Part 1
Examiner
When do you usually eat snacks now?
Candidate
I usually eat snacks in the afternoon between 4:00 PM to 6:00 PM. I prefer to eat sweet food like cake, candy, or junk food like potato chip. Even though it's not good for my health, I cannot resist it because it's too delicious.
Examiner
Do you think it is healthy for you to eat snacks?
Candidate
Absolutely not, the ingredient of snacks contain a lot of sugar and carbs. Another thing is that the nutrition is not good for our health, so we try to avoid eating snack often when we feel bored or upset sometime.
Examiner
Did you often eat snacks when you were young?
Candidate
Yes I did, when I was a teenager I used to eat a lot of snack when I feel boring while watching movie. But nowadays I'm more mature and try to not eating so much snacks when I'm boring because it's make me gain a lot of weight.
Examiner
What snacks do you like to eat?
Candidate
I would say it's potato chip. I try many different kind of potato chips in the supermarket on weekend. I have the habit of eating them while drinking coffee and watching movie that make me feel happy a lot and refresh my energy.
When do you usually eat snacks now?
Score: 75.0Suggestion: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tự nhiên và rõ ràng, nhưng bạn nên tránh lặp lại từ ngữ và sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn. Ngoài ra, bạn nên dùng số nhiều đúng cách (potato chips thay vì potato chip) và tránh dùng từ không chính xác như "sweet food" nên dùng "sweets" hoặc "sweet snacks".
Example: I usually eat snacks in the afternoon, between 4 and 6 PM. I prefer sweet snacks like cakes and candies, as well as junk food such as potato chips. Although I know they are not healthy, I find them irresistible because of their delicious taste.
Do you think it is healthy for you to eat snacks?
Score: 70.0Suggestion: Bạn nên chú ý ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ, ví dụ "ingredient" nên dùng số nhiều "ingredients" và câu nên rõ ràng hơn. Ngoài ra, hãy sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như "eating snack" nên là "eating snacks". Hãy thêm ví dụ hoặc lý do cụ thể hơn để câu trả lời phong phú.
Example: Absolutely not. Snacks usually contain a lot of sugar and carbohydrates, which are unhealthy. Moreover, they lack essential nutrients, so I try to avoid eating snacks frequently, especially when I feel bored or upset.
Did you often eat snacks when you were young?
Score: 65.0Suggestion: Bạn cần chú ý ngữ pháp, ví dụ "a lot of snack" nên là "a lot of snacks", "when I feel boring" nên là "when I feel bored", và "try to not eating" nên là "try not to eat". Ngoài ra, câu trả lời nên có cấu trúc rõ ràng hơn và dùng liên từ để kết nối ý. Hãy thêm chi tiết cụ thể để câu trả lời sinh động hơn.
Example: Yes, I did. When I was a teenager, I used to eat a lot of snacks whenever I felt bored while watching movies. However, now that I am more mature, I try not to eat too many snacks when I feel bored because it causes me to gain weight.
What snacks do you like to eat?
Score: 70.0Suggestion: Bạn nên chú ý số nhiều và số ít, ví dụ "potato chip" nên là "potato chips", "many different kind" nên là "many different kinds". Ngoài ra, câu trả lời nên dùng liên từ để mạch lạc hơn và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như "watching movie" nên là "watching movies". Hãy thêm chi tiết cụ thể để câu trả lời hấp dẫn hơn.
Example: I would say my favorite snack is potato chips. I try many different kinds of potato chips at the supermarket on weekends. I usually eat them while drinking coffee and watching movies, which makes me feel very happy and refreshes my energy.
× I usually eat snacks in the afternoon between 4:00 PM to 6:00 PM.
✓ I usually eat snacks in the afternoon between 4:00 PM and 6:00 PM.
The preposition 'between' should be followed by 'and' when indicating a range, not 'to'. Trong tiếng Anh, khi dùng 'between' để chỉ khoảng thời gian hoặc khoảng cách, phải dùng 'and' chứ không dùng 'to'.
× I prefer to eat sweet food like cake, candy, or junk food like potato chip.
