Weather— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Try to use more natural and grammatically correct expressions. Avoid redundancy and clarify your points with specific details. For example, instead of 'Where I'm live it's basically the summer area,' say 'I live in a region with a mostly warm climate.' Also, avoid vague phrases like 'most of the time the sunlight is always in here.'

Example: I live in a region with a mostly warm climate. The weather is usually moderate, with plenty of sunshine but not too hot or cold. I really enjoy this kind of weather because it's comfortable year-round.

Suggestion: Focus on clearer sentence structure and avoid filler words like 'uh'. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then explain why you prefer hot weather with specific reasons.

Example: I prefer hot weather because I feel more productive and energetic during the summer. In contrast, cold weather makes me feel less motivated and less active. Therefore, warm weather helps me stay relaxed and robust.

Suggestion: Your answer is a bit confusing and repetitive. Try to organize your ideas logically and use linking words. Also, avoid unnecessary phrases like 'it's not my job and it's not my duty to.' Focus on clear reasons why you prefer dry weather.

Example: I prefer dry weather because it allows me to go out and hang out with my friends easily. When it's wet, I usually stay indoors, which I don't enjoy. Therefore, dry weather suits my lifestyle better.

Suggestion: Try to use simpler and clearer sentences. Avoid awkward phrases like 'any kinds of occasions' and 'more beautiful and more specific way.' Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

Example: I don't check the weather forecast regularly. However, before special events like university programs or birthday parties, I check the weather to plan better. If the weather is good, we can organize the event more comfortably.

Suggestion: Avoid repetition and improve sentence clarity. Use linking words to explain your points logically. Provide more specific examples of how climate change affects daily life.

Example: In recent years, climate change has caused extreme weather. Summers have become very hot, while winters are much colder than before. These changes affect our daily lives by making it harder to plan activities and impacting health.

Suggestion: Use clearer and more natural expressions. Avoid awkward phrases like 'end up in this weather.' Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide specific reasons for your interest.

Example: Yes, I would like to visit cities with different climates to experience how people live in those conditions. It would be a great opportunity to learn about their lifestyle and improve my ability to adapt to different environments.

× Where I'm live it's basically the summer area and most of the time the sunlight is always in here, but it's not so much light or too much cold, it's always in the moderate temperature.

✓ Where I live, it's basically a summer area and most of the time the sunlight is always here, but it's not too bright or too cold; the temperature is always moderate.

The phrase 'Where I'm live' incorrectly uses the present continuous tense instead of the simple present tense 'Where I live' to describe a general fact. Also, 'in here' is unnecessary; 'here' suffices. 'Not so much light or too much cold' is awkward; 'not too bright or too cold' is clearer. 'In the moderate temperature' should be 'the temperature is moderate' to correctly express the state.

× In too much cold weather, I feel like I'm productive less and I can't, I'm unproductive.

✓ In very cold weather, I feel less productive and unproductive.

The phrase 'I'm productive less' is incorrect; the adverb 'less' should come before the adjective 'productive' as 'less productive'. Also, 'I can't, I'm unproductive' is redundant and awkward; simplifying to 'I feel less productive and unproductive' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× I prefer dry weather in wet weather as a boy, most of the time I hang out with my friends or I go out whenever I need.

✓ I prefer dry weather. When it is wet, as a boy, I usually hang out with my friends or go out whenever I need to.

The original sentence incorrectly combines ideas and misuses prepositions. Separating the ideas into two sentences improves clarity. Also, 'in wet weather as a boy' is confusing; rephrasing to 'When it is wet, as a boy' clarifies the meaning. 'Whenever I need' should be 'whenever I need to' to complete the verb phrase.

× But in wet weather I can't go out and I don't like to stay in the closed room and it's not my job and it's not my duty to.

✓ But in wet weather, I can't go out and I don't like to stay in a closed room; it's not my job or duty.

The phrase 'stay in the closed room' is awkward; 'stay in a closed room' is more natural. Also, 'it's not my job and it's not my duty to' is incomplete and unclear; simplifying to 'it's not my job or duty' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× Yes, I really like to go going with my friends in outside for hanging out and I prefer dry weather.

✓ Yes, I really like to go out with my friends for hanging out, and I prefer dry weather.

'Go going' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'go out'. 'In outside' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'out' or 'outside' without 'in'. The sentence is corrected for natural and grammatically correct expression.

× No, I'm not. I don't check regularly the weather forecast, but when any kinds of occasions are, when any kinds of program will be arranged by the our university or our groups of friends or any kinds of birthday party, that time I arrange or I check about their weather.

✓ No, I'm not. I don't regularly check the weather forecast, but when there are any kinds of occasions, such as programs arranged by our university, groups of friends, or birthday parties, I check the weather.

The phrase 'any kinds of occasions' and 'any kinds of program' is incorrect; 'any kind of occasion' or 'any kinds of occasions' is better, but 'any kinds of' is awkward. Also, 'I arrange or I check about their weather' is unclear; 'I check the weather' is correct. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× If the weather is good the time we could arrange the program in more beautiful and more specific way.

✓ If the weather is good, we can arrange the program in a more beautiful and more specific way.

The phrase 'the time we could arrange' is awkward; 'we can arrange' is clearer. Also, 'in more beautiful and more specific way' needs an article 'a' before 'more beautiful' to be grammatically correct.

× Yes, the recent years, in recent years, the climate change are very much horrible because in hot summers season it's it's very much hot, but in cold season it's shivering cold.

✓ Yes, in recent years, climate change has been very horrible because in the hot summer season it's very hot, but in the cold season it's shiveringly cold.

'The climate change are' is incorrect; 'climate change' is singular and should be paired with 'has been'. 'Hot summers season' should be 'hot summer season'. 'It's shivering cold' is incorrect; the adverb form 'shiveringly cold' or 'very cold' is appropriate.

× And that's the main problem. But I can see that the relation between the hot and cold weather, it's really affecting our daily life.

✓ And that's the main problem. But I can see that the relationship between hot and cold weather is really affecting our daily life.

'The relation between the hot and cold weather' is better expressed as 'the relationship between hot and cold weather'. Also, the comma before 'it's' is unnecessary and should be removed for correct sentence structure.

× Yes, I like to visit because I went to see the difference between the weather of my city and other cities and how the different cities people live and end up in this weather.

✓ Yes, I like to visit because I want to see the difference between the weather of my city and other cities and how people in different cities live and adapt to this weather.

The phrase 'I went to see' is past tense but the context suggests a general preference, so 'I want to see' is more appropriate. 'How the different cities people live and end up in this weather' is awkward; 'how people in different cities live and adapt to this weather' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× And I want to know also their behavior in this weather.

✓ And I also want to know their behavior in this weather.

The placement of 'also' is awkward; placing it before the verb 'want' is more natural in English.

× And it's really, it's really a great learning for me and a great adaptation power too.

✓ And it's really a great learning experience for me and helps me develop great adaptability as well.

'A great learning' is incomplete; 'a great learning experience' is correct. 'A great adaptation power' is awkward; 'helps me develop great adaptability' is clearer and grammatically correct.