Patience— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be direct and concise with a clear topic sentence. Avoid repetition and grammatical errors. Use one or two supporting details with linking words (for example, 'because' or 'so') and keep to 2–3 sentences.

Example: Yes, I consider myself a patient person because I usually stay calm and avoid conflicts. For example, at work I listen carefully to colleagues' concerns and give them time to explain before responding.

Suggestion: Start with a clear topic sentence naming the cause of impatience, then give a specific example and reason. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' and avoid vague phrases like 'probably' and 'in generally'.

Example: I get impatient when people are constantly late because it disrupts plans and wastes others' time. For instance, when a teammate misses deadlines, it delays the whole project and makes coordination difficult.

Suggestion: Give a clear direct answer about your feelings, then explain with a specific effect or example. Correct common grammar mistakes (e.g., 'tests your discipline' not 'exams') and use one or two concise sentences.

Example: When I have to work on something for a long time, I feel it tests my discipline and patience. For example, studying for a professional exam required daily practice for months, which taught me to stay focused and manage my time better.

Suggestion: Respond directly and organize points with linking words (e.g., 'and', 'because', 'for example'). Use specific tasks to illustrate patience at work and avoid redundancy like repeating 'so'. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

Example: Yes, my job requires a lot of patience because I must manage my team and revise marketing materials several times. For example, I often wait for client feedback and then edit ads repeatedly until they are approved.

Suggestion: Answer clearly then explain why with a concise reason and one specific example. Avoid unclear words like 'oppression' and filler 'uh'. Use linking phrases such as 'because' and 'as a result'.

Example: Yes, I'm more patient now than I was as a child because life experience has taught me to think before reacting. For example, I now pause to consider my response at work rather than reacting impulsively.

× Well, that's a tough question I think.

✓ Well, that's a tough question, I think.

Missing comma before the parenthetical phrase 'I think' makes the sentence run-on; add a comma to separate the main clause and the comment for clarity and correct sentence structure.

× Yes, I am patient person which is driven by my behavior and in generally patient behavior most of the time trying to avoid conflicts and I generally be normal.

✓ Yes, I am a patient person, which is reflected in my behavior; generally I try to avoid conflicts and behave normally most of the time.

Missing indefinite article 'a' before 'patient person' (Article errors). The original also has awkward phrases and verb forms ('in generally', 'I generally be normal'); revise to natural collocations and correct verb usage: use 'generally I try' and 'behave' to express habitual actions.

× I think I get impatient when people probably are constantly late or in generally miss their deadlines at the same time, which makes them unreliable for many people and can hurt themselves in the eyes of others people, which I think is absolutely unacceptable to do.

✓ I think I get impatient when people are constantly late or generally miss their deadlines, which makes them seem unreliable and can damage how others view them, which I find unacceptable.

Incorrect adverb placement and word choice ('probably', 'in generally') cause awkwardness; remove 'probably' and use 'generally' correctly. Also replace reflexive phrase 'hurt themselves in the eyes of others people' with 'damage how others view them' for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I think that doing something for a long time actually exams your discipline and I generally your patience in a long term, which is must be. In each life of everybody.

✓ I think that doing something for a long time actually tests your discipline and generally your patience in the long term, which it must do in everyone's life.

Incorrect verb choice 'exams' (should be 'tests') and incorrect word order ('I generally your patience'); tense and phrasing adjusted to present simple habitual meaning. 'In each life of everybody' is unidiomatic; use 'in everyone's life'.

× So yes, my job requires a lot of patience and not only motivate my team but also manage my time to create ads for our customers, which often involves waiting even for a feedback and in generally revising work multiple times.

✓ So yes, my job requires a lot of patience: I not only motivate my team but also manage my time to create ads for our customers, which often involves waiting even for feedback and generally revising work multiple times.

Original lacked parallel structure after 'not only... but also' and used incorrect article 'a feedback' (Article errors) and 'in generally' (adverb misuse). Corrected to maintain parallel verbs 'motivate' and 'manage', remove 'a' before 'feedback' and use 'generally' properly.

× So I need to stay calm and disciplined which sometimes is not enough.

✓ So I need to stay calm and disciplined, which sometimes is not enough.

Missing comma before the relative clause 'which sometimes is not enough' improves readability and correctly separates clauses.

× Honestly, yes, I'm oppression now that I was a child because, uh, because of my life experience, which uh, have attached me to think more carefully, energetically, think more deeply before reacting and doing something, for example, at work or in generally at my daily life.

✓ Honestly, yes, I'm more composed now than I was as a child because of my life experience, which has taught me to think more carefully and more deeply before reacting or doing something, for example at work or in my daily life.

Incorrect pronoun/word choice 'I'm oppression' should be 'I'm more composed' (incorrect use of noun). Comparative structure 'now that I was a child' is wrong; use 'now than I was as a child' (Comparison errors). Verb agreement: 'which have attached me' should be 'which has taught me' (subject-verb agreement and correct verb collocation). Also fix adverb placement 'in generally' to 'generally' and remove filler 'uh' for clarity.