Weather— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence describing the climate, then give one or two specific effects or activities. Reduce fillers (um, uh) and correct verb forms and articles.

Example: Sydney has a humid subtropical climate, so summers are warm and humid while winters are mild and cooler. Because of this, many people swim and enjoy outdoor activities during summer, such as beach volleyball and coastal walks.

Suggestion: Give a direct topic sentence and support it with two clear reasons using linking words. Fix number agreement and remove hesitation. Keep answer within 3–4 sentences.

Example: I prefer mild weather, like spring. This is because it allows comfortable outdoor activities without being too hot for swimming or too cold for walking, so I can stay active and enjoy the day.

Suggestion: State your preference clearly and give two specific reasons in linked sentences. Avoid repetition and improve vocabulary (e.g., 'develop an unpleasant odor').

Example: I definitely prefer dry weather because getting soaked in the rain makes me cold and uncomfortable. Also, wet clothes often develop an unpleasant smell, so I tend to stay indoors on rainy days.

Suggestion: Answer directly and give a specific routine with correct tense and tone. Remove slang and fillers; explain briefly why the habit formed using a linking word.

Example: I check the weather forecast every morning before work. Since moving to Sydney, the weather has been unpredictable, so I started doing this to know whether to take an umbrella or wear lighter clothes.

Suggestion: Begin with a clear statement and present two or three specific effects with precise vocabulary. Avoid hesitations and unclear phrases; use linking words to organize points.

Example: As a science teacher, I am concerned about climate change. For example, sea surface temperatures and sea levels are rising, and this is causing more frequent extreme events such as floods and wildfires worldwide.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence and support it with one specific example of what you want to experience. Fix repetition and improve coherence by using a linking phrase.

Example: Yes, I would like to visit cities with different climates. For instance, I want to visit Melbourne to experience its cooler, changeable weather and see how local lifestyles and outdoor activities differ from those in Sydney.

× Sydney has a humid subtropical climate which means summer is here are more humid and warm to hot, while it's winters are umm, cold, uh, mild cold.

✓ Sydney has a humid subtropical climate, which means summers here are more humid and warm to hot, while its winters are mild and cool.

The sentence has adjective/adverb and possessive errors. 'summer is here are' is ungrammatical and should be plural 'summers here are'. 'it's winters' uses the contraction 'it's' (it is) incorrectly; the possessive form 'its' is required. 'mild cold' is awkward; use adjective pair 'mild and cool' or just 'mild'. Use a comma before the relative clause 'which means'. Improve fluency by reordering adjectives consistently.

× So people enjoy summer here a lot, they go swimming and they can do lots of active.

✓ So people enjoy summer here a lot; they go swimming and can do many activities.

'lots of active' is incorrect because 'active' is an adjective; the noun 'activities' is needed. Use 'many' with countable plural 'activities'. Also join two independent clauses with a semicolon or period instead of a comma to avoid a comma splice.

× Honestly, I prefer both or in between.

✓ Honestly, I prefer something in between.

The original is awkwardly phrased. 'Both or in between' incorrectly mixes ideas. Use 'something in between' to express preference for moderate conditions. Tense is present and appropriate; this corrects word choice and structure.

× I can say I'm a spring person so too hot or too cold, I don't like it.

✓ I can say I'm a spring person, so I don't like it when it's too hot or too cold.

Word order and clause structure need correction. Add subject 'I' and verb 'don't like it when it's' to make the subordinate clause clear. Maintain present tense. Comma needed before 'so' when joining clauses for clarity.

× I prefer a mild temperatures where we can enjoy our outdoor activities, we can swim and also we can have walk without getting wet or getting uh, thirsty.

✓ I prefer mild temperatures where we can enjoy outdoor activities; we can swim and also go for walks without getting wet or thirsty.

'a mild temperatures' mixes singular article with plural noun; remove 'a' and pluralize correctly. 'have walk' is incorrect — use 'go for walks' or 'take walks'. Remove unnecessary second 'we can' for conciseness and replace comma with semicolon to avoid comma splice. 'getting uh, thirsty' should be 'thirsty' without filler.

× I definitely prefer dry weather to wet weather because I hate getting soaked in the rain, it makes me feel uncomfortable and cold.

