Writing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và sắp xếp câu hợp lý. Bạn nên sử dụng câu chủ đề rõ ràng và bổ sung chi tiết cụ thể hơn, đồng thời tránh lặp từ và lỗi phát âm.

Example: Yes, I write quite often because I enjoy reading novels and expressing my feelings about my favorite characters. Additionally, I attend an extra literature class where I practice writing essays using advanced vocabulary.

Suggestion: Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi với câu chủ đề rõ ràng, tránh lặp lại ý và sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp. Câu trả lời cần mạch lạc và có liên kết logic giữa các ý.

Example: I like to write essays because it helps me improve my vocabulary and express my thoughts clearly. Besides, I enjoy writing novels as they allow me to share my feelings about characters and people around me.

Suggestion: Bạn cần chú ý ngữ pháp và phát âm, đồng thời sử dụng từ vựng chính xác. Câu trả lời nên rõ ràng, tránh lỗi và có cấu trúc mạch lạc với các liên từ phù hợp.

Example: I believe that what I write now reflects my feelings and perspective, so it won't change much. However, in the future, I want to improve my essay writing skills to make my ideas clearer and better organized. For example, I plan to learn how to use better vocabulary and structure my thoughts effectively.

Suggestion: Bạn nên sử dụng câu ngắn gọn, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và phát âm. Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng, có câu chủ đề và chi tiết hỗ trợ hợp lý, sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp với ngữ cảnh.

Example: I prefer typing on my laptop or iPad because I am comfortable with technology. My handwriting is poor, making it difficult for my family to read, so typing is easier and clearer for them.

Suggestion: Bạn cần chú ý ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ chính xác. Câu trả lời nên có cấu trúc rõ ràng, tránh lặp từ và sử dụng liên từ để câu văn mạch lạc hơn.

Example: I used to keep diaries regularly in the past, but now I am very busy, especially during the school term. Therefore, it is difficult for me to keep diaries in the future, and sometimes I even throw them away.

Suggestion: Bạn nên trả lời ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và tránh lặp từ. Câu trả lời cần có câu chủ đề và chi tiết hỗ trợ cụ thể, sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp và liên từ để câu văn mạch lạc.

Example: I usually use the camera on my phone to record my life. It allows me to capture nature, people, and moments that show how I see the world. My photo album contains selfies and pictures from trips with my parents.

× So right I in the extra literature class so I love to write essays with high vocabulary levels.

✓ So right now I am in the extra literature class, so I love to write essays with high vocabulary levels.

The original sentence lacks the correct present continuous tense 'am' for the verb 'to be' and has word order issues. The phrase 'right I in' is incorrect; it should be 'right now I am in' to indicate current action or state.

× Well, to be honest, I love to write an essay with high vocabulary and feel good for myself and my teachers.

✓ Well, to be honest, I love to write essays with high vocabulary and feel good about myself and my teachers.

The preposition 'for' is incorrectly used after 'feel good'. The correct preposition is 'about' to express feelings related to oneself or others. Also, 'an essay' should be plural 'essays' to match the general statement.

× Also, I love to write novels because in novels I can write my feelings about my favorite characters and my feelings about my teachers and my students, my friends.

✓ Also, I love to write novels because in novels I can express my feelings about my favorite characters, my teachers, my students, and my friends.

The phrase 'write my feelings about' is awkward; 'express my feelings about' is more natural. Also, listing items should be separated by commas and include 'and' before the last item for clarity.

× Well, I think that things I write properly wouldn't change much because they reflect my feelings and how I see the world.

✓ Well, I think that the things I write properly won't change much because they reflect my feelings and how I see the world.

The modal verb 'wouldn't' suggests conditional or hypothetical situations, but here the speaker expresses a belief about the future, so 'won't' (will not) is more appropriate.

× However, in the future, I believe that I need to improve the way I write essays to make it clearly and organized.

✓ However, in the future, I believe that I need to improve the way I write essays to make them clear and organized.

The adverb 'clearly' is incorrectly used; the adjective 'clear' should be used to describe 'essays'. Also, 'it' should be 'them' to agree with the plural noun 'essays'.

× For example, I want to learn how to use better for garblery to structure my ideas.

✓ For example, I want to learn how to use better vocabulary to structure my ideas.

The phrase 'use better for garblery' is incorrect and likely a misspelling of 'vocabulary'. The preposition 'for' is unnecessary here; 'use better vocabulary' is correct.

× Well when I on writing I prefer to typing in the laptop or in my iPad because I'm good at technology right handwriting my writing is not good and it's very bad and hard for my families to read so typing is easier and helps them read my knowledge.

✓ Well, when I am writing, I prefer typing on the laptop or on my iPad because I'm good at technology. Right now, my handwriting is not good; it's very bad and hard for my family to read, so typing is easier and helps them read my work.

The phrase 'when I on writing' is incorrect; it should be 'when I am writing'. 'Prefer to typing' should be 'prefer typing'. The preposition 'in' should be 'on' for devices. 'Families' should be singular 'family'. 'Read my knowledge' is awkward; 'read my work' is better.

× Well in the past I usually wrote Diaries but now I have many things to do and in the term time I don't have time to read Diaries.

✓ Well, in the past I usually wrote diaries, but now I have many things to do and during term time I don't have time to write diaries.

'Diaries' should not be capitalized. 'In the term time' is incorrect; 'during term time' is correct. Also, 'read diaries' should be 'write diaries' to match the context of keeping diaries.

× So keeping Diaries in the future is very hard because I have throw it away.

✓ So keeping diaries in the future will be very hard because I have to throw them away.

'Have throw' is incorrect; it should be 'have to throw'. 'Diaries' should not be capitalized. 'It' should be 'them' to agree with plural 'diaries'. The future tense 'will be' is appropriate here.

× I usually use my cameras in my phone to record my life because it helps me to talk with other people, how I can film the nature and feel the people and how I see the world.

✓ I usually use the camera on my phone to record my life because it helps me to communicate with other people, film nature, feel the people, and see the world.

'Cameras in my phone' is incorrect; it should be 'camera on my phone'. 'Talk with other people' is better as 'communicate with other people'. 'How I can film the nature' is awkward; 'film nature' is better. 'Feel the people' is unclear but kept as is.

× Usually the phones in my my album usually have my selfie and the pictures that I went everywhere with my parents.

✓ Usually, the photos in my album include my selfies and pictures from everywhere I have been with my parents.

'Phones in my album' is incorrect; it should be 'photos in my album'. 'My selfie' should be plural 'my selfies'. 'The pictures that I went everywhere' is incorrect; it should be 'pictures from everywhere I have been'. Duplicate 'my' is a typo.