Snacks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is informative but a bit long and slightly repetitive. Try to be more concise and use linking words to improve coherence. Also, avoid redundancy by not repeating similar items unnecessarily.

Example: I usually eat snacks between 4:30 and 5:30 PM during a break at my hostel. The options include various foods like bhajjis, panipuri, sandwiches, and samosas, as well as bread and toast in the evening.

Suggestion: Your answer is somewhat unclear and incomplete. Try to directly answer the question with a clear opinion, use complete sentences, and provide specific examples with linking words to clarify your points.

Example: I think eating snacks can be unhealthy if we choose the wrong foods. However, it's important to select healthier options, such as whole grain bread instead of white bread, especially when we feel hungry in the evening.

Suggestion: Your answer is quite detailed and personal, which is good. However, try to avoid informal phrases like 'demand her a snack' and 'so yeah'. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

Example: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young. They served as a way to relax whenever I felt tired or overwhelmed. I would ask my mother for a snack and watch television for a while before returning to my studies.

Suggestion: Your answer provides interesting cultural information but is incomplete and ends abruptly. Try to complete your thoughts and use linking words to describe your preferences clearly and effectively.

Example: I like to eat Pani Puri, a popular Indian street snack known by different names across the country. It is very flavorful, and when you eat it, you experience a burst of spicy and tangy flavors that I really enjoy.

× ...we have a snacks break where different kinds of food is offered...

✓ ...we have a snacks break where different kinds of food are offered...

The subject 'different kinds of food' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is' to agree in number.

× ...every day between 4:30 to 5:30 we have a snacks break...

✓ ...every day between 4:30 and 5:30 we have a snacks break...

When indicating a range between two times, the correct preposition is 'and' rather than 'to'.

× Bread and toasts are also available to have in the evenings.

✓ Bread and toast are also available to have in the evenings.

'Toast' is an uncountable noun and should not be pluralized as 'toasts' in this context.

× ...when it's that time of the day when it's almost like getting evening.

✓ ...when it's that time of the day when it's almost evening.

The phrase 'getting evening' is incorrect; 'almost evening' is the proper expression.

× ...you have to substitute some healthy options like use whole bread instead of.

✓ ...you have to substitute some healthy options like using whole bread instead of other options.

The verb 'use' should be in the gerund form 'using' after 'like'; also, the sentence was incomplete and needed clarification.

× I go to my mother, demand her a snack, switch on the television, and I used to sit in front of it for hours and hours together.

✓ I go to my mother, demand a snack from her, switch on the television, and I used to sit in front of it for hours and hours together.

The verb 'demand' requires the object 'a snack' and the indirect object 'from her' to be correctly placed.