✓ I definitely prefer dry weather to wet weather because I hate getting soaked in the rain; it makes me feel uncomfortable and cold.

Grammar is mostly correct, but there is a comma splice joining two independent clauses; replace with semicolon or period. Quantifier use is acceptable; this correction focuses on sentence structure.

× Also wet clothes develop often develop a massive smell which bothers me so I don't usually go outside during a rainy day.

✓ Also, wet clothes often develop a strong smell, which bothers me, so I don't usually go outside on rainy days.

Duplicate word 'develop' must be removed. 'massive smell' is unnatural; use 'strong smell'. Use 'on rainy days' instead of 'during a rainy day' for general habit. Add commas to separate clauses and improve flow.

× I didn't used to do that, but since I have moved to Sydney I have developed the habit of checking the weather forecast every morning before I go to work or go outside.

✓ I didn't use to do that, but since I moved to Sydney I have developed the habit of checking the weather forecast every morning before I go to work or go outside.

'didn't used to' is commonly corrected to 'didn't use to' because the auxiliary 'did' requires the bare infinitive 'use'. 'Since I have moved' is grammatically acceptable but 'since I moved' is more natural when referring to a past time. Keep present perfect 'have developed' for the habit that continues.

× Uh, like literally every day I am checking the umm, how is the weather today?

✓ Like literally every day I check the weather, asking 'How is the weather today?'.

Continuous 'I am checking' is awkward for a habitual action; simple present 'I check' is preferred. The embedded question 'how is the weather today?' should be presented as reported speech or quoted; rearrange for clarity. Remove fillers.

× Because one day is rainy and the other day is just, uh, sunny as hell.

✓ Because one day is rainy and the next day is just sunny.

Avoid informal intensifier 'sunny as hell' in formal correction. Use 'the next day' instead of 'the other day' for contrasting consecutive conditions. Present tense is fine; simplify for correctness and appropriateness.

× As a science teacher, I have looked like things to shape, but I can emphasize the rise of the temperature in the sea, uh, water and also sea levels.

✓ As a science teacher, I have seen how things are changing, and I can emphasize the rise in sea temperatures and sea levels.

Original contains unintelligible phrase 'have looked like things to shape'. Replace with 'have seen how things are changing'. Use 'rise in sea temperatures' (not 'rise of the temperature in the sea, water') and parallel structure 'sea temperatures and sea levels'. This fixes sentence structure and word choice.

× Uh, the other, another one is extreme weather conditions.

✓ Another important effect is more extreme weather conditions.

Combine 'the other, another one' into 'another' and add modifier 'important' for clarity. Use adjective 'extreme' and make plural 'conditions' with 'more' to express increase. Improves fluency.

× So floods and also fires are happening a lot all around the world.

✓ So floods and fires are happening much more often all around the world.

'Happening a lot' is informal; use 'much more often' to indicate increased frequency. Remove redundant 'also'. Maintain present continuous sense of increasing events with present simple adverbial modification.

× Yes, I'd like to experience other climates as well.

✓ Yes, I'd like to experience other climates as well.

This sentence is grammatically correct. No change needed. Included here to acknowledge it fits the allowed types but requires no correction.

× For example, here is humid subtropical climate.

✓ For example, this area has a humid subtropical climate.

'Here is humid subtropical climate' is ungrammatical; use 'this area has a humid subtropical climate' or 'we have a humid subtropical climate here'. Add article 'a' before 'humid subtropical climate'.

× But I like I'd like to visit Darwin, Perth or Brisbane, even Melbourne.

✓ But I'd like to visit Darwin, Perth, Brisbane, or even Melbourne.

Remove redundancy 'I like I'd like'. Add commas for list, and place 'even' before Melbourne for emphasis. Keeps intent and corrects repetition.

× They all have different climates.

✓ They all have different climates.

Sentence is correct as is; no change needed.

× I am open to see different types of lifestyles according to these different climates.

✓ I am open to seeing different types of lifestyles according to these different climates.

Use the gerund 'seeing' after 'open to' rather than the bare infinitive 'see'. This fixes verb pattern error. Also 'different' repeated twice is redundant but acceptable; could be simplified to 'these climates'.