✓ I prefer to eat sweet foods like cake, candy, or junk foods like potato chips.
When listing examples, the nouns should be in plural form to indicate general types or categories. Khi liệt kê các ví dụ, danh từ nên ở dạng số nhiều để chỉ các loại hoặc nhóm chung.
× Even though it's not good for my health, I cannot resist it because it's too delicious.
✓ Even though they're not good for my health, I cannot resist them because they're too delicious.
The pronouns 'it' and 'it's' refer to singular, but the subject is plural (foods), so plural pronouns 'they' and 'they're' should be used. Đại từ 'it' dùng cho số ít, nhưng ở đây chủ ngữ là số nhiều nên phải dùng đại từ số nhiều 'they'.
× the ingredient of snacks contain a lot of sugar and carbs.
✓ the ingredients of snacks contain a lot of sugar and carbs.
'Ingredient' should be plural 'ingredients' because snacks have multiple components. 'Danh từ 'ingredient' cần ở dạng số nhiều 'ingredients' vì đồ ăn vặt có nhiều thành phần.
× Another thing is that the nutrition is not good for our health, so we try to avoid eating snack often when we feel bored or upset sometime.
✓ Another thing is that the nutrition is not good for our health, so we try to avoid eating snacks often when we feel bored or upset sometimes.
'Snack' should be plural 'snacks' to match the context, and 'sometime' should be 'sometimes' to indicate frequency. 'Danh từ 'snack' cần ở dạng số nhiều 'snacks', và 'sometime' sai thành 'sometimes' để chỉ tần suất.
× Yes I did, when I was a teenager I used to eat a lot of snack when I feel boring while watching movie.
✓ Yes I did, when I was a teenager I used to eat a lot of snacks when I felt bored while watching movies.
'Snack' should be plural 'snacks'; 'feel boring' is incorrect, should be 'felt bored'; 'movie' should be plural 'movies' to indicate general activity. 'Danh từ 'snack' cần số nhiều, 'feel boring' sai về nghĩa phải là 'felt bored', và 'movie' nên số nhiều 'movies'.
× But nowadays I'm more mature and try to not eating so much snacks when I'm boring because it's make me gain a lot of weight.
✓ But nowadays I'm more mature and try not to eat so many snacks when I'm bored because it makes me gain a lot of weight.
'Try to not eating' is incorrect; correct form is 'try not to eat'. 'So much snacks' should be 'so many snacks' because 'snacks' is countable. 'I'm boring' should be 'I'm bored'. 'It's make' should be 'it makes'. Cấu trúc 'try to not eating' sai, phải là 'try not to eat'. 'So much' dùng cho không đếm được, 'snacks' đếm được nên dùng 'so many'. 'I'm boring' sai về nghĩa phải là 'I'm bored'. 'It's make' sai chia động từ phải là 'it makes'.
× I would say it's potato chip.
✓ I would say it's potato chips.
'Potato chip' should be plural 'potato chips' when referring to the snack in general. 'Danh từ 'potato chip' nên ở dạng số nhiều 'potato chips' khi nói chung về món ăn vặt.
× I try many different kind of potato chips in the supermarket on weekend.
✓ I try many different kinds of potato chips in the supermarket on weekends.
'Kind' should be plural 'kinds' because 'many' indicates plural. 'On weekend' should be 'on weekends' to indicate habitual action. 'Danh từ 'kind' cần số nhiều 'kinds' vì có từ 'many'. 'On weekend' sai phải là 'on weekends' để chỉ thói quen.
× I have the habit of eating them while drinking coffee and watching movie that make me feel happy a lot and refresh my energy.
✓ I have the habit of eating them while drinking coffee and watching movies that make me feel very happy and refresh my energy.
'Movie' should be plural 'movies'. 'That make' refers to plural 'movies' so correct. Added 'very' for clarity. 'Happy a lot' is awkward, better as 'very happy'. 'Danh từ 'movie' cần số nhiều 'movies'. Cụm 'happy a lot' không tự nhiên, nên dùng 'very happy'.