Patience— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 回答は内容が伝わりますが、冗長な言い回しや曖昧な表現（“it's development and my character and” や過度の“uh”）が多く、文法と語順の誤りもあります。改善点：①冒頭で明確な主題文を一文で言う（例："Yes, I am a patient person."）。②具体的な理由やエピソードを1–2文で補足する際は、接続詞（because, when, after）を使い論理的につなげる。③口語のフィラー（uh, um）を減らし、簡潔な文にする。④文法（過去形・現在完了の使い分け）に注意する。

Example: Yes, I am a patient person. When I was a child I used to be impatient, but as I grew up and started working with others, I learned to stay calm and wait for results. For example, collaborating on group projects taught me to listen and be tolerant of different working styles.

Suggestion: 答えが話の主題と一致しておらず、意味が不明瞭です（“It is my favorite that make me a patient” は不自然）。改善点：①質問に直接答える（例："I feel impatient when..."）。②具体例と理由を一つ示す（例：遅延や無断欠席など）。③接続語（because, so）を使って理由を明確にし、フィラーを減らす。

Example: I feel impatient when people are consistently late because it wastes everyone's time. For instance, if a meeting starts late due to delayed participants, I get frustrated since it disrupts the schedule and reduces productivity.

Suggestion: 表現は概ね明確ですが、繰り返しや不自然な語順（"the situation is embarrassing"）が見られます。改善点：①主題文で感情を一度で示す（"I feel..."）。②理由や対処法を具体的に述べる（how you manage long tasks）。③簡潔な文で、接続詞（so, therefore, because）を適切に使う。

Example: I feel irritated and a bit frustrated when I have to work on a task for a long time because it drains my energy. Therefore, I break the task into smaller parts and take short breaks to stay focused and finish more efficiently.

Suggestion: 回答は仕事の内容に触れており説得力がありますが、文法ミス（require → requires, a sound patient → to be patient/ a great deal of patience）や語彙の選択ミスがあります。改善点：①主題文を正確に、文法的に正しく言う（"Yes, my job requires a lot of patience."）。②具体的な例（学生の不正行為を指摘する、フィードバックを与えるなど）を一つ述べる。③接続語で論理をつなげる。

Example: Yes, my job requires a lot of patience. As a university lecturer, I often find students who submit copied reports, so I need to carefully review their work and explain the issues to help them learn and improve.

Suggestion: 主旨は理解できますが、時制と語順の誤り（become → have become/ became、development of characters）や冗長さがあります。改善点：①過去と現在を比較する際は時制に注意して一文で明確に答える（"Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child."）。②具体的な理由を一つ述べる（経験や仕事など）。③繰り返しを避け、簡潔にまとめる。

Example: Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child because dealing with colleagues and students taught me how to manage frustrations. Over time, those experiences helped me become calmer and more understanding.

× I think I'm a patient person.

✓ I think I'm a patient person.

This sentence is correct; present simple/progressive are used appropriately to state a general quality.

× Actually, when I was a child, I was not patient, but during the process of adaptation to society and, uh, coming of age, I got to be a patient person finally.

✓ Actually, when I was a child I was not patient, but during the process of adapting to society and coming of age I finally became a patient person.

'Got to be' is informal and awkward here; use past simple 'became' to describe a completed change in the past. 'Adaptation to society' should be 'adapting to society' (use gerund after 'process of' or rephrase to 'the process of adapting'). Remove extra commas and filler words for clarity.

× Uh, it's development and my character and.

✓ It was a combination of my personal development and my character.

Original fragment is incomplete and ungrammatical. Provide a full noun phrase and verb agreement: 'It was a combination of...' clarifies the idea and completes the sentence structure.

× It is my favorite that make me a patient, uh, because, uh, if I get angry about something, some problem may happen.

✓ My temperament helps me be patient because if I get angry about something, problems may happen.

'It is my favorite' is incorrect; use 'my temperament' or 'my nature'. 'Make me a patient' is wrong — use 'helps me be patient'. 'If I get angry about something, some problem may happen' should be 'problems may happen' for natural plural and word order.

× So I would like to avoid such a situation and, uh, this consideration, uh, make me a patient I would like to do.

✓ So I try to avoid such situations, and this consideration makes me patient.

Original sentence is awkward and ungrammatical. Use consistent subjects and verbs: 'this consideration makes me patient'. Remove redundant phrasing.

× In such a case, I feel irritated and frustrated.

✓ In such cases, I feel irritated and frustrated.

Use plural 'cases' for general statements about repeated situations; sentence otherwise correct.

× So I I have something or some task to do for a long time, then the situation is embarrassing and make me a bit frustrated.

✓ If I have a task to do for a long time, the situation becomes embarrassing and makes me a bit frustrated.

Remove duplicated 'I'. Use 'If' to form a conditional. 'Make' must agree with singular subject 'the situation' so use 'makes'. Use 'becomes' instead of 'is' for change of state.

× So I would like to complete this task as soon as possible.

✓ So I like to complete such tasks as soon as possible.

'Would like to' implies desire or request; for habitual preference use 'I like to'. Also pluralize 'task' to 'tasks' for generalization.

× Actually my job require me a sound patient.

✓ Actually my job requires me to be a patient person.

Subject 'job' is singular so verb must be 'requires'. 'Require me a sound patient' is ungrammatical; use 'requires me to be a patient person' or 'requires patience from me'.

× I'm a lecturer in university and uh some student are quite lazy and try to copy others a report.

✓ I'm a university lecturer and some students are quite lazy and try to copy others' reports.

Use 'a university lecturer' or 'a lecturer at a university'. 'Some student' needs plural 'students'. Possession for the reports should be 'others' reports' with apostrophe; place noun in plural 'reports'.

× So I have to closely check this report and if there is some problem I have to point out it.

✓ So I have to check these reports closely, and if there is a problem I have to point it out.

'Report' should be plural 'reports' to match earlier 'students' and general meaning. Adverb placement: 'check these reports closely'. 'Point out it' is incorrect order; correct is 'point it out'.

× Actually, I become more patient than I was young.

✓ Actually, I have become more patient than I was when I was young.

Use present perfect 'have become' to describe a change up to the present. Add 'when I was young' for grammatical completeness.

× So the process of adaptation to society and development of characters, I become more patient than ever now.

✓ Through the process of adapting to society and developing my character, I have become more patient than ever.

Reorder and rephrase for grammatical correctness: use gerunds 'adapting' and 'developing', and present perfect 'have become' for change up to now. 'Development of characters' is unclear; use 'developing my character'.

× So actually when I was a child, I easily feel irritated, felt irritated.

✓ When I was a child, I easily felt irritated.

Use past tense 'felt' for past habitual feelings. Remove duplicated 'feel/ felt'.