Writing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Try to reduce filler words like 'umm' and 'uh' to make your answer sound more natural and fluent. Also, organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words for coherence. For example, start with a direct answer, then explain why you write a lot and your preference for notebooks over digital devices.

Example: Yes, I write a lot because I am currently a student and have many subjects. Moreover, I prefer writing notes in a notebook rather than using an iPad or smartphone because I find it more convenient and easier to remember.

Suggestion: Your answer is unclear and incomplete. Try to provide a clear topic sentence and explain what you like to write and why, using specific details. Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

Example: Besides school assignments, I enjoy writing diagrams every week to record my memories. This helps me revisit important moments and reflect on them later, which I find very meaningful.

Suggestion: Your answer is confusing and incomplete. Provide a clear topic sentence and explain with specific examples how some writings may change while others remain the same. Use linking words to clarify your points and avoid vague phrases.

Example: It depends on the content I write. For example, assignments usually stay the same because they are finalized, but plans or ideas can change over time as I update them.

Suggestion: Your answer has good points but is repetitive and incomplete. Try to clearly state your preference and explain the benefits with specific reasons. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

Example: I prefer handwriting because it is a traditional method that helps sharpen my memory. Additionally, it improves my handwriting skills and allows me to focus better compared to typing.

Suggestion: Avoid filler words and unclear phrases. Provide a clear answer about frequency and explain why keeping a diary is beneficial with specific details. Use linking words to make your answer coherent.

Example: I usually write in my diary on weekends. I believe this habit helps me preserve my memories clearly and brings me happiness by reflecting on my experiences.

Suggestion: Try to avoid filler words and incomplete sentences. Clearly state other methods you use to record your life and explain why you find them meaningful. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

Example: Apart from writing diaries, I often use my mobile phone to record videos. This is a wonderful way to capture memories visually, and it makes me feel happy when I watch them later.

× Yes, definitely umm, because I have been a student now, so I write a lot with many uh, subjects.

✓ Yes, definitely umm, because I am a student now, so I write a lot with many uh, subjects.

The phrase 'I have been a student now' incorrectly uses the present perfect tense to describe a current state. The simple present tense 'I am a student now' is appropriate to indicate the current status.

× I don't use uh, uh, iPad or smartphone to take note because I think right on a notebook is uh, is more convenient.

✓ I don't use uh, uh, iPad or smartphone to take notes because I think writing on a notebook is uh, is more convenient.

The phrase 'take note' should be plural 'take notes' when referring to making notes. Also, 'right on a notebook' is incorrect; it should be 'writing on a notebook' to correctly express the action.

× Well, apart from assignment or some subjects on school, I usually enjoy writing diagrams every week to to to record my memories and I can read again when I when I power.

✓ Well, apart from assignments or some subjects at school, I usually enjoy writing diagrams every week to record my memories and I can read them again when I have time.

The preposition 'on school' is incorrect; it should be 'at school'. Also, 'assignment' should be plural 'assignments' to match the context. The phrase 'when I when I power' is unclear and corrected to 'when I have time' for clarity.

× Well, apart from assignment or some subjects on school, I usually enjoy writing diagrams every week to to to record my memories and I can read again when I when I power.

✓ Well, apart from assignments or some subjects at school, I usually enjoy writing diagrams every week to record my memories and I can read them again when I have time.

The pronoun 'I can read again' lacks an object; adding 'them' clarifies that the student reads the diagrams again.

× Well, I think it depends on what content that I write.

✓ Well, I think it depends on the content that I write.

The phrase 'depends on what content' is awkward; 'depends on the content' is more natural and grammatically correct.

× If I write assignment or some task that I think is right because it is proved slightly.

✓ If I write an assignment or some task, I think it is correct because it has been proven slightly.

The sentence lacks articles before 'assignment' and 'task'. Also, 'proved' should be in present perfect passive 'has been proven' to indicate a past action relevant to the present.

× But if I write some plan or change it, I think it will be changed in.

✓ But if I write some plan or change it, I think it will change.

The phrase 'will be changed in' is incomplete and awkward. Using 'will change' is a clearer and grammatically correct future tense expression.

× Well, I prefer writing by hand because it is a traditional way to sharpen my memory and it helped me improve my handwriting skill and I think a handwriting helped me sharpen.

✓ Well, I prefer writing by hand because it is a traditional way to sharpen my memory and it helps me improve my handwriting skills and I think handwriting helps me sharpen it.

'Helped' should be present tense 'helps' to match the present preference. 'Handwriting skill' should be plural 'handwriting skills'. The article 'a' before 'handwriting' is unnecessary because 'handwriting' is uncountable.

× What? I often write my diary on weekends and I think it is a good habit for me to record my memory and it will be build my, umm, memories strongly, uh, to help me sharpen, sharpen and create a sense of happiness.

✓ I often write in my diary on weekends and I think it is a good habit for me to record my memories and it will build my memories strongly to help me sharpen and create a sense of happiness.

The phrase 'write my diary' should be 'write in my diary' to use the correct preposition. 'Record my memory' should be plural 'memories'. 'Will be build' is incorrect; it should be 'will build'. Repetition of 'sharpen' is unnecessary.

× Were apart from writing Diaries, I often use my mobile phones to record some video and I think it's really meaningful and a wonderful way to record my memories and uh, it helped me, uh, happy and uh.

✓ Well, apart from writing diaries, I often use my mobile phone to record some videos and I think it's really meaningful and a wonderful way to record my memories and it makes me happy.

'Were' is incorrect; it should be 'Well'. 'Diaries' should not be capitalized. 'Mobile phones' should be singular 'mobile phone' if referring to one device. 'Some video' should be plural 'some videos'. 'It helped me happy' is incorrect; it should be 'it makes me happy'.