Snacks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer needs to be more natural and clear. Avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure. For example, say "I usually eat snacks in the morning during breakfast. I often eat shingara or samosa, which are traditional foods. Also, I eat snacks whenever I feel very hungry."

Example: I usually eat snacks in the morning during breakfast. I often eat shingara or samosa, which are traditional foods. Also, I eat snacks whenever I feel very hungry.

Suggestion: Your answer is unclear and has grammatical errors. Try to express your opinion clearly and use linking words. For example, "Frankly, I think eating snacks often is not very healthy because it can have a harmful effect on our bodies. For instance, it may cause weight gain, which is bad for health."

Example: Frankly, I think eating snacks often is not very healthy because it can have a harmful effect on our bodies. For instance, it may cause weight gain, which is bad for health.

Suggestion: Your answer should be more fluent and avoid filler words. Use linking words to connect ideas. For example, "When I was young, I was very enthusiastic about eating fast food, especially snacks. Whenever I went outside with my parents, I preferred to eat snacks, and they always bought them for me because they were my favorite."

Example: When I was young, I was very enthusiastic about eating fast food, especially snacks. Whenever I went outside with my parents, I preferred to eat snacks, and they always bought them for me because they were my favorite.

Suggestion: Your answer needs better sentence structure and clarity. Avoid short sentences and use linking words. For example, "I usually prefer to eat shingara and samosa, which are traditional foods in Bangladesh. Most people there often eat these snacks, and I especially like traditional foods because they are special to me."

Example: I usually prefer to eat shingara and samosa, which are traditional foods in Bangladesh. Most people there often eat these snacks, and I especially like traditional foods because they are special to me.

× I usually eat snacks in morning in my breakfast.

✓ I usually eat snacks in the morning at my breakfast.

The phrase 'in morning' is incorrect; it should be 'in the morning' because 'morning' is a singular noun that requires the definite article 'the'. Also, 'in my breakfast' is better expressed as 'at my breakfast' to indicate the time or occasion when the snacks are eaten.

× I frequently used to eat snacks as a shingara somoza which is traditional food

✓ I frequently used to eat snacks such as shingara and somocha, which are traditional foods.

'Shingara somoza' seems to refer to two items; thus, 'such as shingara and somocha' is appropriate. Also, 'food' should be plural 'foods' when referring to multiple traditional items.

× and whenever I feel like too much hunger that time even I also eat snacks.

✓ and whenever I feel very hungry, I also eat snacks.

The phrase 'feel like too much hunger that time even I also eat snacks' is awkward and incorrect. 'Feel very hungry' is the correct expression, and the sentence is simplified for clarity and correctness.

× I think it is not much healthier for food,

✓ I think it is not very healthy food,

'Much healthier' is incorrect here; 'very healthy' is the correct adverb-adjective combination. Also, 'for food' is unnecessary and incorrect in this context.

× it will be detrimental impact in our bodies as well as, uh, it uh, can gain burn, which is really bad impact or body.

✓ it will have a detrimental impact on our bodies, and it can cause weight gain, which is really bad for the body.

'Detrimental impact in' should be 'detrimental impact on'. 'Gain burn' is incorrect; the intended meaning is likely 'weight gain'. 'Bad impact or body' should be 'bad for the body'.

× If, uh, the time when I go outside with my parents, that time I really prefer to eat snacks

✓ When I went outside with my parents, I really preferred to eat snacks

The sentence refers to past events, so past tense verbs 'went' and 'preferred' should be used instead of present tense 'go' and 'prefer'.

× they are always, uh, get me snacks because, uh, it is, it was my favorite dishes.

✓ they always got me snacks because they were my favorite dishes.

'They are always get me' is incorrect; the correct past tense is 'they always got me'. Also, 'it is, it was my favorite dishes' is incorrect; 'they were my favorite dishes' matches plural 'dishes' and past tense.

× Most of the people there frequently eat sugar and samocha as the snacks as well as I prefer traditional more food,

✓ Most of the people there frequently eat shingara and samocha as snacks, and I prefer traditional foods more,

'Sugar and samocha' is likely a misspelling of 'shingara and samocha'. 'As the snacks' should be 'as snacks'. 'Traditional more food' is incorrect; 'traditional foods more' is correct.