Patience— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Start with a clear, direct topic sentence answering the question, avoid repetition and unnecessary personal medical detail unless relevant, and keep within 3–4 concise sentences. Use a linking phrase to add one brief supporting detail and a positive note about improvement.

Example: No, I'm not a very patient person. Long-term health issues have made me more easily irritated, so I get frustrated when things take too long. However, I'm seeing a psychiatrist and practicing relaxation techniques, which have already helped me stay calmer in some situations.

Suggestion: Answer directly with one clear topic sentence listing specific triggers, avoid repeating previous statements about the psychiatrist, and use correct grammar for conditions and plural nouns. Limit to 2–3 concise sentences and include a linking word for clarity.

Example: Waiting in long queues makes me impatient, especially in restaurants, hospitals, or busy shops. Also, unclear schedules or unexpected delays tend to increase my frustration.

Suggestion: Begin with a concise topic sentence about your feelings, correct small grammatical errors, and use linking words (e.g., "because" or "especially") to connect causes and coping strategies. Keep supporting detail specific and limited to one example of how you manage it.

Example: I feel stressed and quite impatient when I have to work on something for a long time because my mind becomes overwhelmed. Therefore, I take short breaks and break tasks into smaller parts, which helps me stay focused and reduce irritation.

Suggestion: Answer directly and avoid informal fillers ("you know") and vague endings. Explain briefly why the job doesn't require patience or why long hours affect patience, using 2–3 clear sentences and one linking word (e.g., "because").

Example: No, my job doesn't require much patience because most tasks are routine and fast-paced. However, working 14–15 hours a day makes me tired and more likely to lose patience because long hours increase stress and mood swings.

Suggestion: Give a direct comparison and be specific about reasons without vague phrases like "this and that." Use one linking phrase (e.g., "because" or "due to") and provide a concise example of the added responsibilities causing stress.

Example: No, I'm less patient now than when I was a child because I have more responsibilities at work and at home. For example, managing long work hours and family duties leaves me with less tolerance for delays.

× Person No, I'm not a very patient person.

✓ No, I'm not a very patient person.

The word 'Person' at the start is extraneous and makes the sentence ungrammatical. Remove the stray word so the response begins naturally with 'No'. Suggestion: Start answers directly with 'No' or 'Yes' and then the explanation.

× My long term health problems have made me more irritable and stressed, so I often get frustrated when things take too long.

✓ My long-term health problems have made me more irritable and stressed, so I often get frustrated when things take too long.

This sentence is grammatically correct in tense and structure, but 'long term' should be hyphenated as a compound adjective before a noun: 'long-term health problems'. Suggestion: Use hyphenation for compound adjectives before nouns.

× I'm working on this with a psychiatrist and by practicing relaxation techniques which have helped a bit.

✓ I'm working on this with a psychiatrist and practicing relaxation techniques, which have helped a bit.

Parallel structure is required: use 'and practicing' to match 'working'. Also add a comma before the nonrestrictive clause 'which have helped a bit'. Suggestion: Keep verbs in the same form after 'and' and use commas for nonrestrictive clauses.

× As I told you that I am still visiting my psychiatrist and the things that make me feel impatient is that when I whenever I wait into a long queues in restaurants, in hospital or wherever in shops.

✓ As I told you, I am still visiting my psychiatrist, and the things that make me feel impatient are when I have to wait in long queues at restaurants, hospitals, or shops.

Multiple issues: remove unnecessary 'that' after 'told you'; subject-verb agreement: 'things... are' not 'is'; incorrect wording 'wait into a long queues' -> 'wait in long queues'; article use: 'in hospital' -> 'at hospitals' or 'in hospitals'; redundant 'when I whenever' -> choose one. The corrected sentence fixes pronouns, agreement, prepositions, and removes redundancy. Suggestion: Keep clauses concise, check subject-verb agreement, and use correct prepositions ('wait in' and 'at' or 'in' for places).

× I feel very stressed and become a quite impatient when I have to work on something for a very long time.

✓ I feel very stressed and become quite impatient when I have to work on something for a very long time.

Remove the extra article 'a' before 'quite impatient' because 'impatient' is an adjective describing the subject, so no article is needed. The verb tenses are fine. Suggestion: Do not use 'a' before adjectives that directly follow linking verbs (become, feel).

× My mind my mind becomes overwhelmed and I get easily irritated, especially if there are no clear breaks.

✓ My mind becomes overwhelmed and I get easily irritated, especially if there are no clear breaks.

The phrase 'My mind' is duplicated, which is a repetition error. Removing the duplicate yields a correct sentence. Suggestion: Read aloud to catch accidental repetitions.

× For example, I try to manage this by taking short breaks and breaking the task into smaller parts.

✓ For example, I try to manage this by taking short breaks and breaking tasks into smaller parts.

Original is acceptable, but 'the task' can be generalized to 'tasks' for consistency when speaking about recurring work. No major grammar error. Suggestion: Use plural when referring to general habits.

× No, my job doesn't require me to be patient because I usually work 14 to 15 hours a day.

✓ No, my job doesn't require me to be patient because I usually work 14 to 15 hours a day.

This sentence is grammatically correct. 'Doesn't' correctly matches the third-person singular subject 'job'. No change needed. Suggestion: None.

× And you know, if you work that much a day, your mind will get stressed and your mood will.

✓ And you know, if you work that much in a day, your mind will get stressed and your mood will change.

The phrase 'that much a day' is better as 'that much in a day'. The clause 'your mood will.' is incomplete; finish the thought by saying 'your mood will change' or 'your mood will swing'. Suggestion: Complete predicates; avoid leaving clauses hanging.

× Your mood swings will arrive and that's it.

✓ Your mood swings will occur, and that's it.

'Arrive' is awkward when referring to mood swings; 'occur' or 'happen' is more natural. The sentence is colloquial; 'that's it' is acceptable in spoken English but can be kept. Suggestion: Use natural collocations like 'mood swings occur'.

× No, I think I'm more impatient as compared to when I was a child because I have a lot of stress of my work and of my family and this and that.

✓ No, I think I'm more impatient now than I was as a child because I have a lot of stress from my work and my family.

Use 'more ... than' not 'more ... as compared to'. Also use 'now' for clarity and 'stress from' instead of 'stress of'. Remove vague filler 'this and that'. Suggestion: Use 'more... than' for comparisons and avoid unnecessary fillers; use 'stress from' to indicate source.