Jewelry— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Bạn nên chú ý đến ngữ pháp và phát âm chính xác, ví dụ như 'every days' nên là 'every day' và 'next lace' có thể là 'necklace'. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời nên ngắn gọn, tự nhiên và tránh lặp từ. Hãy sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

Example: Yes, I wear jewelry every day, such as necklaces and rings. I usually wear them when I go to school or work because I think they make me look more attractive.

Suggestion: Bạn cần chú ý đến cấu trúc ngữ pháp, ví dụ 'I really interested' nên là 'I am really interested'. Ngoài ra, hãy sử dụng các liên từ như 'because' hoặc 'so' để câu trả lời rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn. Cố gắng sử dụng từ vựng phong phú và chính xác hơn.

Example: I am really interested in diamond rings because they make people look luxurious and wealthy. However, they are quite expensive in my country, so I plan to save money to buy one in the future.

Suggestion: Bạn nên chú ý đến thì động từ và cách dùng giới từ, ví dụ 'give me in my birthday' nên là 'gave me for my birthday'. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời có thể thêm một chút chi tiết để phong phú hơn và sử dụng liên từ để câu mạch lạc.

Example: No, I don't usually buy jewelry because I already have a nice necklace and a ring that my mother and girlfriend gave me for my birthday. I think these are enough for me since I don't have much money.

Suggestion: Bạn nên tránh lặp từ và sử dụng cấu trúc câu rõ ràng hơn. Ví dụ, 'there's many people' nên là 'there are many people'. Hãy sử dụng các liên từ như 'firstly', 'secondly' để câu trả lời mạch lạc và logic hơn. Đồng thời, nên dùng từ vựng phù hợp và chính xác.

Example: There are many people who wear a piece of jewelry for a long time for several reasons. Firstly, it might be a gift from a relative or a special person, so they keep it as a memory. Secondly, it can enhance their appearance and make them feel more beautiful.

× Yes, I wear jewelry every days, including my next lace and the rings.

✓ Yes, I wear jewelry every day, including my necklace and the rings.

The word 'days' should be singular 'day' after 'every' because 'every' is followed by a singular noun. Also, 'next lace' is a misspelling of 'necklace'.

× I really interested in diamond ring because when wearing it people look more luxurious and rich, but honestly it is very expensive in our country now so I will try to earn more money to buy it in the future.

✓ I am really interested in diamond rings because when people wear them, they look more luxurious and rich, but honestly, they are very expensive in our country now so I will try to earn more money to buy one in the future.

The verb 'interested' requires the auxiliary verb 'am' to form the present continuous tense. 'Diamond ring' should be plural 'diamond rings' to generalize. 'When wearing it' is unclear; it should be 'when people wear them'. Also, 'it is very expensive' should be 'they are very expensive' to agree with plural 'rings'.

× No, I have a nice necklace and a ring that my mother and my girlfriend give me in my birthday.

✓ No, I have a nice necklace and a ring that my mother and my girlfriend gave me on my birthday.

The verb 'give' should be in the past tense 'gave' because the action happened in the past. Also, the preposition 'in' should be 'on' when referring to a specific day like 'my birthday'.

× No, I have a nice necklace and a ring that my mother and my girlfriend give me in my birthday.

✓ No, I have a nice necklace and a ring that my mother and my girlfriend gave me on my birthday.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect when referring to a specific day; 'on' is the correct preposition to use with 'my birthday'.

× Yes, there's many people wearing a kind of jewelry for a long time for some typical reasons.

✓ Yes, there are many people wearing a kind of jewelry for a long time for some typical reasons.

'There is' should be 'there are' because 'many people' is plural.

× Yes, there's many people wearing a kind of jewelry for a long time for some typical reasons.

✓ Yes, there are many people wearing a kind of jewelry for a long time for some typical reasons.

The phrase 'wearing a kind of jewelry for a long time' is acceptable, but 'wearing a piece of jewelry for a long time' would be more natural. However, the main issue is the verb agreement with 'there are'.

× The first reason is that that could be the gift from their relative or from a special person.

✓ The first reason is that it could be a gift from their relative or from a special person.

The phrase 'that that' is redundant; it should be 'it'. Also, 'the gift' should be 'a gift' because it is not a specific gift previously mentioned.

× So they want to keep it to be a memory and for a second it could make them more beautiful and nicer.

✓ So they want to keep it as a memory, and secondly, it could make them more beautiful and nicer.

The phrase 'to be a memory' should be 'as a memory'. 'For a second' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'secondly' to indicate the second reason. Also, a comma is needed before 'and' when joining two independent clauses.