Weather— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Try to improve sentence clarity and grammar, and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and be more specific about the weather conditions.

Example: The weather in Melbourne changes rapidly; for instance, we can experience all four seasons in a single day. Although it's spring now, the temperature is colder than in previous years, but there are still some sunny periods.

Suggestion: Focus on completing your sentences clearly and avoid filler words like 'uh' and 'umm'. Use linking words to explain your preferences and provide specific reasons.

Example: I prefer moderate weather because I find very cold weather uncomfortable, and very hot weather is often dry, which I don't enjoy.

Suggestion: Work on sentence structure and clarity. Avoid incomplete sentences and unclear phrases. Use linking words to explain your preference with specific reasons.

Example: I prefer wet weather, especially light rain, because it makes the environment feel fresh and clean. In contrast, dry weather often causes dust, which I find unpleasant.

Suggestion: Improve grammar and sentence flow. Avoid filler words and use linking words to connect ideas logically. Be specific about when and why you check the forecast.

Example: I usually don't check the weather forecast regularly, but if I'm planning a special trip or day out, I check the weather app to prepare and plan my journey, so I avoid any discomfort.

Suggestion: Clarify your ideas and avoid repetition. Use linking words to explain causes and effects clearly. Provide specific examples or consequences of climate change.

Example: In recent years, climate change has become more noticeable, mainly due to air pollution. This has harmed the environment and increased health problems caused by natural diseases.

Suggestion: Try to avoid repetition and filler words. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide more specific reasons for your interest.

Example: Yes, definitely. For example, I would like to visit a snowy city to enjoy and play in the snow, which would be a fun and unique experience for me.

× The weather in Melbourne is quickly changing.

✓ The weather in Melbourne changes quickly.

The original sentence uses the present continuous tense 'is quickly changing' which is less natural for describing habitual or general facts about the weather. Using the simple present tense 'changes quickly' is more appropriate to express a general truth or repeated action.

× we the temperature is quite cold than previous years.

✓ the temperature is quite colder than in previous years.

The phrase 'we the temperature' is incorrect; 'the temperature' is singular and should be used alone. Also, 'quite cold than' is incorrect; the comparative form 'colder than' should be used with 'than' to compare temperatures.

× Of course there are some sun.

✓ Of course there is some sun.

'Sun' is an uncountable noun here, so the singular form 'there is' should be used instead of 'there are'.

× I do not like too much, uh, cold weathers because it fails me uncomfortable

✓ I do not like too much, uh, cold weather because it makes me uncomfortable

'Weather' is an uncountable noun and should not be pluralised as 'weathers'. Also, 'fails me uncomfortable' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'makes me uncomfortable'.

× I do not like too much hot with this because it, umm, it's quite dry and I feel.

✓ I do not like too much heat because it, umm, is quite dry and I don't feel comfortable.

The phrase 'too much hot with this' is incorrect. 'Hot' is an adjective; the noun 'heat' should be used with 'too much'. Also, the sentence is incomplete and unclear; adding 'I don't feel comfortable' clarifies the meaning.

× I prefer wet weather, specially when there's a small rain because I think it makes the environment fresh and clean.

✓ I prefer wet weather, especially when there's a light rain because I think it makes the environment fresh and clean.

'Specially' is incorrect here; the correct adverb is 'especially'. Also, 'a small rain' is unnatural; 'a light rain' is more appropriate.

× Drive it is most often make the environment dusty, so I prefer to be innovative rather than.

✓ Dry weather most often makes the environment dusty, so I prefer it rather than dry weather.

'Drive it is most often make' is incorrect. It should be 'Dry weather most often makes'. Also, the sentence is incomplete and unclear; completing it clarifies the meaning.

× Usually I do not check the weather prediction before quite oftenly, but if you're going somewhere special, maybe on a trip or a day out, I will check the weather app because then we can ready and, uh, plan our journey ahead.

✓ Usually, I do not check the weather forecast very often, but if I'm going somewhere special, maybe on a trip or a day out, I will check the weather app so that we can be ready and plan our journey ahead.

'Quite oftenly' is incorrect; the correct adverb is 'very often'. 'Weather prediction' is better expressed as 'weather forecast'. Also, 'we can ready' is incorrect; it should be 'we can be ready'. The sentence is improved for clarity and correctness.

× Yes, we have seen a bit large climate change in the recent years, mainly due to the air pollution as I believe it has affected the environment and it has increased the pollution in the environment and on the other hand the natural disease.

✓ Yes, we have seen a significant climate change in recent years, mainly due to air pollution. I believe it has affected the environment and increased pollution, and on the other hand, natural disasters have also occurred.

'A bit large' is incorrect; 'significant' or 'considerable' is better. 'The recent years' should be 'recent years' without 'the'. 'Natural disease' is incorrect; the correct term is 'natural disasters'. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× For example, I would like to go to a place where there's snow so we can enjoy and play with snow.

✓ For example, I would like to go to a place where there is snow so we can enjoy and play in the snow.

The phrase 'play with snow' is less natural; 'play in the snow' is the correct expression. 'There's snow' is correct as 'there is' is used for singular or uncountable nouns.