after retirement I think it is a good way to keep their minds active and they'll have an activity to do.

Missing subject 'it' before 'is a good thing'. 'Keep their mind straight' is awkward; use 'keep their minds active'. 'A activity' should be 'an activity'. Ensure subject-verb agreement and correct articles.