Snacks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Speak in clear, complete sentences and organize your answer: give a direct topic sentence saying how often you snack, then provide one or two brief reasons using linking words (for example, "because" or "so"). Avoid filler sounds (uh, um) and incorrect grammar (e.g., verb forms and articles). Be specific about what keeps you busy instead of vague words like "crosses."

Example: I rarely eat snacks now because I need to focus on my coursework, so I don’t have time between classes. Also, many snacks are unhealthy, so I prefer to avoid them.

Suggestion: Start with a direct answer (Yes/No) and then give clear reasons. Use linking words like "because" and "however." Avoid irrelevant or unclear details ("after I extract, I need to go toilet") and correct vocabulary ("ingredients," "sugar"). Keep to two or three sentences max and give a specific example of unhealthy ingredients or effects.

Example: No, I don’t think snacks are healthy because many contain a lot of sugar and artificial ingredients. For example, sugary chips or candies can cause energy crashes and stomach discomfort.

Suggestion: Answer directly and use past tense consistently when talking about childhood. Give one or two clear reasons and a short specific example (what snacks, when, or with whom). Avoid repetition and unclear phrases like "improve my spirit." Use words such as "cheer me up" or "give me energy."

Example: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young because they tasted great and I was curious to try new sweets. For example, I used to snack on candy and biscuits after school to cheer myself up.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence naming the snack(s) you like, then add a brief reason and a specific detail (type, frequency, or context). Use varied vocabulary (e.g., dark chocolate, milk chocolate) and correct grammar. Remove fillers and repetitions.

Example: I usually like to eat chocolate, especially dark chocolate, because it tastes good and is lower in sugar than milk chocolate. I often have a small piece in the evening as a treat.

× Uh, now I seldom is next because I think that because I need to focus on my crosses, so I don't have any time to eat snacks.

✓ Now I seldom eat snacks because I need to focus on my courses, so I don't have time to eat them.

The sentence uses incorrect verb forms and present tense structure. 'is next' is wrong; use the simple present 'eat' for habitual action. 'crosses' is likely a mispronunciation of 'courses.' 'any time' should be 'time' in this context and replace 'snacks' with 'them' to avoid repetition. Suggestion: use simple present for routines and keep subject-verb consistency ('I seldom eat').

× Uh, However, uh, some of the snacks are, are in unhealthy and I don't know what ingredients in it.

✓ However, some of the snacks are unhealthy and I don't know what ingredients are in them.

Incorrect adjective phrase 'in unhealthy' should be 'unhealthy.' The clause 'what ingredients in it' lacks the verb 'are' and uses wrong pronoun 'it' for plural 'snacks' (use 'them'). Suggestion: use 'what ingredients are in them.'

× No, I don't say it is healthy for me to eat snack because as I mentioned at the in the first question and there are lots of sugars and artificial ingredients in it.

✓ No, I wouldn't say it is healthy for me to eat snacks because, as I mentioned earlier, there are a lot of sugars and artificial ingredients in them.

'I don't say' is unnatural for opinion—use 'I wouldn't say.' 'eat snack' needs plural 'snacks.' 'at the in the first question' is wrong; use 'earlier' or 'in the first answer.' 'lots of sugars' should be 'a lot of sugar' or 'many sugars'; use 'a lot of sugar' and plural pronoun 'them.' Suggestion: use natural opinion phrases and correct noun number and pronouns.

× So, uh, I don't think that it is quite healthy for me to eat snack. So after I extract, I need to go toilet so several times.

✓ So, I don't think it is healthy for me to eat snacks. After I eat them, I need to go to the toilet several times.

'Quite healthy' is optional; simplified to 'healthy.' 'eat snack' needs plural 'snacks.' 'after I extract' seems to be a wrong word—likely 'after I eat them.' 'go toilet' needs the preposition and article 'go to the toilet.' Suggestion: use correct verbs and common collocations ('eat snacks', 'go to the toilet').

× Yes, I often eat snacks when I was young because because some of the snacks were very delicious at that time and I I'm very curious about the snacks.

✓ Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young because some of the snacks were very delicious at that time and I was very curious about them.

Mixes present 'eat' with past 'was young.' Use past tense 'ate' for habitual past actions. 'I I'm' is redundant; use 'I was.' Replace repeated 'snacks' with 'them.' Suggestion: keep consistent past tense when talking about childhood.

× So I often eat snack when I was young that is quite very, that is quite very funny because I need snacks to in to improve my spirit.

✓ So I often ate snacks when I was young. That is quite funny because I needed snacks to lift my spirits.

Tense inconsistency: use past 'ate' and 'needed.' 'that is quite very' is ungrammatical and redundant; use 'That is quite funny.' 'to in to improve my spirit' is incorrect phrasing; use 'to lift my spirits' or 'to improve my mood.' Suggestion: simplify and use correct idiomatic expression 'lift my spirits.'

× Uh, now, uh, for me, I would eat some snacks, like some, I like some, uh, like some chocolate and uh, like some chocolate because chocolate is some tasty and some of the some kinds of the chocolate is very healthy, like the kinda.

✓ Now, I usually eat snacks like chocolate because chocolate is tasty, and some kinds of chocolate are quite healthy.

Sentence is repetitive and uses conditional 'I would' inappropriately; use simple present 'I usually eat.' Remove repeated words and hedges. 'chocolate is some tasty' should be 'chocolate is tasty.' 'some of the some kinds of the chocolate is' should be 'some kinds of chocolate are.' Suggestion: use simple present for habits, avoid repetition, and ensure subject-verb agreement ('kinds... are').

× So I usually eat chocolate.

✓ So I usually eat chocolate.

This sentence is acceptable; 'chocolate' as an uncountable noun is correct here. No change needed.