Patience— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tự nhiên và có cấu trúc rõ ràng, nhưng có một số lỗi ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ chưa chính xác (ví dụ: "I was hardly be patient" nên là "I was hardly patient" hoặc "I could hardly be patient"). Bạn nên chú ý sử dụng thì và cấu trúc câu chính xác hơn để câu trả lời hiệu quả hơn.

Example: I would say I am not very patient. When I was younger, I was quite hot-tempered and found it hard to be patient, especially at work. However, now that I have two children to take care of, I have become more patient. I try to be their friend, so patience is essential.

Suggestion: Bạn trả lời có ý tưởng rõ ràng nhưng câu đầu tiên không tự nhiên và thiếu chủ ngữ ("I guess is in my blood" nên là "I guess it is in my blood"). Bạn nên sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp.

Example: I'm not sure, but I guess impatience runs in my blood from when I was young until now. I tend to be impatient in some situations, especially when things are unpredictable. However, in other cases, like with children, I can be more patient.

Suggestion: Câu trả lời của bạn có ý tưởng tốt nhưng câu cuối cùng bị thiếu phần kết thúc và hơi lủng củng. Bạn nên sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và tránh câu bị dang dở.

Example: When I have to do something for a long time, I don't feel impatient because I think it's acceptable. It depends on the goal. For example, if the goal is clear and I understand it will take a long time, I am patient. But if the situation is unpredictable, I might feel impatient.

Suggestion: Bạn trả lời rõ ràng và có nội dung phù hợp nhưng có một số lỗi nhỏ về ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ (ví dụ: "it is what needed" nên là "it is what is needed"). Bạn nên luyện tập để câu trả lời trôi chảy và chính xác hơn.

Example: Yes, it does because I work for a national company which usually involves slow processes and many rules to follow. Therefore, I have become more patient since patience is necessary to complete the job.

Suggestion: Câu trả lời của bạn có ý tưởng tốt nhưng câu cuối cùng bị bỏ dở và không hoàn chỉnh. Bạn nên hoàn thành câu trả lời và tránh để câu bị dang dở để thể hiện sự trôi chảy và tự nhiên hơn.

Example: Yes, absolutely. When I was a child, I was quick-tempered and couldn't wait long for anything. But now, as a mother of two children, I have to be more patient. For example, it often takes me hours to explain a math problem to them, but I try to stay calm and patient throughout.

× I was hardly be patient with anything, especially at work.

✓ I was hardly patient with anything, especially at work.

The phrase 'was hardly be patient' is incorrect because 'was' is already a past tense verb and should be followed by an adjective or noun, not 'be' plus an adjective. The correct form is 'was hardly patient'.

× I try to be their friends, so being patient is a must.

✓ I try to be their friend, so being patient is a must.

The pronoun 'their' refers to multiple people, but 'friends' is plural and implies multiple friends. Since the speaker is referring to themselves in relation to multiple children, 'friend' (singular) is appropriate to indicate the speaker's role as a single friend to multiple children.

× I'm not sure, I guess is in my blood when I was very young until now.

✓ I'm not sure, I guess it is in my blood from when I was very young until now.

The original sentence lacks a subject for the verb 'is'. Adding 'it' as the subject clarifies the sentence. Also, 'from when' better expresses the time span from past to present.

× When I have to do something for a long time, I don't feel impatient, I think it's OK and acceptable.

✓ When I have to do something for a long time, I don't feel impatient; I think it's OK and acceptable.

The original sentence is a run-on sentence with two independent clauses joined by a comma. Using a semicolon or separating into two sentences improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× For example, if the goal is clear and I understand that it will take a long time to do it, so I will be patient, but if it is something unpredictable.

✓ For example, if the goal is clear and I understand that it will take a long time to do it, I will be patient; but if it is something unpredictable, I may not be.

The original sentence is incomplete and contains unnecessary conjunctions like 'so' after 'if' clause. The corrected sentence removes 'so' and completes the thought for the unpredictable case.

× So I become more patient because it is what needed for the job to be done.

✓ So I become more patient because it is what is needed for the job to be done.

The phrase 'what needed' is missing the auxiliary verb 'is' to form the present passive voice 'is needed'. This correction clarifies the meaning that patience is required for the job.

× When I was a child I was very quick tempered and I couldn't wait for anything too long.

✓ When I was a child I was very quick-tempered and I couldn't wait for anything for too long.

The adjective 'quick tempered' should be hyphenated as 'quick-tempered'. Also, the phrase 'wait for anything too long' is missing the preposition 'for' before 'too long' to be grammatically correct.

× For example, it takes me hours to explain to them a math problem and I feel.

✓ For example, it takes me hours to explain to them a math problem, and I feel patient.

The original sentence ends abruptly without completing the thought after 'I feel'. Adding an adjective like 'patient' completes the sentence and clarifies the meaning.