Patience— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more direct and concise: start with a clear topic sentence saying whether you are patient, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid hesitations and unclear words (e.g., “Cleveland” seems wrong). Use correct grammar for fluency: "I am not very patient, but I work hard and always try my best."

Example: I am not a very patient person, but I am hardworking and try to give 100% to everything I do. For example, when I study or work on a project I focus deeply and finish tasks even if they take a long time.

Suggestion: Answer directly: name the cause of impatience then explain with a specific reason and one brief example. Use linking words (because, so) and correct verb forms. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases like "brush to do things".

Example: I feel impatient when I have to make quick decisions because I worry about choosing the wrong option. For instance, when deciding on a job offer I rush and then later regret it, so now I try to pause and think carefully before deciding.

Suggestion: Begin with a clear topic sentence (e.g., I feel committed). Then give a specific example and a time frame. Correct word choice and grammar: use 'dedicated', 'it takes', and clearer linkers like 'for example' or 'for instance'.

Example: I feel committed and motivated when I work on something long-term. For example, studying English requires patience — it can take at least six months of regular practice to notice improvements in speaking and writing.

Suggestion: Answer directly whether your job requires patience, then give one specific reason and an example. Fix grammar (e.g., "I lack patience" or "I have to be patient") and use linking words like 'because' and 'for example'.

Example: Yes, my job requires a lot of patience because I work with people who have different personalities. For example, in team meetings I often listen carefully to others’ ideas and adapt my approach so we can work together more effectively.

Suggestion: State clearly that you are more patient now, then explain why with a specific strategy you use (e.g., asking others' opinions). Use correct grammar and concise linking words like 'now' and 'because'. Avoid fillers.

Example: Yes, I am much more patient now than when I was a child because I take time to think before deciding. For example, I now ask close friends for their opinions and consider different options before making important choices.

× Well, I honestly, I'm not a fully patient person, but I I'm a very hardworking person and I always have this Cleveland for myself and putting 100% my best into whatever I'm.

✓ Well, honestly, I'm not a very patient person, but I'm a very hardworking person and I always believe in myself and put 100% of my effort into whatever I do.

Original uses incorrect pronoun/word choice ('Cleveland' and 'for myself') and awkward structure. Replace 'a fully patient' with 'a very patient' and 'have this Cleveland for myself' with 'believe in myself'. Change 'putting 100% my best into whatever I'm' to 'put 100% of my effort into whatever I do' for correct verb form and object agreement.

× Well when I'm panic when it come to making the decision I always brush to do things and that's what make me impatient persons.

✓ Well, when I panic or when it comes to making decisions I always rush to do things and that's what makes me impatient.

Errors: wrong verb forms and noun forms. Use 'panic' correctly as 'when I panic', 'come' should be 'comes' (subject-verb agreement), 'decision' plural as 'decisions', 'brush' is wrong word form — should be 'rush', and 'make' must be 'makes' to agree with 'that'. Remove extra plural 'persons'.

× But I honestly I think I should be more patient thing D think carefully before making every decision so later in the future I won't forget.

✓ But honestly I think I should be more patient and think carefully before making every decision so later I won't regret it.

Problems: wrong word 'thing D', tense and word choice. Replace with 'and think carefully'. 'So later in the future I won't forget' is awkward; use 'so later I won't regret it' or 'so I won't forget later' to convey intended meaning; keep present tense for habitual/future consequence.

× Well, I feel responsible and dedicate at the keys, uh, in order to do something for a long time or period, for instance, like study English, it by take a long time, at least six months to be influenced in speaking and writing.

✓ Well, I feel responsible and dedicated when I need to do something for a long period. For instance, studying English takes a long time; it takes at least six months to see improvement in speaking and writing.

Errors: 'dedicate' (verb) should be adjective 'dedicated'; 'at the keys' is incorrect phrase; restructure to 'when I need to do something for a long period'. 'It by take' is incorrect — use 'it takes' and 'be influenced' should be 'see improvement' for natural English.

× Wow, ask my current job, I miss a loss of patient because I need to work with the other people with I have different personalities.

✓ At my current job, I sometimes lose patience because I need to work with other people who have different personalities.

Errors: 'Wow, ask my current job' is nonsensical — change to 'At my current job'. 'I miss a loss of patient' should be 'I sometimes lose patience' (correct verb and noun forms). 'with I have different personalities' should be 'who have different personalities' using correct relative pronoun.

× For instance, when you're working in the team, you need to adapt with the other team and you need to be patient understanding them.

✓ For instance, when you're working in a team, you need to adapt to the other team members and be patient and understanding with them.

Use 'in a team' not 'in the team' for general statement, 'adapt to' is the correct preposition, and 'other team' should be 'other team members'. Add 'with' after 'understanding' and include 'and' for parallel structure.

× Well, what we'll say I'm a lot more patient comparing to myself in the past.

✓ Well, I would say I'm a lot more patient compared to how I was in the past.

Use 'would say' (conditional phrase) or 'I would say' instead of 'what we'll say'. 'Comparing to myself in the past' is ungrammatical; use 'compared to how I was in the past' for correct comparison structure.

× Umm, I are now before making the decisions, I always things hopefully and ask for OP different opinions from close friends to make sure that I make the umm, correct uh, OP uh, decisions.

✓ Now, before making decisions, I always think carefully and ask for different opinions from close friends to make sure that I make the correct decisions.

Errors: subject-verb agreement 'I are' should be 'I am' or simply remove 'am' and start 'Now,'. 'always things hopefully' is nonsensical — use 'always think carefully'. Remove filler 'OP' and unnecessary hesitations. Plural 'decisions' is fine; keep present tense for habitual action.