Snacks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors, such as "I usually have some snacks I at night." Try to make your sentences clearer and more grammatically correct. Also, avoid redundancy by combining ideas more effectively. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

Example: I usually eat snacks at night because I have to stay up late recently. Therefore, having some snacks or drinks helps me focus better on my schoolwork and recharge my energy.

Suggestion: Your answer is incomplete and contains grammatical mistakes. Avoid vague phrases like "I know that there are many." Instead, provide specific reasons and use correct grammar. Use linking words to make your answer coherent.

Example: I don't think eating snacks is healthy because many snacks are high in fat and low in nutritional value. Research has shown that consuming too many unhealthy snacks can lead to health problems.

Suggestion: Your answer is good but can be improved by correcting minor grammatical errors and making sentences more concise. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

Example: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young. Whenever I did well in my schoolwork or completed tasks successfully, my grandparents would reward me with delicious snacks, especially their homemade chocolate.

Suggestion: Avoid filler words like "umm" and be more specific with your vocabulary. Also, clarify your ideas and use linking words to explain your preferences clearly.

Example: I prefer snacks with less sugar, such as nutritious chocolate bars. Since I want to be healthier nowadays, I believe these choices are better for my health.

× I usually have some snacks I at night because I recently have to stay up late, so having some snacks or drinks help me get more focus on my schoolwork and I think it's a great way for me to recharge my batteries.

✓ I usually have some snacks at night because I recently have to stay up late, so having some snacks or drinks helps me focus more on my schoolwork and I think it's a great way for me to recharge my batteries.

The phrase 'I at night' is incorrect; 'at' should be placed before 'night' to indicate time. Also, 'help' should be 'helps' to agree with the singular subject 'having some snacks or drinks'. Additionally, 'get more focus on' is awkward; 'focus more on' is the correct expression.

× I don't think so, because I know that there are many. Research has proved that having too much snacks with rich fat and less valuable nutrition make people get more unhealthy.

✓ I don't think so, because I know that there are many. Research has proved that having too many snacks with rich fat and less valuable nutrition makes people less healthy.

'Too much snacks' is incorrect because 'snacks' is countable; it should be 'too many snacks'. Also, 'make people get more unhealthy' is awkward; 'makes people less healthy' is clearer and grammatically correct. The verb 'make' should be 'makes' to agree with the singular subject 'having too many snacks'.

× Yes, I still remember that when I lived with my grandparents, every time when I did good job on my school work or complete doing something well, my grandparents would reward me with delicious snacks, especially their homemade chocolate.

✓ Yes, I still remember that when I lived with my grandparents, every time I did a good job on my schoolwork or completed doing something well, my grandparents would reward me with delicious snacks, especially their homemade chocolate.

'Did good job' is missing an article; it should be 'did a good job'. Also, 'complete doing something well' is incorrect; the past tense 'completed' should be used instead of 'complete' to match the past context.

× I personally prefer something with less sugar, for example the nutrient chocolate bar, because you know, umm. I tend to be healthier nowadays so umm, I think those choices may be more beneficial to my health.

✓ I personally prefer something with less sugar, for example, a nutritious chocolate bar, because, you know, umm, I tend to be healthier nowadays, so umm, I think those choices may be more beneficial to my health.

'Nutrient chocolate bar' is incorrect; 'nutritious' is the correct adjective to describe food. Also, commas are needed after 'for example' and 'because' for clarity. The sentence structure is improved by adding these commas and correcting the adjective.