Writing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but it is a bit repetitive and contains some grammatical errors. Try to avoid redundancy by combining similar ideas and use correct verb forms. Also, keep your answer concise within 5 sentences and use linking words to improve coherence.

Example: Yes, I write a lot, especially poems in both English and Urdu. I enjoy writing because it allows me to express my emotions and feelings at the moment. Since I am a sensitive person, putting my thoughts on paper helps me process them effectively.

Suggestion: Your answer addresses the question well but could be improved by correcting grammar and sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and provide more specific examples to enrich your response.

Example: I usually write various poems, including romantic ones that express love for God and humanity. Additionally, I write stories that reflect on current social changes and how society is evolving rapidly.

Suggestion: Your answer has good intentions but contains several grammatical mistakes and unclear phrases. Focus on using correct verb forms and clearer expressions. Also, organize your ideas logically with linking words to improve coherence.

Example: Yes, I hope my writing can influence society by encouraging positive changes in people's behaviour and emotions. I often write about how the past affects individuals and how they cope with depression and anxiety.

Suggestion: Your answer is clear and relevant with good reasons. To improve, avoid repeating similar ideas and use linking words to connect your points smoothly. Also, try to use more varied vocabulary related to writing preferences.

Example: I prefer handwriting over typing because it helps me think more deeply and express my ideas clearly. Moreover, I enjoy the tactile experience of using pen and paper rather than typing on a phone, which feels less personal.

Suggestion: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to express your ideas more clearly and avoid confusing phrases. Use linking words to connect your thoughts and keep your answer concise and relevant.

Example: I don't keep diaries often nowadays, although I used to in the past. I worry that if someone reads my diary, my privacy might be compromised. Therefore, I prefer to keep my emotions to myself and express my thoughts through other forms of writing.

Suggestion: Your answer is thoughtful but incomplete and has grammatical mistakes. Try to finish your sentences fully and use linking words to organize your ideas. Also, avoid filler words like 'uh' to sound more fluent.

Example: I mainly rely on my memory to record my life. Before sleeping, I often recall precious moments, both happy and sad, which brings peace to my heart and mind.

× Additionally, I also love writing because it give me a way to express myself, my emotions and the feelings I felt at that moment.

✓ Additionally, I also love writing because it gives me a way to express myself, my emotions and the feelings I felt at that moment.

The verb 'give' should be in the third person singular form 'gives' to agree with the singular subject 'it'. This is a subject-verb agreement issue where the verb must match the subject in number.

× I love to write with my feelings on paper.

✓ I love to write my feelings on paper.

The phrase 'write with my feelings' is incorrect because 'write' does not take 'with' in this context. The correct expression is 'write my feelings', directly expressing what is being written.

× romantic poems and shows love to God and also to the human being.

✓ romantic poems and show love to God and also to human beings.

The verb 'shows' should be 'show' to agree with the plural subject 'poems'. Also, 'the human being' is incorrect here; the plural 'human beings' is appropriate when referring generally to people.

× what's the society is doing nowadays and how the society is changing drastically.

✓ what society is doing nowadays and how society is changing drastically.

The definite article 'the' is unnecessary before 'society' when speaking generally. Also, 'what's the society is doing' is incorrect; it should be 'what society is doing'.

× to make changes in human's behaviour, their feeling and how they express their self.

✓ to make changes in humans' behaviour, their feelings and how they express themselves.

The possessive form 'human's' should be plural possessive 'humans'' to refer to people in general. 'Feeling' should be plural 'feelings' to match 'behaviour'. 'Their self' is incorrect; the reflexive pronoun should be 'themselves'.

× I also write about how past effects people and how people have to cop up their with their depressions and the anxieties that they have to.

✓ I also write about how the past affects people and how people have to cope with their depressions and anxieties.

'Effects' should be 'affects' as the verb meaning 'to influence'. 'Cop up their with' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'cope with'. Also, 'the anxieties that they have to' is incomplete and redundant.

× So I really express the past and how the worries.

✓ So I really express the past and how worries affect people.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'worries affect people' completes the thought and clarifies the meaning.

× I think writing is more work than typing.

✓ I think writing requires more work than typing.

The phrase 'writing is more work' is awkward. Using 'requires more work' clarifies the comparison between writing and typing.

× I am not a big lover of keeping Diaries, although I loved keeping Diaries in past but nowadays I feel like if someone sees my diary and I will be more accessible to dad.

✓ I am not a big fan of keeping diaries, although I loved keeping diaries in the past, but nowadays I feel like if someone sees my diary, I will be more accessible to my dad.

'Big lover' is not idiomatic; 'big fan' is better. 'Diaries' should not be capitalized. 'In past' needs the article 'the past'. The sentence is missing commas for clarity. 'Accessible to dad' is unclear; 'my dad' is more natural.

× So I just keep my emotions to myself, to my feelings to myself and also I write to express my thoughts on paper instead of just pointing on myself.

✓ So I just keep my emotions and feelings to myself, and also I write to express my thoughts on paper instead of just pointing at myself.

The phrase 'to my feelings to myself' is redundant and awkward; combining 'emotions and feelings' is clearer. 'Pointing on myself' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'pointing at myself'.

× The method I use to record my life is my memory.

✓ The method I use to record my life is my memory.

This sentence is grammatically correct and requires no correction.

× Uh, whenever I lay down on my bed and ready to sleep, I often remember the precious moments of my life, the beautiful moments, even the sad ones to memorize in my brain and it really give peace to my heart and mind and also make me.

✓ Uh, whenever I lie down on my bed and am ready to sleep, I often remember the precious moments of my life, the beautiful moments, even the sad ones, to memorize in my brain, and it really gives peace to my heart and mind and also makes me feel better.

The verb 'lay' is incorrectly used; the correct verb is 'lie' for reclining. 'Ready to sleep' needs the verb 'am' for correct structure. 'Give' should be 'gives' to agree with singular subject 'it'. The sentence is incomplete; adding 'makes me feel better' completes the thought.