Jewelry— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Try to use correct verb tenses and avoid redundancy. Also, make your sentences clearer and more natural by saying, for example, 'I don't often wear jewellery because it makes me uncomfortable. For instance, I wore some metal jewellery to my brother's wedding last year, and it irritated my skin.'

Example: I don't often wear jewellery because it makes me uncomfortable. For instance, I wore some metal jewellery to my brother's wedding last year, and it irritated my skin.

Suggestion: Focus on clarity and correct word choice. Avoid confusing phrases like 'her metal jewelry' and 'metals Valerie'. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, say 'I prefer simple jewellery that suits my personality because metal jewellery irritates my skin. For example, when I wore metal jewellery to my brother's wedding last year, my skin became very irritated.'

Example: I prefer simple jewellery that suits my personality because metal jewellery irritates my skin. For example, when I wore metal jewellery to my brother's wedding last year, my skin became very irritated.

Suggestion: Use correct grammar and more natural phrasing. Instead of 'my cousin sister send me more jewelry', say 'my cousin often sends me jewellery from abroad, so I don't usually buy much myself.'

Example: I don't usually buy much jewellery because my cousin often sends me jewellery from abroad.

Suggestion: Make sure your sentences are complete and clear. Use linking words to connect ideas. For example, say 'Some people wear jewellery for a long time because it is expensive, and they have invested a lot of money in it.'

Example: Some people wear jewellery for a long time because it is expensive, and they have invested a lot of money in it.

× For example, last year I wear wore jewelry on my brother's wedding and I feel very uncomfortable on the wedding because it is made-up of metals.

✓ For example, last year I wore jewelry to my brother's wedding and I felt very uncomfortable at the wedding because it was made of metal.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'wear wore' which is redundant and incorrect. The past tense of 'wear' is 'wore', so only 'wore' should be used. Also, 'on my brother's wedding' should be 'to my brother's wedding' to indicate attending the event. 'I feel' should be in past tense 'I felt' to match the past context. 'It is made-up of metals' should be 'it was made of metal' for correct past tense and preposition usage.

× I like simple jewellery which suits on my personality and I did not like her metal jewelry because it affects on my skin.

✓ I like simple jewellery which suits my personality and I do not like metal jewelry because it affects my skin.

The phrase 'suits on my personality' is incorrect; 'suits my personality' is correct without 'on'. 'Did not like' should be 'do not like' to maintain present tense consistency. 'Affects on my skin' should be 'affects my skin' without 'on'.

× For example, last year I wore metals Valerie to my brother's wedding and my skin feels very irritated.

✓ For example, last year I wore metal jewellery to my brother's wedding and my skin felt very irritated.

'Metals Valerie' is unclear and likely a mistake; 'metal jewellery' is appropriate. 'My skin feels' should be 'my skin felt' to maintain past tense consistency.

× Well, I do not spend more money to buy jewelry because my cousin sister send me more jewelry from abroad.

✓ Well, I do not spend much money to buy jewelry because my cousin sends me a lot of jewelry from abroad.

'More money' is incorrect here; 'much money' is used for uncountable nouns like money. 'Cousin sister' is redundant; 'cousin' suffices. 'Send' should be 'sends' for third person singular. 'More jewelry' should be 'a lot of jewelry' for correct quantification.

× Well, some people jewellery and they wear it for a long time because it is very. High cost and they invest a large amount on that thing.

✓ Well, some people keep jewellery and wear it for a long time because it is very expensive and they invest a large amount in it.

The sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'Some people jewellery' is incomplete; 'keep jewellery' or 'have jewellery' is correct. 'It is very. High cost' is incorrect; 'it is very expensive' is appropriate. 'Invest a large amount on that thing' should be 'invest a large amount in it' for correct preposition and clarity.