Snacks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Make the answer more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g., "in the time", "grab some something").

Example: I usually eat snacks in the late afternoon because I’m often too busy to cook. For example, on workdays I pick up a sandwich or fruit from a nearby shop since it’s quick and convenient.

Suggestion: Give a clearer main idea and organise supporting points with linking words. Correct grammar (e.g., "which affects"), avoid contradictory starts with repeated 'but'. Include one specific example and a concise reason.

Example: I don't think most snacks I buy are healthy because I often choose chips or chocolate, which affect my skin and may make me gain weight. Although there are healthier options like Greek yogurt or nuts, I usually avoid them because they tend to be more expensive.

Suggestion: This answer is mostly clear but trim filler words and add a brief specific example to enrich the response. Use one linking phrase to justify the reason given.

Example: No, I didn’t. When I was younger my mother often forbade snacks because she preferred I eat homemade meals; for example, she would prepare rice and vegetables instead of letting me have sweets.

Suggestion: Start with a direct topic sentence and avoid fillers like 'uh' and informal phrases such as 'kinda'. Give one specific example and explain briefly why you choose it using linking words.

Example: I love eating chocolate because it boosts my mood and helps me relax. For instance, a small dark chocolate bar calms me during stressful study sessions, although I try not to eat it every day because it’s high in sugar.

× I usually eat snacks in the afternoon or on the evening instead of lunch or dinner because on these days I don't have much time to prepare cooked food in the time, so I grab some something in the shops because it does not require a lot of time.

✓ I usually eat snacks in the afternoon or in the evening instead of lunch or dinner because I don't have much time to prepare cooked food, so I grab something from shops because it does not require a lot of time.

Error types: incorrect use of prepositions and redundant phrasing. Use 'in the evening' (not 'on the evening'). Remove 'in the time' which is redundant; use simple present consistent with habitual action. Use 'something from shops' rather than 'some something in the shops'. Suggestion: say 'in the afternoon or in the evening', drop unnecessary phrases, and use 'from' to indicate origin.

× No I don't think so because usually I buy unhealthy snacks such as chips or chocolate bars which effects negative for my skin and overall weight.

✓ No, I don't think so because I usually buy unhealthy snacks such as chips or chocolate bars which have negative effects on my skin and overall weight.

Error types: missing comma after 'No', incorrect verb form and preposition. 'Effects' is a noun; use 'have negative effects on' to show influence. Use 'on my skin and overall weight' to indicate what is affected. Suggestion: use 'have negative effects on' or 'negatively affect'.

× But there are plenty of healthy snacks with a lot of protein and low calories.

✓ But there are plenty of healthy snacks that are high in protein and low in calories.

Error types: incorrect use of adjectives/adverbs and phrasing. 'With a lot of protein and low calories' is awkward; use 'high in protein and low in calories' for natural English. Suggestion: use 'high in' and 'low in' for nutrient descriptions.

× But personally for me the price isn't so reasonable because they are much expensive than other.

✓ But personally, the price isn't very reasonable because they are much more expensive than others.

Error types: redundant phrase 'personally for me', incorrect comparative form and pronoun. Use one of 'personally' or 'for me'. Use comparative 'more expensive' and plural pronoun 'others' to compare with other snacks. Suggestion: say 'Personally, the price isn't very reasonable because they are much more expensive than others.'

× No, when I was younger my mom used to forbid me uh, a lot of snacks because she always said to me that I should eat homemade food rather than unhealthy snacks.

✓ No, when I was younger my mom used to forbid me from eating a lot of snacks because she always told me that I should eat homemade food rather than unhealthy snacks.

Error types: incorrect verb + preposition and verb choice. Use 'forbid someone from doing something' not 'forbid me a lot of snacks'. Use 'told me' (not 'said to me') for reporting past speech. Suggestion: use 'forbid me from eating' and 'told me' for natural past narration.

× I really love chocolate uh because it gives me dopamine and it enhances my mood.

✓ I really love chocolate because it gives me dopamine and enhances my mood.

Error types: unnecessary pronoun 'it' before 'enhances' (not incorrect but stylistically redundant) and filler 'uh'. Remove fillers and keep parallel structure: 'gives me dopamine and enhances my mood.' Suggestion: omit 'uh' and keep verbs parallel.

× Also it helps me to go with stress or anxiety and I believe that I'm kinda addicted person to chocolate.

✓ Also it helps me cope with stress or anxiety, and I believe that I'm kind of addicted to chocolate.

Error types: incorrect verb phrase and preposition. Use 'cope with' (not 'go with') for handling stress. Use 'kind of addicted to' rather than 'kinda addicted person to'. Suggestion: use 'cope with' and the adjective phrase 'addicted to' with 'kind of' for informal speech; avoid 'kinda' in formal contexts.