Jewelry— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is quite long and a bit unclear in places. Try to make your sentences shorter and more direct. Also, avoid grammatical errors like 'help' instead of 'helps' and 'used to live' which is confusing here. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' properly to connect ideas logically.

Example: Yes, I often wear jewelry because it helps me express my personality. I especially like to wear pieces that were gifted by my family, as they are very special to me. I usually wear jewelry on special occasions and when meeting friends and family.

Suggestion: Your answer has some unclear phrases and grammatical mistakes, such as 'static kind of jewellery' and 'wait these kinds of jewels'. Try to use clearer vocabulary and correct verb forms. Also, organise your ideas logically with linking words like 'because' and 'so'.

Example: I like simple and elegant jewelry because I am an organised person. Especially, I love gold-colored pieces as they make me feel very happy. Also, when I feel low, I enjoy window shopping for jewelry, and sometimes I buy something to lift my mood.

Suggestion: Your answer is a bit repetitive and has grammatical errors like 'help' instead of 'helps' and 'spending it like water' which is informal and unclear. Try to be more concise and use appropriate expressions. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' to connect ideas smoothly.

Example: Yes, I usually buy jewelry only for special occasions because I already have many pieces. I prefer to save money rather than spend it unnecessarily. When I attend parties or receptions, I like to buy something attractive that enhances my personality and earns compliments.

Suggestion: Your answer is unclear and contains many grammatical mistakes and confusing phrases like 'wage whether we' and 'watch wear some kind of jewellery'. Try to organise your ideas clearly and use correct vocabulary. Also, use linking words such as 'because' and 'also' to make your answer coherent.

Example: I think some people wear jewelry for a long time because of their religious beliefs. For example, many wear certain pieces as a symbol of their faith. Also, women often wear gold jewelry for a long time since it makes them feel confident and they receive compliments. Additionally, some people wear jewelry like watches every day as part of their style.

× Yes I do actually because it really help me to groom my personality that's why I used to live with the value that is gifted my family as it's very special for me.

✓ Yes I do actually because it really helps me to groom my personality. That's why I live by the values gifted to me by my family as they are very special to me.

The verb 'help' should be in third person singular form 'helps' to agree with the singular subject 'it'. Also, 'used to live' is incorrect here; the present tense 'live' fits better to express a current habit. Additionally, 'value' should be plural 'values' and the phrase 'gifted my family' should be 'gifted to me by my family' for clarity and correctness.

× Moreover, I wear it on special occasion as well as when I'm going for meet and greet with my friends and family.

✓ Moreover, I wear it on special occasions as well as when I'm going to meet and greet my friends and family.

The phrase 'on special occasion' should be plural 'on special occasions' to indicate general instances. Also, 'going for meet and greet' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'going to meet and greet'.

× I really like a static kind of jewellery because I'm an organized girl, so I always prefer the things that are really good on me.

✓ I really like a static kind of jewellery because I'm an organized girl, so I always prefer things that really suit me.

The phrase 'the things that are really good on me' is awkward; 'things that really suit me' is more natural. Also, 'a static kind of jewellery' is unclear; if 'static' is intended, it may be better to clarify or use a different adjective.

× Moreover, when I whenever I wait these kinds of jewels, especially the jewelry in gold colour, I always feel over the moon.

✓ Moreover, whenever I wear these kinds of jewels, especially gold-colored jewelry, I always feel over the moon.

The word 'wait' is incorrect; it should be 'wear' when referring to jewelry. Also, 'in gold colour' should be 'gold-colored' or 'gold-colored jewelry'.

× Apart from that, it really happened to boost my mood.

✓ Apart from that, it really helps to boost my mood.

The phrase 'it really happened to boost my mood' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'it really helps to boost my mood' to indicate a habitual effect.

× Whenever I'm feeling low, I just go from window shopping of jewellery and sometimes I really buy it.

✓ Whenever I'm feeling low, I just go window shopping for jewellery and sometimes I really buy some.

The phrase 'go from window shopping of jewellery' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'go window shopping for jewellery'. Also, 'buy it' is vague; 'buy some' is clearer.

× Yes, I buy jewelry but own a special occasion because I already have too much of that, so I always prefer to save money rather than spending it like water.

✓ Yes, I buy jewelry only on special occasions because I already have too much of it, so I always prefer to save money rather than spend it like water.

The phrase 'own a special occasion' should be 'only on special occasions'. Also, 'too much of that' should be 'too much of it'. The phrase 'spending it like water' is idiomatic but acceptable; 'rather than spend it' is correct verb form after 'prefer'.

× So whenever I have a special kind of party or any kind of reception, I always prefer to buy something really aesthetic for me because it really help me to groom my personality and I get a lot of compliments after wearing that particular jewellery.

✓ So whenever I have a special kind of party or any kind of reception, I always prefer to buy something really aesthetic for me because it really helps me to groom my personality and I get a lot of compliments after wearing that particular jewellery.

The verb 'help' should be in third person singular form 'helps' to agree with the singular subject 'it'.

× If I'm not mistaken, some of the people wage whether we because of their religions act like most of the people have their religions individually.

✓ If I'm not mistaken, some people wear jewelry because of their religions, as most people have their own religious beliefs.

The original sentence is unclear and contains incorrect words like 'wage whether we'. It should be 'wear jewelry because of their religions'. Also, 'have their religions individually' is better expressed as 'have their own religious beliefs'.

× Apart from that, ladies like to wear gold jewellery for a long time because they feel that whenever they wear gold jewellery they get a lot of compliments as well as some people like to watch wear some kind of jewellery everyday like watch.

✓ Apart from that, ladies like to wear gold jewellery for a long time because they feel that whenever they wear gold jewellery they get a lot of compliments. Also, some people like to wear some kind of jewellery every day, like a watch.

The phrase 'some people like to watch wear some kind of jewellery' is incorrect. It should be 'some people like to wear some kind of jewellery every day, like a watch'. Also, 'everyday' should be 'every day' as an adverbial phrase.