Snacks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is generally clear but contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. For example, "if I had chance" should be "if I have a chance," and "when I was just finished my exercises" should be "just after I finish my exercises." Also, try to use linking words to improve coherence, such as "usually" or "generally."

Example: I usually eat snacks in the afternoon, especially just after I finish my exercises. However, since I am on a diet now, I rarely eat snacks.

Suggestion: Your answer is relevant and clear, but you can improve coherence by using linking words like "however" or "on the other hand." Also, avoid repeating the word "snacks" too often by using pronouns or synonyms. Try to add a bit more detail about why some snacks are healthy or unhealthy.

Example: I think it depends on the type of snack. Most snacks are unhealthy; therefore, I try to avoid them. However, snacks like rice cakes are healthier options because they help me recharge my energy without adding too many calories.

Suggestion: Your answer has several grammatical errors and awkward expressions. For example, "I often eat" should be "I often ate," and "caused me an obesity" should be "caused me to become obese." Also, "snacks reeks" is unclear; perhaps you meant "harmful effects of those snacks." Try to use past tense consistently and clarify your points with linking words.

Example: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young. For example, I used to eat chips and biscuits about four times a week, which caused me to become obese at a young age. However, as I grew older, I became aware of the harmful effects of these snacks and started to avoid them.

Suggestion: Your answer is good but can be improved by removing filler words like "So" at the beginning. Also, try to use more varied vocabulary and linking words to make your answer smoother. For example, use "because" and "which" appropriately and consider adding a brief comparison.

Example: I like to eat rice cakes and fruit jellies because they contain fewer calories than unhealthy snacks like chips or biscuits. This helps me maintain my diet and live a healthier life.

× Actually I am on a diet now so I rarely eat snacks, but if I had chance to try some snacks I would eat them in the afternoon when I was just finished my exercises.

✓ Actually I am on a diet now so I rarely eat snacks, but if I had a chance to try some snacks I would eat them in the afternoon when I had just finished my exercises.

The phrase 'if I had chance' is missing the article 'a' before 'chance', which is necessary here (Article errors, ID 22). Also, 'when I was just finished my exercises' is incorrect because 'was finished' is not the correct past perfect form. The correct form is 'had just finished' to indicate an action completed before another past action.

× Actually I am on a diet now so I rarely eat snacks, but if I had chance to try some snacks I would eat them in the afternoon when I was just finished my exercises.

✓ Actually I am on a diet now so I rarely eat snacks, but if I had a chance to try some snacks I would eat them in the afternoon when I had just finished my exercises.

The phrase 'if I had chance' is missing the article 'a' before 'chance'. In English, singular countable nouns generally require an article or determiner.

× Of course I often eat snacks when I was young.

✓ Of course I often ate snacks when I was young.

The sentence mixes present tense 'eat' with past time reference 'when I was young'. The verb should be in the past tense 'ate' to match the past time frame.

× When I was a child I often eat snacks like chips or biscuits around 4 times a week, which caused me an obesity at a very young age.

✓ When I was a child I often ate snacks like chips or biscuits around 4 times a week, which caused me obesity at a very young age.

The verb 'eat' should be in past tense 'ate' to match the past time frame. Also, 'an obesity' is incorrect because 'obesity' is an uncountable noun and does not take an article.

× When I was a child I often eat snacks like chips or biscuits around 4 times a week, which caused me an obesity at a very young age.

✓ When I was a child I often ate snacks like chips or biscuits around 4 times a week, which caused me obesity at a very young age.

The word 'obesity' is an uncountable noun and should not be preceded by the indefinite article 'an'.

× But as time passes by, I start to be aware of those snacks reeks, so I try my best to avoid them.

✓ But as time passes by, I have started to be aware of those snacks' reeks, so I try my best to avoid them.

The phrase 'I start to be aware' is better expressed in present perfect 'I have started to be aware' to indicate a change over time. Also, 'snacks reeks' is incorrect because 'reeks' is singular but 'snacks' is plural; the possessive form 'snacks'' is needed to show the smell belongs to the snacks.

× But as time passes by, I start to be aware of those snacks reeks, so I try my best to avoid them.

✓ But as time passes by, I have started to be aware of the reeks of those snacks, so I try my best to avoid them.

The phrase 'aware of those snacks reeks' is incorrect. The correct prepositional phrase is 'aware of the reeks of those snacks' to properly link the smell to the snacks.