Jewelry— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer should be more natural and clear. Avoid redundancy and grammatical errors. Try to directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence, then add specific supporting details using linking words. For example, explain why silver jewelry suits your personality and how it affects you.

Example: Yes, I often wear jewelry because it complements my personality. For instance, I prefer silver jewelry as it gives me a cool and calm feeling, which I really appreciate.

Suggestion: Your answer needs to be clearer and more coherent. Use linking words to connect your ideas and correct grammar. Explain the myth briefly and how silver jewelry relates to your tradition with specific details.

Example: I like wearing silver jewelry because, according to a myth, it helps to cool down the body. Moreover, silver jewelry reflects my cultural traditions, which makes it more meaningful to me.

Suggestion: Your answer is relevant but a bit repetitive. Try to avoid repeating the same idea and use linking words to make your answer more fluent. Also, use more varied vocabulary to express your points.

Example: I usually buy jewelry on weekends with my parents because, as a student, I don't have enough time during weekdays. Therefore, weekends are the best time for me to shop with my family.

Suggestion: Your answer should be more natural and detailed. Use linking words to explain your ideas clearly. Provide specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

Example: I believe people wear jewelry for a long time because it holds sentimental value. For example, if a piece of jewelry is a gift from a loved one, it creates a strong emotional bond that makes them cherish it.

× Yes, I wear jewelry on regular basis because jewelry suits on my personality and I think the silver jewelry just cooled down me and very grateful for me.

✓ Yes, I wear jewelry on a regular basis because jewelry suits my personality and I think the silver jewelry just cools me down and I am very grateful for it.

The phrase 'on regular basis' requires the article 'a' to be correct: 'on a regular basis'. The verb 'suits' should be followed directly by the object without 'on'. 'Cooled down me' is incorrect; the correct form is 'cools me down'. Also, 'very grateful for me' is incorrect; it should be 'I am very grateful for it' to correctly express gratitude towards the jewelry.

× I like to wear silver jewelry because there is was a myth of jewelry cools down for some temperature and from my traditional I like to wear silver jewelry because silver jewelry show my tradition.

✓ I like to wear silver jewelry because there was a myth that jewelry cools down the body at some temperatures and from my tradition, I like to wear silver jewelry because silver jewelry shows my tradition.

The phrase 'there is was' is incorrect; it should be either 'there is' or 'there was' depending on tense. Here, past tense 'there was' fits better. The phrase 'myth of jewelry cools down for some temperature' is awkward; it should be 'myth that jewelry cools down the body at some temperatures'. 'From my traditional' is incorrect; it should be 'from my tradition'. Also, 'silver jewelry show' should be 'silver jewelry shows' to agree with singular subject.

× I buy jewelry on weekends with my parents because I am a student and I do not have sufficient time to buy jewelry on regular working days. But I prefer to buy jewelry only on weekends with my family members.

✓ I buy jewelry on weekends with my parents because I am a student and I do not have sufficient time to buy jewelry on regular working days. But I prefer to buy jewelry only on weekends with my family members.

This sentence is grammatically correct and fits the present tense context of the question. No correction needed.

× According to me, people wear jewelry for long time because the bond and the relationship between jewelry and people is made. For example, the jewelry is gifted by some person.

✓ According to me, people wear jewelry for a long time because a bond and relationship are formed between the jewelry and the person. For example, the jewelry is gifted by someone.

The phrase 'for long time' requires the article 'a' to be correct: 'for a long time'. 'The bond and the relationship between jewelry and people is made' is awkward; it should be 'a bond and relationship are formed between the jewelry and the person' to correctly express the idea. 'Some person' is unnatural; 'someone' is the correct pronoun here.