Patience— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition and filler words, and provide one specific example with brief explanation. Use linking words like 'however' or 'for instance' to connect ideas.

Example: Yes, I am generally patient. However, I lose my patience in stressful situations; for instance, before exams I get anxious and find it hard to stay calm, which makes me more short-tempered than usual.

Suggestion: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific causes with brief explanations and linking words. Avoid hesitations and grammar mistakes (e.g., 'personal exam' → 'exams').

Example: Exams and conflicts with friends make me impatient. For example, during exams I feel stressed because of the high stakes, and when I have a serious argument with a friend I become frustrated and lose my temper quickly.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence about your reaction, then explain why with concrete reasons. Avoid vague phrasing and fillers; use linking words such as 'because' or 'therefore'.

Example: I usually remain patient when I have to do something for a long time because I am used to sustained effort. For example, when studying for exams I set small goals and remind myself of the end result, which helps me keep going.

Suggestion: Respond directly that being a student requires patience and give specific reasons. Avoid contradictory or unclear phrases and reduce repetitions; use linking words like 'because' and 'for example'.

Example: Yes, being a student does require patience because studying often involves long hours of revision and delayed results. For example, preparing for final exams can take weeks of steady work without immediate rewards.

Suggestion: Start with a clear comparative statement, then give one or two specific childhood examples to support it. Be concise and avoid filler words; finish your sentence fully.

Example: Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child. For example, as a child I used to get very excited and impatient before my birthday because I tried to sneak my presents, but now I am much calmer and can wait without worrying.

× For example, when I get really stressful I always lose my patience.

✓ For example, when I get really stressed, I always lose my patience.

The adjective 'stressful' describes something that causes stress; the speaker needs the adjective 'stressed' to describe their own feeling. Use 'stressed' after 'get' to express becoming stressed. Also add a comma before the clause for clarity.

× For example when I pass an exam or uh or argue with somebody.

✓ For example, when I pass an exam or argue with somebody, I become impatient.

The original is a sentence fragment and lacks a main verb for the clause. Add a main clause (I become impatient) to complete the sentence and remove the repeated filler 'or uh or' to improve clarity.

× As I said, personal exam makes me feel very stressful.

✓ As I said, personal exams make me feel very stressed.

Use plural 'exams' to refer generally to exam situations (singular/plural agreement) and use 'stressed' to describe the person's feeling rather than 'stressful' which describes the exam. This corrects both number and adjective choice.

× Moreover, when I get mad at my friend, for example, we have a bad fight.

✓ Moreover, when I get mad at my friend, for example, we have a bad argument.

'Have a bad fight' is understandable but nonstandard; 'have a bad argument' or 'get into a bad fight' are more natural. Also maintain present tense ('get' and 'have') for habitual actions. If speaker meant past, use 'got mad' and 'had a bad fight'.

× I think I just got used to it 'cause uh, like it's so thing that I really need to do.

✓ I think I have just gotten used to it because it's something I really need to do.

Use present perfect 'have just gotten used' to indicate a recent change of state that affects the present. Replace colloquial ' 'cause uh, like' with 'because' and 'it's so thing' with 'it's something' for grammatical correctness.

× So that's why I always stay patient.

✓ So that's why I usually stay patient.

'Always stay patient' is grammatical but 'usually' sounds more natural for habitual behavior; 'stay patient' is acceptable but 'remain patient' or 'am patient' are alternatives. This change improves naturalness.

× Actually, I'm a student right now, so I, it's kinda job too.

✓ Actually, I'm a student right now, so it's kind of a job too.

Remove the unnecessary comma and stray pronoun 'I'; use 'kind of a job' instead of informal 'kinda job' and place 'it's' correctly to form a complete clause.

× because I need to study for a long time without, with any, any time to relax the relaxation and uh, it really needs some kind of patience to do it.

✓ because I need to study for a long time without any time to relax, and it really requires patience to do that.

Remove conflicting prepositions 'without, with any'; use 'without any time to relax' for clarity. Replace 'needs some kind of patience' with 'requires patience' and 'do it' with 'do that' for coherence.

× Yeah, of course, because when I was a child I was like, umm, I was really impatient person, especially before my birthdays.

✓ Yeah, of course, because when I was a child I was really an impatient person, especially before my birthdays.

Add the indefinite article 'an' before 'impatient person' for correct noun phrase structure. Remove filler 'I was like' for clarity.

× I, umm, tried to try to reach what presents my parents and my friends would give to me and it really made them mad at me at that point.

✓ I tried to guess what presents my parents and friends would give me, and it really made them mad at that time.

'Tried to try to reach' is redundant and unclear; replace with 'tried to guess' for intended meaning. Use 'would give me' (no extra 'to') and 'at that time' is more natural than 'at that point.' This fixes redundancy and incorrect verb phrase usage.

× So right now I'm very calm and.

✓ So right now I'm very calm.

The sentence ends with an incomplete conjunction 'and' creating a fragment. Remove 'and' to complete the sentence and make it grammatically correct.