Jewelry— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Try to avoid repeating the word "jewelries" multiple times and use singular or plural forms correctly. Also, keep your answer concise and avoid redundancy by combining ideas smoothly. For example, you can say "I often wear jewelry, especially necklaces and bracelets, because many pieces are gifts from my mom and hold special sentimental value."

Example: Yes, I often wear jewelry, especially necklaces and bracelets, because many pieces are gifts from my mom and hold special sentimental value for me.

Suggestion: Make sure to use correct plural forms (e.g., "necklaces") and avoid vague phrases like "more edgy." Instead, explain clearly how the jewelry enhances your style. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

Example: I like wearing bracelets and necklaces because they enhance my style by adding a fashionable and unique touch to my outfits.

Suggestion: Avoid using inappropriate language and focus on clear, polite responses. Use correct grammar such as "jewelry" (uncountable) and improve sentence structure. For example, explain your situation clearly and politely.

Example: No, I don't usually buy jewelry because I am still a university student, and my mom kindly buys jewelry for me as a way of supporting me.

Suggestion: Try to organize your ideas with linking words and avoid listing without clear structure. Also, use more precise vocabulary and avoid vague phrases like "standing in the society." For example, explain reasons clearly and logically.

Example: I think people wear jewelry for a long time for various reasons. Firstly, it can be a fashion statement, and secondly, it may symbolize their social status, especially among wealthy individuals.

× Yes, I often wear jewelries, especially necklaces and bracelets.

✓ Yes, I often wear jewelry, especially necklaces and bracelets.

The word 'jewelry' is an uncountable noun and does not have a plural form. Using 'jewelries' is incorrect. Use 'jewelry' to refer to the collection of ornaments.

× I personally love wearing jewelries as most of my jewelries are from my mom which holds a special place in my heart and it's really valuable to me.

✓ I personally love wearing jewelry as most of my jewelry is from my mom which holds a special place in my heart and is really valuable to me.

Again, 'jewelry' is uncountable and should not be pluralized. Also, 'most of my jewelry is' uses singular verb 'is' because 'jewelry' is singular uncountable.

× That's why I prefer wearing it everywhere I go.

✓ That's why I prefer wearing it everywhere I go.

No grammatical error in this sentence.

× The type of jewelry that I often use are bracelets and necklace because it just makes your fashion more elevated and it's more edgy when wearing one.

✓ The types of jewelry that I often use are bracelets and necklaces because they just make your fashion more elevated and it's edgier when wearing one.

'Type' should be plural 'types' because multiple items are mentioned. 'Bracelets and necklace' should be 'bracelets and necklaces' to match plural. Also, 'it just makes' should be 'they just make' to agree with plural subject. 'More edgy' is better as 'edgier' (comparative adjective).

× No, I don't usually buy jewelries because as of the moment I'm still a university student and the one who usually buy my jewelry is my mom because she is supportive in every step of the way.

✓ No, I don't usually buy jewelry because at the moment I'm still a university student and the one who usually buys my jewelry is my mom because she is supportive every step of the way.

'Jewelry' is uncountable and should not be pluralized. 'The one who usually buy' should be 'the one who usually buys' to agree with singular subject. 'As of the moment' is better expressed as 'at the moment'. 'Supportive in every step of the way' should be 'supportive every step of the way'.

× I think the reason why people wear pieces of jewelry for a long time is due to different reasons such as one for the sake of fashion, second is to show their standing in the society, especially rich people.

✓ I think the reason why people wear pieces of jewelry for a long time is due to different reasons such as one for the sake of fashion, the second is to show their standing in society, especially rich people.

'The society' should be 'society' without 'the' because it refers to society in general. Also, 'second' should be preceded by 'the' to parallel 'one'.