Patience— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and organized: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetition and unfinished sentences. Use linking words (for example, because, as a result) to connect ideas and correct minor grammar errors (e.g., "this helped me develop more patience").

Example: Yes. I consider myself a patient person because I have always needed to support family members and I worked in customer service for several years. For example, dealing calmly with upset customers taught me to listen carefully and respond politely, which has helped me become more patient in everyday situations.

Suggestion: State the main reason clearly, then give a specific example. Fix grammar and avoid repetition. Use a linking phrase such as "For example" and keep to two sentences maximum.

Example: I feel impatient when people do not pay attention to me. For example, if I am explaining something important and the listener interrupts or looks distracted, I become frustrated and find it hard to continue.

Suggestion: Clarify your meaning and correct unclear phrases. Begin with a clear topic sentence (e.g., "It depends on the task"), then contrast work and personal tasks using a linking phrase ("however"). Be specific about emotions (bored, tired, frustrated).

Example: It depends on the task: if it is work-related, I can usually stay focused and cope well because I am used to long tasks. However, when it is a repetitive personal chore, I often get bored and impatient after a while.

Suggestion: Answer directly and provide a clear, relevant example from your previous job. Remove unrelated or unclear phrases ("patient with my call"). Use one linking word like "for example" and keep it concise.

Example: Although I am not working at the moment, my previous job as a student support assistant required a lot of patience. For example, I often spent time calmly explaining procedures to confused students and mediating between students and teachers.

Suggestion: Give a direct comparison and a reason with a concise example. Avoid filler words (uh) and grammatical mistakes. Use a linking word like "because" and one specific experience that shows growth.

Example: Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child because work and life experience have taught me to stay calm. For instance, handling difficult situations in customer service taught me to listen carefully and respond calmly, which I could not do as a child.

× I was working customer service for many years and this is how me to have more patience than I usually had before.

✓ I worked in customer service for many years, and that helped me become more patient than I used to be.

Use of preposition 'in' is required with 'working in customer service'. The original also has incorrect structure 'this is how me to have' — change to 'that helped me become' to express cause and result correctly. Use past simple 'worked' to match 'for many years' as a completed period and 'used to be' for past state.

× However, I'm very patient, very kind, but I have.

✓ However, I am very patient and very kind, but I still have flaws.

The sentence ends with 'but I have' which lacks an object; pronoun use is incomplete. Provide a clear noun phrase 'flaws' or similar to complete the thought. Also replace comma splice with 'and' for clarity.

× I usually feel impatient when someone is not a paying attention to me.

✓ I usually feel impatient when someone is not paying attention to me.

Extra article 'a' before 'paying' is incorrect. The verb phrase should be 'paying attention' without an article. Remove 'a' to correct the phrase.

× For example if I'm trying to talk with someone or explain something and this person is just don't want to hear me and and feeling very impatient so that.

✓ For example, if I'm trying to talk to someone or explain something and the person doesn't want to listen, I feel very impatient.

Multiple issues: 'talk with' is acceptable but 'talk to' is more natural. 'this person is just don't want' mixes forms; use 'the person doesn't want' (subject-verb agreement). 'want to hear me' is better as 'want to listen'. Remove repeated 'and' and rephrase to 'I feel very impatient' to complete the thought.

× Icing does the pen of the thing that I'm doing, for example, is if it's something that I'm doing at work, if I need to do it for a long time, for me it's OK, I can deal with that.

✓ It depends on the nature of the task. For example, if it's work-related and I have to do it for a long time, that's fine; I can cope with it.

Original sentence is unclear and contains several incorrect fragments ('Icing does the pen'). Rephrase to a clear structure: 'It depends on the nature of the task' and use 'cope with' or 'deal with' appropriately. Ensure conditional clauses are correctly formed and punctuation separates ideas.

× On the other hand, if it's about a personal thing that I need to do for a long time, probably I feel more trained or impatient about it.

✓ On the other hand, if it's a personal task I have to do for a long time, I probably feel more tired or impatient about it.

'Trained' is incorrect in this context; likely intended 'tired'. Word choice error (adjective). Move 'probably' to natural position and use 'task' instead of 'thing' for clarity.

× I'm not working right now, but my last work was as a student support assistant.

✓ I'm not working right now, but my last job was as a student support assistant.

Use 'job' instead of 'work' when referring to a specific position. The tense is acceptable, but noun choice was incorrect.

× And on the other hand, in my personal life, I think I needed to be patient with my call.

✓ And in my personal life, I think I needed to be patient with my family.

'My call' is incorrect and likely a mistranslation; 'family' fits context earlier. Replace with correct noun. Also remove redundant 'on the other hand' when paired with 'and'.

× Yes, I think I have been learning how to be more patient every day.

✓ Yes, I think I have been learning to be more patient every day.

Use 'learning to be' rather than 'learning how to be' for more natural phrasing; both are acceptable but the corrected version is more concise. Present perfect continuous 'have been learning' correctly indicates ongoing process.

× Like I said, uh, a few work environments, uh, have told me so much about be patient.

✓ Like I said, a few work environments have taught me a lot about being patient.

'Told me so much about be patient' is ungrammatical. Use 'taught me a lot about being patient' — 'about' should be followed by gerund 'being', and 'told' changed to 'taught' is more appropriate.

× And right now I'm more patient than when I was younger.

✓ And right now I'm more patient than I was when I was younger.

Comparative clause needs 'I was' to compare present to past state. Alternatively 'than when I was younger' is acceptable, but adding 'I was' clarifies the comparison. Ensure consistent tense usage.