Weather— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and use clearer sentence structure. Start with a direct topic sentence (e.g., 'The weather where I live is very changeable.') then give one or two specific examples with accurate grammar and comparisons. Avoid repeating words and correct temperature phrasing (e.g., 'as low as -20°C' or 'as high as 40°C').

Example: The weather where I live is very changeable. For example, summers can be very hot, with temperatures as high as 40°C, while winters can be harsh, dropping to as low as -20°C.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence and one or two supporting reasons without repetition. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' succinctly. Avoid repeating phrases (e.g., 'and I and I'). Mention personal feelings or activities concisely.

Example: I prefer hot weather because I enjoy wearing skirts and dresses. In cold weather I have to wear several layers and a heavy coat, so I feel less comfortable and restricted.

Suggestion: Start with a clear topic sentence, then give a specific reason and a brief additional comment. Avoid over-emphasis (all caps) and keep sentences smooth. Use linking words like 'because' and 'however' for coherence.

Example: I prefer dry weather because rain makes my hair puffy and wavy, which I don't like. However, occasionally I enjoy the rain and might even dance in it.

Suggestion: Respond directly: say how often and when, then give a brief reason. Avoid repeating previous points and unnecessary details. Use coherent linking and correct timing phrases (e.g., 'every morning before school' or 'rarely, only on cold days').

Example: I usually check the forecast every morning before school to decide what to wear. However, I don't check it frequently throughout the day and often forget the details soon after.

Suggestion: Give a clear opinion and support it with specific observed effects. Finish sentences fully and avoid trailing off. Use linking words (e.g., 'for example', 'as a result') and mention consequences like unusual weather patterns, heavier rainfall, or temperature swings.

Example: I think climate change has caused more unpredictable weather. For example, this summer was colder than usual with frequent rain, so people had to wear warmer clothes and outdoor plans were often canceled.

Suggestion: Provide a clear topic sentence, then give two specific examples with brief reasons, using linking words like 'also' and 'for example'. Use concise phrasing (e.g., 'lighter clothes' not 'more lighter').

Example: Yes, I'd like to visit warmer cities like Miami because I could wear lighter clothes and enjoy the beach. I would also like to visit very cold countries to experience snow and winter activities.

× In the region that I live, weather changes dramatically with every coming season.

✓ In the region where I live, the weather changes dramatically with each coming season.

Use the relative preposition 'where' instead of 'that I live' to refer to place; also include the definite article 'the' before 'weather' and use 'each' for individual seasons for natural phrasing.

× For example, in the summer the temperature here reaches up to 40°C, but in winter it can go as -20 but also it can be 10°C.

✓ For example, in the summer the temperature here can reach up to 40°C, but in winter it can drop to -20°C or sometimes be around 10°C.

Use 'can reach' for possibility and 'drop to' for decreases; include degree symbol for -20 and add 'sometimes' for clarity. Use consistent phrasing and articles 'the summer' and 'in winter'.

× The reason for that is that I like wearing some skirts and dresses, but in cold weather you can't really enjoy it because you have to wear at least three layers underneath your outfit and a coat over it and I and I find it less enjoyable.

✓ The reason is that I like wearing skirts and dresses, but in cold weather you can't really enjoy them because you have to wear at least three layers under your outfit and a coat over it, which I find less enjoyable.

Use plural pronoun 'them' to agree with 'skirts and dresses'. Remove duplicate 'I and I'. Use 'the reason is' for concision and 'under' instead of 'underneath' is acceptable; make clause 'which I find less enjoyable' to connect ideas.

× I prefer the dry weather because when it's wet my hair gets all puffy and WAVY and I'm not a big fan of it, but once in a blue moon I can enjoy the rain and go and dance under it.

✓ I prefer dry weather because when it's wet my hair gets puffy and wavy, and I'm not a big fan of that, but once in a blue moon I can enjoy the rain and go dance in it.

Avoid unnecessary words 'all'. Use lowercase for 'wavy'. Use 'that' instead of 'it' to refer to the condition and 'go dance in it' is more natural than 'go and dance under it'.

× I do check it when I'm going to school in the morning so I can see if I can wear a skirt.

✓ I do check it when I'm going to school in the morning so I can see if I should wear a skirt.

Use 'should wear' to express appropriate decision rather than repeated 'can wear'; 'can' implies ability rather than suitability.

× As I told earlier, I like wearing it so I get really upset when it's cold and I can't wear it out.

✓ As I mentioned earlier, I like wearing skirts, so I get really upset when it's cold and I can't wear them.

Use 'mentioned' for reporting and plural 'skirts' with pronoun 'them' to match; remove unnecessary 'out' after 'wear'.

× But I don't really check it that much and I don't remember it after 10 minutes after I checked it.

✓ But I don't really check it that much, and I don't remember it ten minutes after I check it.

Use consistent present tense for habitual action: 'check' and 'after I check it'. Avoid repeating 'after'. Write numbers as words in formal writing, but numeric is acceptable; phrasing simplified for clarity.

× I noted that this summer, this year, was much colder than the last.

✓ I noticed that this summer was much colder than last year.

Use 'noticed' instead of 'noted' for personal observation. Simplify 'this summer, this year' to 'this summer' and compare to 'last year'.

× I couldn't even wear some shorts for the whole week because at least three times a week it would be raining and really cold out.

✓ I couldn't even wear shorts for the whole week because it rained and was really cold at least three times that week.

Use simple past 'rained' and 'was' to describe past events; remove 'would be' which is less direct. 'Some shorts' -> 'shorts' is more natural.

× So I had to wear some pants and maybe even a coat over it. I think climate change is.

✓ So I had to wear pants and even a coat. I think climate change is affecting weather patterns.

Remove 'some' for naturalness. Complete the sentence 'I think climate change is' with a clear verb phrase 'affecting weather patterns' to avoid a sentence fragment.

× I think I would like to go somewhere in Miami and I would enjoy it because it's not as cold as in our country, but it's still it's really fun and you could wear shorter and more lighter clothes out.

✓ I think I would like to go to Miami and would enjoy it because it's not as cold as in our country; it's really fun and you can wear shorter, lighter clothes there.

Use preposition 'to Miami' not 'in Miami'. Remove duplicate 'it's'. Use 'can' for general truth and 'shorter, lighter' (adjective order) without 'more lighter' (incorrect comparative). Use 'there' instead of 'out'.

× But also I would like to visit some really cold countries to play in the snow.

✓ I would also like to visit some really cold countries to play in the snow.

Move 'also' to natural position and remove redundant 'but'. The sentence is otherwise correct; repositioning improves flow.