Jewelry— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is understandable but can be improved by making it more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy like "whenever I wear that" and clarify "on that occasions" to "on special occasions." Also, try to use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

Example: No, I don't often wear jewelry because I find it quite heavy. However, I do wear it on special occasions.

Suggestion: Your answer is a bit unclear and repetitive. Instead of saying "it finds me more beautiful" and "it shows to me more," try to express your opinion clearly. Use linking words like "because" and avoid repeating phrases. Also, mention specific reasons why you prefer silver jewelry.

Example: I like silver jewelry because it complements my skin tone and matches well with all my outfits. I prefer it over gold or diamond jewelry because it looks elegant yet simple.

Suggestion: Your answer is somewhat confusing and contains grammatical errors. Try to structure your response clearly by stating your main point first, then giving reasons. Avoid unnecessary words like "sorry." Use linking words such as "because" to explain your reasons.

Example: No, I don't usually buy jewelry because I already have a few earrings and necklaces that match almost all my outfits.

Suggestion: Your answer has good ideas but lacks clarity and fluency. Avoid filler words like "uh" and improve sentence structure. Use linking words like "because" and "for example" to connect your points. Also, be more specific and concise.

Example: People often wear a piece of jewelry for a long time because it may be precious, like gold, or it might have sentimental value if it was given by loved ones. For example, a ring from a family member can be very special.

× No, I don't often wear jewelry as I find it quite heavy on my body whenever I wear that so I just wear on that occasions.

✓ No, I don't often wear jewelry as I find it quite heavy on my body whenever I wear it, so I just wear it on those occasions.

The preposition 'on' was missing before 'those occasions' and 'that' should be 'it' to correctly refer to jewelry. Also, 'that occasions' is incorrect; it should be 'those occasions' because 'occasions' is plural.

× I like silver jewelry as it finds me more beautiful and it shows to me more than the other jewelry that is gold or maybe diamond but I like the silver jewelry the most and it also just matches with all my outfits.

✓ I like silver jewelry as it makes me look more beautiful and it suits me better than other jewelry like gold or maybe diamond, but I like silver jewelry the most because it matches all my outfits.

The phrase 'it finds me more beautiful' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'it makes me look more beautiful'. Also, 'it shows to me more' is incorrect; 'it suits me better' is appropriate. The sentence was also restructured for clarity and correctness.

× No I don't usually buy it sorry as I have limited earrings and necklaces with suits with almost my every outfit and that's the reason I don't buy most jewelry.

✓ No, I don't usually buy it because I have a limited number of earrings and necklaces that go with almost every outfit, and that's the reason I don't buy much jewelry.

The phrase 'limited earrings and necklaces' is vague; 'a limited number of earrings and necklaces' is clearer. Also, 'most jewelry' is incorrect here; 'much jewelry' is appropriate for uncountable nouns like jewelry.

× Somewhere a piece of jewelry for a longer period of time because that jewelry maybe, uh, is owned by themselves and maybe precious such as gold or sometimes their jewelry is given them, given to them by their loved ones and they want to keep it as me and they never want to lose that.

✓ Some people wear a piece of jewelry for a long time because it may be owned by them and be precious, such as gold, or sometimes the jewelry is given to them by their loved ones, and they want to keep it like I do; they never want to lose it.

The original sentence was fragmented and unclear. It lacked a proper subject and verb in the beginning. Pronouns were misused ('owned by themselves' should be 'owned by them'), and phrases like 'given them' should be 'given to them'. The sentence was restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.