Weather— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler (uh), and use correct structures (e.g., 'In summer it is hot and dry; in winter it is cold and windy'). Add one brief specific detail to enrich the answer.

Example: Where I live in Iraq the weather varies by season. In summer it is hot and dry, while in winter it becomes cold and windy. For example, summer temperatures often reach over 40°C, but in January it can drop enough for people to wear coats.

Suggestion: Begin with a direct topic sentence and reduce repetition and fillers. Give one specific reason and one short supporting detail using a linking word (because/so/for example). Keep to 2–3 sentences.

Example: I prefer cold weather. I enjoy winter because I like rain and cooler temperatures, which make outdoor walks more comfortable and relaxing.

Suggestion: State your preference clearly, use correct grammar (e.g., 'I prefer dry weather because humidity worsens my asthma'), and avoid hesitations. Provide one concise consequence or example to support your view.

Example: I prefer dry weather because humidity aggravates my asthma. For example, high humidity makes it harder for me to breathe and sometimes triggers wheezing.

Suggestion: Answer directly and give a clearer frequency and context. Use a single concise sentence to state your habit and one brief example of when you last checked the forecast. Remove fillers.

Example: I don't check the weather regularly, but I look it up from time to time. For instance, I last checked the forecast about a month ago before planning a short trip.

Suggestion: Provide a clear topic sentence and two specific effects with reasons. Use linking words (for example, because) and avoid repeating filler words. Use more precise vocabulary ('global warming', 'pollution', 'industrial activity').

Example: Climate change has caused more frequent heatwaves and extreme weather events. For example, rising temperatures and increased pollution from industry and traffic have led to hotter summers and more intense storms worldwide.

Suggestion: Start with a clear statement and give one concrete destination or activity you would do there. Remove hesitations and unclear words (e.g., 'haunted dry weather' is unclear). Use linking words to connect reason and example.

Example: Yes, I would. I want to visit cities with cold, windy climates like Istanbul or Prague because I enjoy cool weather and walking in rainy streets; for example, I would take long walks and visit outdoor markets in those cities.

× All right, where I live in Iraq, the weather is slightly changing from each, uh, season.

✓ All right, where I live in Iraq, the weather changes slightly with each season.

The original uses a progressive form "is slightly changing" which sounds unnatural for a habitual fact. Use simple present "changes" to describe regular or repeated events. Also replace "from each season" with "with each season" for correct preposition use.

× In summer as a hot and dry.

✓ In summer it is hot and dry.

The original lacks a subject and a proper verb, causing a fragment. Add the subject "it" and verb "is" to form a complete sentence and remove the extra word "as." This fits the simple present description of seasonal weather.

× In the winter it's cold and windy.

✓ In winter it is cold and windy.

While understandable, "in the winter" is acceptable, but for parallel style with "In summer" use "In winter it is..." Also expand the contraction for clarity. This keeps simple present for habitual conditions.

× Of course, I prefer a cold, uh, weather and I also, uh, I'm a big fan of a winter, uh, it's an incredible season for me.

✓ Of course, I prefer cold weather, and I'm also a big fan of winter; it's an incredible season for me.

"a cold weather" is incorrect; "weather" is uncountable so no indefinite article is used: "cold weather." Similarly, "a winter" is unnecessary when speaking of the season in general; use "winter." Combine clauses with appropriate punctuation and remove filler words.

× I love the cold, love the rain and uh, everything related to this season.

✓ I love the cold, I love the rain, and everything related to this season.

The sentence omits the repeated subject in the second clause, which is acceptable in informal speech but clearer to include. Maintain consistent parallel structure: repeat "I love" or restructure to avoid ambiguity.

× Well, I think I'm going to say I prefer dry weather for me because a wet weather make me, uh, exacerbate my disease as I having asthma and umm, any umm, humidity in the weather can uh, cause a breathing issue to me.

✓ Well, I would say I prefer dry weather because wet weather makes my condition worse; I have asthma, and any humidity can cause breathing problems for me.

Multiple issues: "a wet weather" should be "wet weather" (uncountable, no article). Verb agreement: "make me...exacerbate" is wrong; use "makes my condition worse" or "exacerbates my condition." "I having asthma" is incorrect; use "I have asthma." "Cause a breathing issue to me" is awkward; use "cause breathing problems for me." Also change "I'm going to say" to more natural "I would say."

× All right, it's not my habit, but I can check it, umm, from time to time, Uh, and the last one, uh, was a month ago.

✓ All right, it's not my habit, but I check it from time to time; the last time I checked was a month ago.

"I can check it" suggests ability rather than habit; use simple present "I check it" for occasional routine. "The last one" is vague; use "the last time I checked." Keep tense consistent: present habit with past reference for the specific instance.

× I think a climate change effects a lot of the atmosphere and the weather of the earth as there is an increase in the warm and hotness, uh, worldwide.

✓ I think climate change affects the atmosphere and the Earth's weather because there is an increase in warmth worldwide.

Use "climate change" without "a." "Effects" should be the verb "affects." "A lot of the atmosphere and the weather of the earth" is awkward—use "the atmosphere and the Earth's weather." "Increase in the warm and hotness" is unidiomatic; use "increase in warmth."

× This is because of, uh, pollutions, uh, in the world, uh, because of the, uh, uh, technical development and, uh, a lot of, uh.

✓ This is because of pollution worldwide, due to technological development and many other factors.

"Pollutions" is incorrect; use uncountable "pollution." "Technical development" is better as "technological development." "A lot of" needs an object; specify "many other factors." Streamline the sentence for clarity.

× Yeah, of course, as I mentioned before, I love, I'm all over the cold and wind weather.

✓ Yeah, of course; as I mentioned before, I love cold and windy weather.

"I'm all over the cold and wind weather" is ungrammatical and idiomatic misuse. Use "I love cold and windy weather." "Windy" is the adjective; "wind weather" is incorrect.

× So I prefer to travel outside to to see that such a weather because in Iraq it's just a haunted dry weather.

✓ So I prefer to travel abroad to experience that kind of weather because in Iraq it's just a very dry climate.

"Travel outside" is awkward; use "travel abroad" or "travel elsewhere." "To see that such a weather" is incorrect—use "experience that kind of weather." "A haunted dry weather" is wrong and likely a misuse of "haunted"; use "very dry climate" or "mainly dry weather." Also remove duplicate "to."